Family Poems and Stories 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Life is a gift"...musings on us
12 total reviews
Comment from RazorFace
My wife is bipolar and though she has attempted to kill herself twice, we are both happy that she failed. Medication and giving the right amount of "space" to be alone and also being there without pressure combined with medication and occasional shrink therapy and life is good for us. Bipolar is a hard condition for people who do not deal with it to understand. I thought you brought that out well.
From the writers aspect I think you used "she" too much. You also used quotation marks sometimes for her thoughts and sometimes not, personally recommend either one or the other, not so confusing. I get confused easily :).
I leave grammar to the other reviewers, my grammar is terrible so I seldom go there.
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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My wife is bipolar and though she has attempted to kill herself twice, we are both happy that she failed. Medication and giving the right amount of "space" to be alone and also being there without pressure combined with medication and occasional shrink therapy and life is good for us. Bipolar is a hard condition for people who do not deal with it to understand. I thought you brought that out well.
From the writers aspect I think you used "she" too much. You also used quotation marks sometimes for her thoughts and sometimes not, personally recommend either one or the other, not so confusing. I get confused easily :).
I leave grammar to the other reviewers, my grammar is terrible so I seldom go there.
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your time to read and review. I will take your suggestions into consideration for my future writing. The contest is closed, so I don't know the edits will help at this point. I will probably edit after the voting is done.
I do appreciate your time.
~patty~
Comment from KjSilver
I think the story was good. It definitely buckled you in and took you round on its ride. I like the movie thing--very real for most people. Shrek is my therapy. I think you did a fine job of transferring the depression to the page, and from the page, we readers get a dose.
Good work and good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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I think the story was good. It definitely buckled you in and took you round on its ride. I like the movie thing--very real for most people. Shrek is my therapy. I think you did a fine job of transferring the depression to the page, and from the page, we readers get a dose.
Good work and good luck.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your time to read and review. I appreciate your comments, and I'm glad you connected with the story.
Comment from winnona
A very well written contest entry. your words move along and flow easily from beginning to end. I think you completed the challenge of the contest quite well.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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A very well written contest entry. your words move along and flow easily from beginning to end. I think you completed the challenge of the contest quite well.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for your time to read and review. I appreciate your positive comments and well wishes.
Comment from Mabaker
Well written even though I had to make myself continue reading as the depression came through the words clearly, I found it a bit too deep. Yes I know Bipolar is a walking death. You also realised self-help worked wonders. The Christmas movies, the mundane tasks of caring for your dogs. These all helped pull you back from the edge.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Well written even though I had to make myself continue reading as the depression came through the words clearly, I found it a bit too deep. Yes I know Bipolar is a walking death. You also realised self-help worked wonders. The Christmas movies, the mundane tasks of caring for your dogs. These all helped pull you back from the edge.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your time to read and review. I appreciate your kind words and feedback.
Comment from royowen
Like you, Christ is my hope and my light, my consolation, my healing and salvation, as scripture says, reflect on these things. Thanks for writing this comprehensive run down on what bipolar is all about, I have one or two that have it, but are Christians and have learnt to cope. This is a good site for people sharing their particular story. Well presented, interesting and thorough in its delivery, great entry in the contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Like you, Christ is my hope and my light, my consolation, my healing and salvation, as scripture says, reflect on these things. Thanks for writing this comprehensive run down on what bipolar is all about, I have one or two that have it, but are Christians and have learnt to cope. This is a good site for people sharing their particular story. Well presented, interesting and thorough in its delivery, great entry in the contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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thank you for your time to read and review. I appreciate your kind words, and comments. Christ helps me make it through most of my days!
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I can't imagine how I coped before I knew, as a matter of fact, there were many grey skies.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I know people who put their Christmas tree up right after Halloween, I'd be one of them if my husband would let me. And if Christmas movies is what it takes to feel better then who cares what anyone else thinks. I've had a rough week and watched an old movie from my childhood, it was great. Wonderful job
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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I know people who put their Christmas tree up right after Halloween, I'd be one of them if my husband would let me. And if Christmas movies is what it takes to feel better then who cares what anyone else thinks. I've had a rough week and watched an old movie from my childhood, it was great. Wonderful job
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your time to read and review. The 6 stars are icing on the cake of a story well received.
~patty~
Comment from N.K. Wagner
You've done an excellent job of portraying the climb out of the depression swing of bipolar disease. You're right. It's not easy for anyone to live with or around. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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You've done an excellent job of portraying the climb out of the depression swing of bipolar disease. You're right. It's not easy for anyone to live with or around. :) Nancy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read the story, and for your kind words. It was a daunting task to accurately describe the swirling emotions, but it was worth the time.
Comment from jlsavell
author, I cannot thank you enough for taking me into this world. Bi Polar is greatly misunderstood. My heart goes out to those who suffer and I truly believe I have dealt with bi polar on a very personal level, not me, but someone I care for deeply, This is truly a moving work.. wow... jlsavell
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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author, I cannot thank you enough for taking me into this world. Bi Polar is greatly misunderstood. My heart goes out to those who suffer and I truly believe I have dealt with bi polar on a very personal level, not me, but someone I care for deeply, This is truly a moving work.. wow... jlsavell
Comment Written 29-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your kind words. This story comes from a deep place. I'm glad you were able to get a glimpse of this dark world.
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no thank you. I feel you are probably one who knows this well. You would have to be to write of it so eloquently. thank you for sharing..
Comment from clsandau
Thank you for a very enlightening and well written post. You have described the emotions and feelings in thoughtful detail. Our daughter-in-law's mother suffers from this debilitating disease, so I think I have quite a bit of insight into it. Unlike you, she only has a daughter as a close relative. She also adores our son, but they have no children, hence no grandchildren. She considers our 6 grandchildren as hers, which we are happy to share. Now they live in a different city, so unfortunately we don't get to see Nellie very often. She still remembers us in her good moments, but there are less of those now. Thanks again for sharing your feelings, certainly helps me with understanding more fully. I am glad God is in your life, as it is in Nellie's. Blessings, Carol
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thank you for a very enlightening and well written post. You have described the emotions and feelings in thoughtful detail. Our daughter-in-law's mother suffers from this debilitating disease, so I think I have quite a bit of insight into it. Unlike you, she only has a daughter as a close relative. She also adores our son, but they have no children, hence no grandchildren. She considers our 6 grandchildren as hers, which we are happy to share. Now they live in a different city, so unfortunately we don't get to see Nellie very often. She still remembers us in her good moments, but there are less of those now. Thanks again for sharing your feelings, certainly helps me with understanding more fully. I am glad God is in your life, as it is in Nellie's. Blessings, Carol
Comment Written 27-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your thoughtful and kind review. I'm glad that the story helped you to understand someone in your life that battles the disease a bit more. It isn't easy to live with, and sometimes I think it is harder for the people around the person. You never know how they will be, or where in the cycle of illness they are.
I greatly appreciate all of the stars.
~patty~
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Yes, we have certainly observed the ups and downs and how difficult it is to deal with. Thanks for more insight and blessings to you. Carol
Comment from William Ross
A great write on bi polar disease, I have suffered I think all my life with this, with and added PTSD. A depressant at best. A great read, well written, thanks for sharing the story and thoughts. Good luck and have a great day.
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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A great write on bi polar disease, I have suffered I think all my life with this, with and added PTSD. A depressant at best. A great read, well written, thanks for sharing the story and thoughts. Good luck and have a great day.
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your kind review and wealth of stars.
~patty~
