The True Beauty Of A Woman
A short essay about the beauty of a loving wife.23 total reviews
Comment from Susanjohn
I sure hope you read this to your wife!!!! what a lovely poem!!..so lovingly expressed and just so touching!!! I think I'M melting!!! LOL..enjoyed reading!! :-)))
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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I sure hope you read this to your wife!!!! what a lovely poem!!..so lovingly expressed and just so touching!!! I think I'M melting!!! LOL..enjoyed reading!! :-)))
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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You were the last review I got for this essay and the first six. I'm so flattered at your wonderful review. No, I didn't read to her, I just let her read it on Fanstory. Then we went through the first twenty reviews or so. She was blown away. Thanks again for the awesome review and six stars. I'll be by your site to read soon. I didn't mean to melt you!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from heisemg
No more beautiful words have every been written. You touched me with your story. I too am approaching a 40 year anniversary (38 years of marriage and 2 years of dating). There is physical beauty as you point out, but there is that intangible beauty that is so difficult to define. You defined it. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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No more beautiful words have every been written. You touched me with your story. I too am approaching a 40 year anniversary (38 years of marriage and 2 years of dating). There is physical beauty as you point out, but there is that intangible beauty that is so difficult to define. You defined it. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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Many thanks for the awesome review. There is a strength in two people that can last the test of time. Many people find the faults of others and dwell on them until they drive them apart. I've watched several friends do this recently. But if you can look over them love will grow. Thanks again.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Tender message about what makes a woman beautiful. I'm glad you found what you were looking for. :)
In the lines below, the commas are all incorrect for the same reason. Delete all three.
man or woman, light a fire
for each other, stills burns
wife who embodies, the true beauty
each others touch <-- Need apostrophe on OTHER'S
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Tender message about what makes a woman beautiful. I'm glad you found what you were looking for. :)
In the lines below, the commas are all incorrect for the same reason. Delete all three.
man or woman, light a fire
for each other, stills burns
wife who embodies, the true beauty
each others touch <-- Need apostrophe on OTHER'S
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for your help with this essay. It's deeply appreciated.
Have a great day ad God bless.
mike
Comment from cumulus365
Who says a man can't write a lovely descriptive essay about his wife. You broke that myth. You touched every note about your beautiful wife whom you are so proud to sing at the top out your lungs. I am so glad you found the love of your life. What a blessing to have a beautiful marry life.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Who says a man can't write a lovely descriptive essay about his wife. You broke that myth. You touched every note about your beautiful wife whom you are so proud to sing at the top out your lungs. I am so glad you found the love of your life. What a blessing to have a beautiful marry life.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Thanks so much for the awesome review and Kind words. I broke a myth, cool!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Tpa
Congratulations both on your marriage and your exquisite essay that shows the value of a person is within more than their exterior. I enjoyed the metaphor of the drink and your YES! beauty on the outside is important but only secondary. Real beauty comes from the heart. It sounds like you found both. WISH YOU FORTY MORE!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Congratulations both on your marriage and your exquisite essay that shows the value of a person is within more than their exterior. I enjoyed the metaphor of the drink and your YES! beauty on the outside is important but only secondary. Real beauty comes from the heart. It sounds like you found both. WISH YOU FORTY MORE!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Thank you for the awesome review and best wishes. Let's hope for forty more!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Dawn Munro
What a wonderful testament to true devotion this is, a romantic view of beauty.
I have noted a few small edits you might wish to consider, although the overall write is compelling :
1) no comma needed after "features"
2) "The quality of being physically attractive." - is a fragmented sentence.
3) comma needed between adjectives - "warm(,) loving heart..."
4) Here a semi-colon or double dash: "...shot of whiskey; hear me out."
5) "A beauty that fills..." - is another fragmented sentence, as is this:
6) Even at the cost..."
There are more terse and fragmented sentences, and I understand that it's a style of writing for impact. However, the same can be accomplished with punctuation. For example, here: "Is there a spiritual beauty, a beauty that fills our hearts with love?"
