Comment from LaRosa

Excellent

What an unusual thought: a counting poem. It's fun and makes one want to see what's coming next. So, one/two, buckle my shoe. I used to wish that little ditty would keep going after TEN.

Even the stanzas grow right along with the size of the numbers! Thank goodness it's not sing-songy!

You have captured the "child" in all of us.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016

Comment from Liberty Justice

Exceptional

Six stars. Love way you describe waiting on Halloween. Poet shows anxiousness impatient waiting on Halloween. Well written font and colors displayed well. liberty justice

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016

Comment from nordicgirl

Exceptional

This is really cute, michael. Perfect for a kid. I can feel the early frustration and the excitement build as the day approaches. I enjoyes rhis a lpt. NG

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Michael,

I enjoyed your potlatch poem. The picture is really cute in a fun way. I can feel the frustration of the child as s/he counts down the days. I can also feel the anticipation when Halloween finally arrives. I like the line about 'candy waits for me.'

You did a great job with the prompt. This is a fun, kid-oriented poem that all would like to read more than once.

Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

Ha! What a fun, whimsical little piece you have crafted Mikey! I enjoyed this and will certainly share with the family. I hope your Halloween is a bit of frightening fun young man.
God Bless!
Steve

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016

Comment from Susanjohn

Exceptional

MIKEY!!!!!!!!! this is so very cute, fun, clever and very imaginative!!! I love it!!! you did a great job...Halloween's almost here!!! Time for fun!!

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

I'm sure she'd be happy you were writing poetry, Mikey. I really like and enjoyed reading it. I particularly like the internal rhyme which pushed the poem along. Happy Halloween, Mikey, hugs, Giddy :))

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I laughed at your poem. My first graders have asked me everyday, if it was Halloween and every day we've counted down to it. LOL Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Good evening to you Mikey and fellow Californian;
-well, I don't think Brooke would actually care for this one too much Mikey. As your counting is fine, in the fact, that the mathematics in this poem works well, however,
the conceptual theme is lacking the concrete substance that is projected from using descriptive and expressive imagery, that is both demonstrative and vivid.
-This, of course, makes the enjambment of your poem less construed and this lacking of substance doesn't keep the reader hooked on what you're writing about.
-If you were to creep up on your verses and lines as though you worry vampire ready to bite or a ghost hauntingly un-evaporating itself to scare, then this would be great.
-Yes, I think Brooke would definitely help you on this one.
-Take care my good friend and let your fingers dance on your ax.
Alex

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I liked it Michael. Is the photo of what you would look like with a beard? LOL Halloween is not a day I celebrate, but some of the writing is fun, just as your is, Patricia

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016