Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

That was a tragic story of this young girl and how there were those who would rather kill her than hear or read what she had to say, Patricia

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016

Thanks Patricia for your review on my acrostic, I really appreciate it. Mary

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A need for education is something that many lack who have the opportunity to be educated. The past two months students in our country vandalize our universities, in a quest to free education.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016

Thanks Sandra for you review and comments.

Comment from RoostyNester

Excellent

A very nice Acrostic Freedom poem. Well done in style and verse. Giving insight to the trouble that others have had to suffer for the chance at freedom. Loved the picture.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016

Thank you so much for your excellent review on my acrostic poem. It is encouraging.

Comment from joannakruk

Excellent

Fantastic rhythm , an appreciation of a child hero who pursued a belief in freedom to the detriment of her own safety. What a dire social position to be stuck in, freedom of speech thwarted and the potential for self development virtually non existent. Unfortunately? many who have battled the same issue have not survived to tell the tale. A very respectful ode to a freedom fighter. Well done.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016

Thanks for the encouraging review on my acrostic.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

A wonderful poem about one of the bravest people alive. It will be interesting to see what she becomes. Perhaps a great leader. She's an inspiration.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016

Thanks Thomas for your encouraging review and great comments.

Comment from mvbrooks

Excellent

The words are strong and serve as a testament to the subject's strength and perseverance.

Confusing though--in what way is this an acrostic? Should each line start with the letters of FREEDOM?

Consider viewing the other entries to see that consistent format.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2016

Thanks for po[nting out that the lines were all mixed up the advanced editor does this sometimes with the text, I would like you to see now how it was intended.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

A well-written contest entry. Your words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your photo finished the poem well.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2016

Thanks winnona for your encouraging review

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes you have done very well using the word freedom to express your thoughts about this very brave lady good luck in the contest regards Jill

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2016

Thanks for the excellent review and great comments.

Comment from kathleenspalding

Excellent

Five stars for worthy subject matter and an original take on the prompt. I think you could revisit the poem and come up with a few better words/lines for rhythm and impact here and there, but the overall message more than makes up for that. Thank you for keeping people aware!

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2016

Thank you so much for your review and your helpful suggestions, I have changed it around. I wonder if you could look at it again, for comment

reply by kathleenspalding on 03-Nov-2016

Hi. I like your changes, but they are appearing out of order. Also, would it be justice against the ban? Could say earning instead of receiving for rhyme. Maybe at the end say Malala survived the assassin's bullet? (Need her name in the poem, I think.) Good luck in the contest!

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

What a beautiful girl and I so agree with this and want to thank you dearly for entering this fine poem to my contest. It is Phenominal penning.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2016

Thank you for your encouraging review, I have changed it to make it flow better.