skittering leaves flee (haiku)
Run as fast as you can. Winter's coming.96 total reviews
Comment from pharp
Outstanding job in the penning of this Haiku, I love the artwork; you have chosen very clever and descriptive words to get you message across and finally your last line, the satori brings it all together. The very best to you in the contest and thanks for sharing a most delightful read. Blessings.................Portia
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Outstanding job in the penning of this Haiku, I love the artwork; you have chosen very clever and descriptive words to get you message across and finally your last line, the satori brings it all together. The very best to you in the contest and thanks for sharing a most delightful read. Blessings.................Portia
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Portia, for your generous review and for wishing me the best in the contest. I am glad you found my haiku to be "outstanding."
Comment from Oatmeal
Sis cat,
The arrangement is understandable and effective. Short, sweet and clean...just like I like them! The meter count is correct. The theme was well thought out.
This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Sis cat,
The arrangement is understandable and effective. Short, sweet and clean...just like I like them! The meter count is correct. The theme was well thought out.
This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Oatmeal, for your generous review of my "short, sweet and clean" haiku. I appreciate it.
Comment from Dustybones
Hello
Very cool Haika with the thought of almost dead leaves trying to save themselves by knocking on out doors. Rescue me, PLEASE. The key last line gave me room to think of winter's never ending threat to warmth.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Hello
Very cool Haika with the thought of almost dead leaves trying to save themselves by knocking on out doors. Rescue me, PLEASE. The key last line gave me room to think of winter's never ending threat to warmth.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Yes, Dustybones, my haiku is a horror movie about autumnal leaves fleeing stalking winter. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Intriguing artwork and good presentation.
-Format is good.
-Connection is good between lines one and two,
as well as effective imagery and alliteration.
-Very good satori.
-Interesting verb choices.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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-Intriguing artwork and good presentation.
-Format is good.
-Connection is good between lines one and two,
as well as effective imagery and alliteration.
-Very good satori.
-Interesting verb choices.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Pam, for your generous, thorough review and for wishing me success in the contest. I appreciate them.
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You are very welcome for the review and best wishes in the contest.
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine entry for the contest
written to the 5-7-5 school of haiku
Excellent imagery in the leaves/door
with good grammatical connection in present tense
and a touch of alliteration
A very good satori reflective line
Excellent picture to match
Well done
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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This is a fine entry for the contest
written to the 5-7-5 school of haiku
Excellent imagery in the leaves/door
with good grammatical connection in present tense
and a touch of alliteration
A very good satori reflective line
Excellent picture to match
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Thank you, rspoet, for your generous, thorough review and for wishing me success in the contest. I appreciate them.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A good haiku, my friend. A strong first and and line paint a good picture and your satori line works very well here. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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A good haiku, my friend. A strong first and and line paint a good picture and your satori line works very well here. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Debbie, for your generous, thorough review of my haiku which "paint a good picture" and for wishing me success in the contest. I appreciate them.
Comment from crybry67
This is a wonderfully well-written Haiku, such strong imagery. My favorite part is 'winter stalks autumn'. Wonderful presentation, avmurray does great work.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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This is a wonderfully well-written Haiku, such strong imagery. My favorite part is 'winter stalks autumn'. Wonderful presentation, avmurray does great work.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Yes, "winter stalks autumn" is terrifying for those fleeing leaves. Thank you for your review.
Comment from LIJ Red
Looks like five seven and four syllables to me, under the limit and acceptable, with
a message that is on all of our minds during this indian summer. Excellent.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Looks like five seven and four syllables to me, under the limit and acceptable, with
a message that is on all of our minds during this indian summer. Excellent.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Yes, LIJ Red, my haiku's message is on our minds during this Indian summer. Thank you for your review.
Comment from alvina224224
Haiku writing is one of my favourites, Sis Cat, and this post is one to remember. Using the right words, in the best way, is only part of the skill, I know. Creating meaningful images and relevant emotions is another part, and I feel this has been done expertly. Congratulations on the well-deserved Recognition Award badge.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Haiku writing is one of my favourites, Sis Cat, and this post is one to remember. Using the right words, in the best way, is only part of the skill, I know. Creating meaningful images and relevant emotions is another part, and I feel this has been done expertly. Congratulations on the well-deserved Recognition Award badge.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Alvina, for your generous, six star review of my haiku for "creating meaningful images and relevant emotions." I deeply appreciate it.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Your imagery in this haiku is brilliant. I love the idea of the ice as a door that bars fleeing leaves protection from the winter. Is this ekphrastic, or serendipity? Your picture is the perfect accompaniment to your words. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Your imagery in this haiku is brilliant. I love the idea of the ice as a door that bars fleeing leaves protection from the winter. Is this ekphrastic, or serendipity? Your picture is the perfect accompaniment to your words. :) Nancy
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Nancy, I wrote my haiku in thirty seconds but spent an hour finding an image to accompany it. The photographer froze leaves in s block of ice and photographed it. The technique evoked the images and mood my haiku created. Thank you for your generous, six star review.
