Where to now?
Three line poem.51 total reviews
Comment from Unspoken94
Only one with faith and hope could ask this question? Death
is but a moment in our lives. It's the dying that seems to be
a difficult time. Excellent piece for the contest, Roy. -Bill
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Only one with faith and hope could ask this question? Death
is but a moment in our lives. It's the dying that seems to be
a difficult time. Excellent piece for the contest, Roy. -Bill
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thanks Bill, for these generous comments and most encouraging review, blessings, Roy
Comment from zanya
Yes - one of life's great mysteries portrayed here within the confines of the short format of the 3 line poem - yet sufficent to engage the reader as to what those 'new beginnings' might be
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Yes - one of life's great mysteries portrayed here within the confines of the short format of the 3 line poem - yet sufficent to engage the reader as to what those 'new beginnings' might be
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thanks Zanya, for these generous comments and most encouraging review, blessings, Roy
Comment from Oatmeal
Roy,
The line count was within means. The flow was good. All arrangement is fine, smoothly readable and understandable. The descriptive words created wonderful impressions.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Roy,
The line count was within means. The flow was good. All arrangement is fine, smoothly readable and understandable. The descriptive words created wonderful impressions.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Thanks so much for your kindness and encouragement. Blessings, Roy
Comment from rjuselius
"Death is not the end
it's simply new beginnings
just where...is doubt's reaction"
this is a profound piece of poetry dear roy! i love the ending, it sums up faith nicely. the last line is pure genius. well done my friend!
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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"Death is not the end
it's simply new beginnings
just where...is doubt's reaction"
this is a profound piece of poetry dear roy! i love the ending, it sums up faith nicely. the last line is pure genius. well done my friend!
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Thanks dear Rebekka, you're a lovely friend, blessings Roy
Comment from sanejane
I like the message of this haiku. I like the first and second lines. I see no particular reason why I should be uncomfortable the last line. It makes perfect sense, completes your point, and fits with the requirements of haiku. I've played with that line (is that cheeky of me?), and I can't find a better way to put the message across. I have to conclude that my discomfort is more about the subject matter than the arangement. There's no question that this is a good poem.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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I like the message of this haiku. I like the first and second lines. I see no particular reason why I should be uncomfortable the last line. It makes perfect sense, completes your point, and fits with the requirements of haiku. I've played with that line (is that cheeky of me?), and I can't find a better way to put the message across. I have to conclude that my discomfort is more about the subject matter than the arangement. There's no question that this is a good poem.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Thanks Jane, for these generous comments and most encouraging review, I've had problems with that too, best I could think of, heh heh blessings, Roy
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Are you sure it wasn't just me being pernicketty? I have that tendency...
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Not at all, you were perfectly honesty and truthful, thank you
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I have to get used to that fact that I'm not going to get punched on the nose for critiqueing...
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Of course, they're a good bench here, by enlarge, are you new Jane? If so, welcome, consider me your friend, Roy
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I joined today, and have yet to find my way around. Thank you, Roy, for extending the hand of friendship. I think I'm going to like it here. Jane
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My pleasure
Comment from TallySally
Roy - your poem expresses deep thoughts in such a succinct way. This is hard to do, especially on the topic of death. As usual, you've done it very well.
God bless and my best,
Relda
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Roy - your poem expresses deep thoughts in such a succinct way. This is hard to do, especially on the topic of death. As usual, you've done it very well.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Thanks Relda, for these generous comments and most encouraging review, blessings, Roy
Comment from krys123
Hello my dear friend Roy;
-I thhink you got me on this one I'm a little lost at the connection between years last of your second line in the beginning to words of your third line. "Just is where doubts reaction" How shouldn't there be a question mark at the end of this line? If so then I could understand the writing very well.
-How many people know that there is life after death and those who don't I can justify you saying "where his doubts reaction".
-Quite cleverly witty of you and very unique in its conceptual theme.
-- I doubt very well that one can find a picture for something like this would normally you don't use pictures with your poems.
-You do very well in the contest Roy and take care and always have a good one if you can.
-Not to wish harm on anyone but I did hear a joke it was quite funny. And it pertains to our elections here in the states. How do you have Trump commit suicide, well, you put a mirror at the bottom of a swimming pool. I know I'm not supposed to wish harm on anyone but I just had to say this one.
Take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Hello my dear friend Roy;
-I thhink you got me on this one I'm a little lost at the connection between years last of your second line in the beginning to words of your third line. "Just is where doubts reaction" How shouldn't there be a question mark at the end of this line? If so then I could understand the writing very well.
-How many people know that there is life after death and those who don't I can justify you saying "where his doubts reaction".
-Quite cleverly witty of you and very unique in its conceptual theme.
-- I doubt very well that one can find a picture for something like this would normally you don't use pictures with your poems.
-You do very well in the contest Roy and take care and always have a good one if you can.
-Not to wish harm on anyone but I did hear a joke it was quite funny. And it pertains to our elections here in the states. How do you have Trump commit suicide, well, you put a mirror at the bottom of a swimming pool. I know I'm not supposed to wish harm on anyone but I just had to say this one.
Take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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I asked my wife, she agreed it wasn't a question, perhaps a period would have done in that last line, but those of us who believe, still harbour doubt Alex, it was a statement my friend, not a question, thanks for the great review, blessings, Roy
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Thanks for verifying that Roy and take care and have a good one and you are so welcome.
Alex
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Most welcome
Comment from l.raven
HI Roy, you are so very right...this is not the end....this is just the beginning...Heaven is home...eternally...very well written...my friend...Love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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HI Roy, you are so very right...this is not the end....this is just the beginning...Heaven is home...eternally...very well written...my friend...Love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Thanks Linda, for these generous comments and most encouraging review, blessings, Roy
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so welcome Roy...and Blessings to you too...Love xxoo
Comment from barleygirl
This is a thought-provoking statement that seems more cerebral, whereas many of these short poetic forms tend to be sensory. But I like that your statement is not too specific & left open for each reader's interpretation. I prefer seeing death as not such a horrible thing. I think your sentiments apply to the deceased as well as to those left behind. Grief can be a constructive process, not only a destructive one. Your ideas are provocative of related ideas.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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This is a thought-provoking statement that seems more cerebral, whereas many of these short poetic forms tend to be sensory. But I like that your statement is not too specific & left open for each reader's interpretation. I prefer seeing death as not such a horrible thing. I think your sentiments apply to the deceased as well as to those left behind. Grief can be a constructive process, not only a destructive one. Your ideas are provocative of related ideas.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Thanks so much for theses searching and gracious comments blessings, Roy
Comment from Jackarrie
An interesting 3 line poem,
Death is not the end
it's simply new beginnings
just where is doubt's reaction.
We will never know, so we either believe it's not the end, or
something else.
Good luck in the contest Mary
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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An interesting 3 line poem,
Death is not the end
it's simply new beginnings
just where is doubt's reaction.
We will never know, so we either believe it's not the end, or
something else.
Good luck in the contest Mary
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Thanks Mary, for these generous comments and most encouraging review, blessings, Roy
