To Last Forever
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Comment from Oatmeal
reconciled,
This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. Very nicely written work. Perfectly arranged. It made for an enjoyable read. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I live in Kansas now but I was born and raised in Texas. Yee Hah! lol
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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reconciled,
This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. Very nicely written work. Perfectly arranged. It made for an enjoyable read. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I live in Kansas now but I was born and raised in Texas. Yee Hah! lol
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Real love between two people does indeed have its teeter-tottering moments as this well written poem depicts.
Comparing the ups and downs of a relationship to a child's game creates a different perspective.
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Real love between two people does indeed have its teeter-tottering moments as this well written poem depicts.
Comparing the ups and downs of a relationship to a child's game creates a different perspective.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
Comment from MissMerri
I think your adorable animation at the top of your poem is a perfect illustration of how I have felt at times... Which made me then identify even more strongly with the sentiments expressed in your poem. I love how you pack so much feeling into your words. I'm not sure that is something that can be learned... or taught.. But is obviously a gift you have. My favorite lines are probably these... "ocean everything crystal clear / Spring water precious air /held breath next to you ... " But I liked all of it and see nothing at all I'd want to change. The song is one I've never heard before, but then, I've led a sheltered life, I admit. It was the perfect accompaniment to your poem. Reading your poetry is a unique experience, Michael... Unique and unforgettable. Thank you for the relatable words... the shared emotion... And the inspiration to write better poetry. I want to find what you've found.
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I think your adorable animation at the top of your poem is a perfect illustration of how I have felt at times... Which made me then identify even more strongly with the sentiments expressed in your poem. I love how you pack so much feeling into your words. I'm not sure that is something that can be learned... or taught.. But is obviously a gift you have. My favorite lines are probably these... "ocean everything crystal clear / Spring water precious air /held breath next to you ... " But I liked all of it and see nothing at all I'd want to change. The song is one I've never heard before, but then, I've led a sheltered life, I admit. It was the perfect accompaniment to your poem. Reading your poetry is a unique experience, Michael... Unique and unforgettable. Thank you for the relatable words... the shared emotion... And the inspiration to write better poetry. I want to find what you've found.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, you have always had such a way with words...making your poetry speak the way nobody else could...I have never seen before...amazing...love everlasting teeter totters us...between two...same point of view...I love your poem you...and a great song...love you...Linda xxoo
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HI Michael, you have always had such a way with words...making your poetry speak the way nobody else could...I have never seen before...amazing...love everlasting teeter totters us...between two...same point of view...I love your poem you...and a great song...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hello, Michael.
I trust that today finds you well?
You know, your poetry always reminds me of another very popular free verse poet from Illinois whose work once graced these hallowed pages here at FanStory.
His name was Ed, but we all knew him simply as "ravenblack."
Yours is just as metaphorical in content and composition, and every bit as alluring.
Take care, Michael, and thank you for sharing your poetic prowess with us once again.
~Dean
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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Hello, Michael.
I trust that today finds you well?
You know, your poetry always reminds me of another very popular free verse poet from Illinois whose work once graced these hallowed pages here at FanStory.
His name was Ed, but we all knew him simply as "ravenblack."
Yours is just as metaphorical in content and composition, and every bit as alluring.
Take care, Michael, and thank you for sharing your poetic prowess with us once again.
~Dean
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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yes I remember Ed...
but I believe I was born here first... its okay, I'm used to little notice....-smile- respect is lived. love Michael
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I only mention Ed because he and I were mutual fans of each others work, Michael. Whenever I read something of Ed's, he was always so kind to reciprocate with a review.
That, and I'd wondered what happened to him; what caused him to leave FanStory so suddenly.
I very much enjoy your unique style in and of itself.
By the way, have you been experiencing any difficulties with Photobucket lately? I can't seem to get anything I have saved there to display.
~Dean
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yes...yes I certainly have. apparently theyve wiped out half my life....let me know if you see it....love-
Comment from winnona
Your well-chosen words seem to flow easily together combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your choice of background and music completed the piece well.
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Your well-chosen words seem to flow easily together combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your choice of background and music completed the piece well.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
Comment from amada
I like this a lot, Michael. Your voice as well as the singer's voice. They both blend "to and fro." I like the repetition of those words. A very creative...teeter totters...you!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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I like this a lot, Michael. Your voice as well as the singer's voice. They both blend "to and fro." I like the repetition of those words. A very creative...teeter totters...you!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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-headwag-....you do....-smile-
well if you love me dont let go....cause I'm a lil' unsteady. -headwag-
love you Michael
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Michael, I really liked the teeter-totter imagery for love, both within you and for someone. It seems so, the sway of emotion and all it brings. I thought your images were stark, yet held their own beauty. Nicely done my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
m
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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Dear Michael, I really liked the teeter-totter imagery for love, both within you and for someone. It seems so, the sway of emotion and all it brings. I thought your images were stark, yet held their own beauty. Nicely done my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
m
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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Hey...-smile-
-headtilt-...very nice to see you. yes...I ah didnt know really where it...I was going. usually thats normal...it comes together in play...you know....anyway, I could see where I was close to the end.....or where I thought it should. was here.....where I've changed it back to. Love or lasting love being a teeter totter effort....made fun...easy. and the support that kind of love affords. but I was in a mood last night and recoginzed the irony in my reality with the photo I chose my options were few and for some reason that one captured my attention. so I changed two words and its entire meaning...sarcastic. then I woke up feeling better....-smile-...and there young Lady is the truth the whole truth and nothing...but I love you....michael
Comment from MizKat
Hi Michael.
This is a nice poem too. So you're writing more poems than one in a day. I wish I could do that but it takes me weeks to write one poem. LOL I finally got one posted called: "Wonders of Faith".
Kat
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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2016
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Hi Michael.
This is a nice poem too. So you're writing more poems than one in a day. I wish I could do that but it takes me weeks to write one poem. LOL I finally got one posted called: "Wonders of Faith".
Kat
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Comment Written 03-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2016
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Mom!...O thank God. would you please leave that light on.....Jesus...youre hard to live with. aha....-smile- hello you adorable Mother love....ahh missed you. yes of course break out the milk and cookies ...I'm coming. love you Michael
Comment from djsaxon
Dearest Michael. How dare you make me think LOL. Clever pen, great music choice as always. Paint on. much love - DJ xxx
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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2016
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Dearest Michael. How dare you make me think LOL. Clever pen, great music choice as always. Paint on. much love - DJ xxx
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Comment Written 03-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2016
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yes Sir...just one of them night poems. I used to drink when I was in the Navy...didn't have time this stuff. Anyway...appreciate ya Bro...hug your family for me. love Michael
