Ladybird
3-5-3 contest3 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute 3-5-3 poem you have penned for the contest. I love ladybugs too. You used very cute descriptive wording and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
This is a very cute 3-5-3 poem you have penned for the contest. I love ladybugs too. You used very cute descriptive wording and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your review
Comment from cumulus365
This is a very compact poem that does not need a comma after the word paradise and there would not need of a period even you want to show the ending of the poem as in a paragraph. The lines meet the 3/5/3 syllables to give a story of the garden. I read line 3 specifying a ladybird; however, the illustration shows a ladybug, is there another meaning to the ladybird? In line 1, I think that you are trying to connect that this most dainty but very useful creature to a gardener/farmer is that it eats up aphids like it is in the garden of paradise.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
This is a very compact poem that does not need a comma after the word paradise and there would not need of a period even you want to show the ending of the poem as in a paragraph. The lines meet the 3/5/3 syllables to give a story of the garden. I read line 3 specifying a ladybird; however, the illustration shows a ladybug, is there another meaning to the ladybird? In line 1, I think that you are trying to connect that this most dainty but very useful creature to a gardener/farmer is that it eats up aphids like it is in the garden of paradise.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your review
Comment from Daniel Silverhawk
You have captured the essence of how tiny this ladybird is in the taking of small steps. You also followed the 3-5-3 format. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
You have captured the essence of how tiny this ladybird is in the taking of small steps. You also followed the 3-5-3 format. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 29-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Thanks