For The Love Of Family
An alpha doe caring for her family31 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing this true story. I am glad it received the recognition it deserves by winning the contest. I relished all your imagery and was especially taken by how the moon did "spill silver light" and a "net of diamonds sparkled". Your addition of the creatures' sounds was magical as well. Keep up the great work- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2016
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Thank you for sharing this true story. I am glad it received the recognition it deserves by winning the contest. I relished all your imagery and was especially taken by how the moon did "spill silver light" and a "net of diamonds sparkled". Your addition of the creatures' sounds was magical as well. Keep up the great work- Joan
Comment Written 24-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2016
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Thank you. I love to do descriptive work and nature is perfect for this type of writing. I'm so glad you liked the short story.
Comment from --Turtle.
Hi, prettybluebirds,
Congrats on the contest win here with your POV of a deer sneaking her own to eat. I thought it did well in portraying the worries of the deer... also some great vivid details in the scene description. Strong descriptions, a pleasing read.
One place I paused:
old doe reached their(her)? goal
(Not sure... I just paused to think on it a moment ... not even a big deal)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Hi, prettybluebirds,
Congrats on the contest win here with your POV of a deer sneaking her own to eat. I thought it did well in portraying the worries of the deer... also some great vivid details in the scene description. Strong descriptions, a pleasing read.
One place I paused:
old doe reached their(her)? goal
(Not sure... I just paused to think on it a moment ... not even a big deal)
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thank you. I love doing descriptive writng and nature is a perfect place to use it.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is an outstanding piece that I enjoyed so much. I wish I had a
sixer for you. Tender, interesting, anticipatory in its impending sadness. Deer are beautiful creatures and I grieve ahead of time for them. Very nicely done. Marilyn
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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This is an outstanding piece that I enjoyed so much. I wish I had a
sixer for you. Tender, interesting, anticipatory in its impending sadness. Deer are beautiful creatures and I grieve ahead of time for them. Very nicely done. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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Thank you. It is so easy to do descriptive work when one is working with animals or nature.
Comment from BlueTiger
Great job! I love all of the detail in this piece. While there is some underlying tension, the story as a whole feels peaceful and relaxing. A very creative, descriptive piece.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Great job! I love all of the detail in this piece. While there is some underlying tension, the story as a whole feels peaceful and relaxing. A very creative, descriptive piece.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thank you. I love to do descriptive writing. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from Mabaker
And some humans despair of the mess and damage caused by the deer who need to eat to stay alive so the hunters can load their guns and shoot them and in turn eat them. Like a circle round and round life and death. Hope you do well in the contest. regards Mabaker
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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And some humans despair of the mess and damage caused by the deer who need to eat to stay alive so the hunters can load their guns and shoot them and in turn eat them. Like a circle round and round life and death. Hope you do well in the contest. regards Mabaker
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thank you. Yep, as farmers we have eaten a lot of venison. We never begrudged them what they ate.
Comment from pome lover
lovely, lovely, lovely! - from the description of the opening scene, right to the end. It reminded me of Bambi and his mother entering the meadow for his first time. You portrayed the doe's movements perfectly.
We have a lot of deer roaming our woodsy neighborhoods in San Antonio, and at night you can see their green eyes glowing and their cautious steps before crossing a yard.
very well done.
pome lover, Katharine
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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lovely, lovely, lovely! - from the description of the opening scene, right to the end. It reminded me of Bambi and his mother entering the meadow for his first time. You portrayed the doe's movements perfectly.
We have a lot of deer roaming our woodsy neighborhoods in San Antonio, and at night you can see their green eyes glowing and their cautious steps before crossing a yard.
very well done.
pome lover, Katharine
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thank you for reading and your great comments. I love to do descriptive writing.
Comment from oliver818
I really enjoyed this beautiful little Autumn description. It's very easy to read and yet full of wonderful little details which really bring the reader into the mind of this mother deer. thanks for sharing and best of luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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I really enjoyed this beautiful little Autumn description. It's very easy to read and yet full of wonderful little details which really bring the reader into the mind of this mother deer. thanks for sharing and best of luck with the contest!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thank you, I love to do descriptive writing. Writing about animals and nature is the perfect spot for this type of writing.
Comment from William Ross
very good, great write on this for the autumn feast. a mother deer taking care of her little ones. Nicely done. good luck on this and have a great day.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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very good, great write on this for the autumn feast. a mother deer taking care of her little ones. Nicely done. good luck on this and have a great day.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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Thank you, William. Glad you enjoyed the story.
Comment from damommy
What a lovely story. It has a primeval feel about it. As you pointed out, deer have been passing down their knowledge since the beginning of time.
I really enjoyed reading this. It's well written and flows easily when reading. I saw a very vivid picture of this little herd. Well done. 8-)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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What a lovely story. It has a primeval feel about it. As you pointed out, deer have been passing down their knowledge since the beginning of time.
I really enjoyed reading this. It's well written and flows easily when reading. I saw a very vivid picture of this little herd. Well done. 8-)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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Thank you. I love writing about nature and wild things. One can do such great descriptive work with nature.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
INteresting and well written with good descriptions. All farmers learn to hate dear if they grow corn. My uncle shot them and it was permitted by his state, since they do a lot of damage to gardens and crops. They invade yards in places, too, eating flowers and destroying landscape plantings. It's too bad, because they're so pretty. I would love to have them in my yard. THey're welcome to eat it all! :)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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INteresting and well written with good descriptions. All farmers learn to hate dear if they grow corn. My uncle shot them and it was permitted by his state, since they do a lot of damage to gardens and crops. They invade yards in places, too, eating flowers and destroying landscape plantings. It's too bad, because they're so pretty. I would love to have them in my yard. THey're welcome to eat it all! :)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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Thank you. I would love to give you a few of our deer. They eat the crops every year but we just live with it.
