Comment from ElegantButler

Excellent

A wonderful poem of courage and love. I really loved the imagery of the old west and the journeys women took to be with those they loved. And thank you for using the word Indians. I see nothing wrong with it. It didn't come from that old story of Columbus thinking he was in India (it was called Hindustan at the time). Great work!

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016

Thank you so much for reading my poem, I'm delighted you enjoyed it. I'm really into your book, and will catch up with all the chapters gradually throughout today and tomorrow. Nice to meet you! :) Sandra

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

well, you did picture it well. good tension in the action and in her thoughts.
And of course, great ending. a combination hard to beat! good job.
I love to write in rhyme also. Keeps the mind cranking away. Congrats on your win.
pome lover

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016

Thank you, pome lover, for you lovely review. I enjoy these challenges, they are good for the brain! LOL. I have just seen your profile and see you write poetry and stories. If you are interested in joining our challenge group, get in touch with Jax Franklin, and join us. It's great fun. Thanks again, and a belated welcome! :) Sandra.

reply by pome lover on 09-Nov-2016

would love to. will look for her.
thanks, pome lover

Comment from Contests

A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for the recognition this post has received from the FanStory community. While this was not a Contest Committee decision, the committee recognizes this achievement with a seven star review.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016

Thank you so very much, I am delighted! :) xx

Comment from valmay

Exceptional

I enjoyed the story in rhme from beginning to end. It is a love song with a happy ending, and very believable. The characterization in the fourth verse is particularly adept. It does justice to the artwork. Great. Valmay

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016

Thank you so very much for this lovely review, Valmay, I'm delighted you enjoyed the story. And thank you, also for the 6 stars, that is so kind of you! :) Sandra xx

Comment from Justin Yhoung

Excellent

How imaginative!
Train rides back in time, Indians and shootouts, true love...can it get any better then this?
A story in rhyme, this has been a pleasure indeed!

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016

Thank you so much, Justin. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. Most of my poetry tells a story, don't know why! :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Unspoken94

Exceptional

I have tried to read as many of these as I could. But yours is
clearly the best. They were all very well done. This one just
stands above all the others. A beautiful story/poem that
flows so smoothly. The rhyme is not forced and the pace
is consistent. -bill

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016

What a lovely review, Bill, thank you so very much! And a big hug for giving it one of your precious 6s, that was so kind of you, thank you!! :) Sandra xx

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Exceptional

This is an awesome poem of travel, adventure and especially,romance. You are so very good at these. This is a poem to be proud of, my friend. I'm glad it had a happy ending!~Debbie

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016

Thank you so very much, Debbie, for this really lovely review and for the wonderful 6 stars!! This was so nice of you, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from JTStone

Excellent

Hey Sandra
Cool Poem. An exciting journey into life for the young girl, Though I'm sure there was an easier way to have consummated their romance. But it would made for a boring poem...
Great piece.
Jimmy

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2016

They didn't have Skype in those days, Jimmy! LOL! Thanks for reading and another great review, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

A wonderful story within a poem. I just read one with a war theme and the injured father coming home on the train, and then this popped up. Both so very different, but so very engaging. You express through your character the adventure that soon turned to fear with such description that the reader had no choice but to feel the fear inside those train cars. Definitely a frightening time in history, but I can see it from both sides. Look what was done to the natives. Well done, Sandra.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016

I have always been on the natives side, Mary, and cringed when sweet Ben reviewed it. He was brilliant though. But this poem popped into my head and I had to go with it. I'm really pleased you liked it, next time I'll tell the Indian lady's side. :) Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

A really well written poem you've penned here. Some of the stanzas have perfect rhythm. Others could use a bit more cutting of words or some changing of syllables for a better flow, but I am thoroughly jealous of how everyone keeps coming up with good works. Nice job!

Drew

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016

Thank you so much. Drew, I'll take another look and see what needs changing. Your poetry is really good, you've no reason to be jealous of anyone! :) Sandra xx