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skittering leaves flee (haiku)

Run as fast as you can. Winter's coming.

96 total reviews 
Comment from Mastery
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Hi, my friend. I think you have written a gem here, Andre. The strong verbs like "skittering" and "scratching" make this Haiku stand out. I wish you the best of luck in the contest and wil be rooting for you. :) Bob

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2016

reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
    Thank you, Bob, for your generous, six star review. Use of "strong verbs like 'skittering' and 'scratching' make this Haiku stand out." Thank you also for wishing me the best in the contest.
reply by Mastery on 09-Nov-2016
    :) Bob
Comment from robina1978
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Lovely photo that complements your little poem perfectly. It is a true Haiku, and I can relate to it. We had and have the same with skiddy leaves. Hard to walk the dog at night.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2016

reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
    Yes, Robina, it is hard to walk the dog at night with those skittering leaves. I fact, my haiku was partly inspired by those walks. I imagined the lees chasing us. Thank you for your generous review of my "true Haiku." I appreciate it.
Comment from judester
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Great entry. I love the word skittering as it describes the action and the sound of those dried leaves. Good imagery of the leaves at the door because that is what it looks like, leaves blown in a pile at the door...waiting to be let in? Cheers, j

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2016

reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
    Thank you, Judester, for your review and for wishing me success in the contest. Yes, skittering is a beautiful, descriptive word. Try as they might, I am not opening the door to let the leaves in! Thanks again.
Comment from Joan E.
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I admired your 5-7-5 haiku about the season changing from autumn to winter. Your alliteration of "s's" and "door" metaphor intensify your message. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2016

reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
    Thank you, Joan, for your review and for wishing me success in the contest because of the intensity of my metaphor. Thanks.
Comment from Gloria ....
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This is a most interesting haiku, sis. I like the idea of winter stalking autumn and the poor leaves trying to find any safe haven to escape its ravages.

Best wishes to you in the contest.

Gloria

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2016

reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
    Yes, Gloria, I feel sorry for those leaves, but I am not opening the door to let them in! Winter's stalking. Thank you for your review and for wishing me the best in the contest.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
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I think winter is here by now but it's taking its sweet time this year. Kind of makes us nervous about what the pay back will be but we will certainly enjoy the nice days because of your little reminder. Winter will be knocking soon enough

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2016

reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
    Yes, ExperiencingLiphe, winter will be knocking soon enough. Thank you for your review.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
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I especially love the line: "winter stalks autumn". That uses a few words to express a whole paragraph. Beautiful poem and illustration. Your imagery captures my imagination. Well done.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2016

reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
    Yes, Nancy, many have remarked about the power of the closing line to express a whole paragraph and capture the imagination. Thank you for your generous six star review.
Comment from Nika2016
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I like the scratching on door and winter stalking autumn...These tiny poems leave little to review...
The photo has an opaque
dreamy quality...
Nice.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2016

reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
    Thank you, Nika, for your generous review of my "tiny poem."
reply by Nika2016 on 08-Nov-2016
    :)
Comment from Kingsrookviii
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Excellent poem. Your use of Skittering and scratching actually gave me an auditory surprise of hearing with my mind's eye the leave scratch across a roadway or parking lot as they do. They do scratch! Also, the picture and colors were all spot on. Good job. Bruce.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2016

reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
    Thank you, Bruce, for your generous, six star review. I have been stalked by skittering, scratching leaves all fall before I wrote this haiku. I am glad it gave you "an auditory surprise." Thanks again.
reply by Kingsrookviii on 08-Nov-2016
    Wonderful poem! Bruce.
Comment from Pantygynt
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The idea of ice as the closed door is a splendid image central to this autumnal haiku. The satori line is quite exquisite. One feels as if the winter is about to pounce, as she has done here. No snow yet but it has gone really cold in the last few days.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2016

reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
    Yes, Pantygynt, winter is about to pounce. Thank you for your generous review. I appreciate it.