The Country Squire Cafe
...a hard decision; the Right decision63 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow!! This is a wonderful story about a young man who has disappointed his mother because of his addiction. He thinks of her, and decides to make the decision to get help. This touched my heart in a way I can't even explain. Suffice it to say I've had to turn my back on my own adult son for the same reasons. It hurts so much, but I've done all I can. I pray every day that he makes the choice your character did!!
Thanks for the hope,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
Wow!! This is a wonderful story about a young man who has disappointed his mother because of his addiction. He thinks of her, and decides to make the decision to get help. This touched my heart in a way I can't even explain. Suffice it to say I've had to turn my back on my own adult son for the same reasons. It hurts so much, but I've done all I can. I pray every day that he makes the choice your character did!!
Thanks for the hope,
Rhonda
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I'm glad the story touched you, and perhaps gave you hope about your son.
~patty~
Comment from tfawcus
You set the scene superbly here with the details about the diner, the sights and smells. The internal struggle unfolds with realism, leading to his final decision. I think 'nawwing' should probably be 'gnawing'. Nicely written for the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
You set the scene superbly here with the details about the diner, the sights and smells. The internal struggle unfolds with realism, leading to his final decision. I think 'nawwing' should probably be 'gnawing'. Nicely written for the contest.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your time to read and review. I have gone back and edited for 'gnawing.' I truly appreciate you pointing that out.
Your words and stars mean a great deal to me.
~patty
Comment from oliver818
I enjoyed your story. I like the way you internalised the whole thing.
One little suggestion. The competition guidelines say it should be set at 4am, so you might want to mention that, and also add something about what circumstances lead to him being there at 4am. Just a suggestion.
Good luck with the competition!
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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
I enjoyed your story. I like the way you internalised the whole thing.
One little suggestion. The competition guidelines say it should be set at 4am, so you might want to mention that, and also add something about what circumstances lead to him being there at 4am. Just a suggestion.
Good luck with the competition!
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Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your time to read and review. I appreciate your kind words, and I will take your suggestions to heart.
~patty~