By continuing the sentence, you can add punch with semi-colons, commas and double dashes, without losing grammatical correctness.
7) no comma needed after "embodies"
All in all, I enjoyed this; your style is 'fireside-chat comfortable'. Very nice! :)
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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What a wonderful testament to true devotion this is, a romantic view of beauty.
I have noted a few small edits you might wish to consider, although the overall write is compelling :
1) no comma needed after "features"
2) "The quality of being physically attractive." - is a fragmented sentence.
3) comma needed between adjectives - "warm(,) loving heart..."
4) Here a semi-colon or double dash: "...shot of whiskey; hear me out."
5) "A beauty that fills..." - is another fragmented sentence, as is this:
6) Even at the cost..."
There are more terse and fragmented sentences, and I understand that it's a style of writing for impact. However, the same can be accomplished with punctuation. For example, here: "Is there a spiritual beauty, a beauty that fills our hearts with love?"
By continuing the sentence, you can add punch with semi-colons, commas and double dashes, without losing grammatical correctness.
7) no comma needed after "embodies"
All in all, I enjoyed this; your style is 'fireside-chat comfortable'. Very nice! :)
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your help with this essay, it's deeply appreciated.
Have a great and God bless.
mike
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, it's obvious you've found not only the woman of your life, but also the love of your life. What a fantastic tribute to pay. I hope she will be thrilled when she sees it. Well done.Only suggestion would be: 'It reminds me of a shot of whiskey. Hear me out.' Comes across a bit abrupt. What about: Now, please do hear me out.
Only a suggestion. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Hi there, it's obvious you've found not only the woman of your life, but also the love of your life. What a fantastic tribute to pay. I hope she will be thrilled when she sees it. Well done.Only suggestion would be: 'It reminds me of a shot of whiskey. Hear me out.' Comes across a bit abrupt. What about: Now, please do hear me out.
Only a suggestion. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Thank you my friend for the help and best wishes. It's deeply appreciated.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from BlueTiger
Great Job, Mike. Your wife seems like a strong, truly beautiful woman, and your love really comes through in this essay. A couple of suggestions:
It reminds me of a shot of whiskey - hear me out. (I'd use this punctuation here)
I found a wife who embodies the true beauty of a woman. (you can take out the comma from the last line)
Nice work, and happy anniversary!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Great Job, Mike. Your wife seems like a strong, truly beautiful woman, and your love really comes through in this essay. A couple of suggestions:
It reminds me of a shot of whiskey - hear me out. (I'd use this punctuation here)
I found a wife who embodies the true beauty of a woman. (you can take out the comma from the last line)
Nice work, and happy anniversary!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Thank you for the awesome review and help with this essay. It's deeply appreciated.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
How lovely that was to read, and what a lovely sentiment expressed about the love of your life, your wife. I think you are truly a happy man in every sense of the word with the joy you so wonderfully express in your writing. It was nice of your to share your thoughts, and I agree with them all. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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How lovely that was to read, and what a lovely sentiment expressed about the love of your life, your wife. I think you are truly a happy man in every sense of the word with the joy you so wonderfully express in your writing. It was nice of your to share your thoughts, and I agree with them all. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Thank you for the awesome and best wishes. It's deeply appreciated.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow!!
This is one of the most moving love prose I've ever read.
I'll be honest, if my husband presented this to me for an anniversary gift, he wouldn't have to do anything else but put a frame on it and put it in the center of the wall.
I am impressed by the strength and message of your essay.
This is way beyond a romantic story, anyone can be sappy. This is real feelings and emotion!
Well done, and Happy Anniversary!
Rhonda
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Wow!!
This is one of the most moving love prose I've ever read.
I'll be honest, if my husband presented this to me for an anniversary gift, he wouldn't have to do anything else but put a frame on it and put it in the center of the wall.
I am impressed by the strength and message of your essay.
This is way beyond a romantic story, anyone can be sappy. This is real feelings and emotion!
Well done, and Happy Anniversary!
Rhonda
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Thank you for the awesome review and best wishes. It's deeply appreciated.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
