Collateral Damage
Four quatrains of blank verse38 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
An outstanding blank verse blending mythology to the current realities of death and destruction going on in today's Syria. It flowed beautifully and was rich with imagery.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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An outstanding blank verse blending mythology to the current realities of death and destruction going on in today's Syria. It flowed beautifully and was rich with imagery.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Thanks, Tom. I appreciate your comments and the six stars. As always, I value your opinion. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from IndianaIrish
Tony, it's always such a thrill and honor to read your blank verse poetry. Everything I know BV should be, is here. Your enjambment is especially awesome, and I love the two word ending that says it all. Your descriptive word choice is brilliant.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Tony, it's always such a thrill and honor to read your blank verse poetry. Everything I know BV should be, is here. Your enjambment is especially awesome, and I love the two word ending that says it all. Your descriptive word choice is brilliant.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
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Oh, Karyn, what a lovely review! That course seems quite a while ago now. i still flip through Shaw's book occasionally and think perhaps that I should be a bit more adventurous with the form! Thanks so much for the six stars. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from DonandVicki
I like the way that you pulled me into your poem with the art work Tony. I get the poetic feeling of the book of revelations. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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I like the way that you pulled me into your poem with the art work Tony. I get the poetic feeling of the book of revelations. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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Very many thanks for your review, Don and Vicki. Appreciated! Tony
Comment from camaria
The second stanza and the play on the word 'stable' paired with the comparison of nihtmares to spooked horses, was genius! Loved it. The rest of the poem read equally as well, great imagery. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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The second stanza and the play on the word 'stable' paired with the comparison of nihtmares to spooked horses, was genius! Loved it. The rest of the poem read equally as well, great imagery. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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Very many thanks for your review, Camaria, and for noting my little wordplay! I appreciate the six stars! Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-An exquisite painting you chose for your poem.
-Well written quatrains with excellent imagery:
"in shrouded veils of faded silken dreams?"
-The description in the poem is excellent.
-A good example is verse three that speaks of
those who saddle the mounts and carry those full of hate.
-The final verse picks up on that idea,
as the horsemen continue to prey upon the weak and fragile.
-Thanks for sharing a topic that, unfortunately, seems to
repeat throughout time.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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-An exquisite painting you chose for your poem.
-Well written quatrains with excellent imagery:
"in shrouded veils of faded silken dreams?"
-The description in the poem is excellent.
-A good example is verse three that speaks of
those who saddle the mounts and carry those full of hate.
-The final verse picks up on that idea,
as the horsemen continue to prey upon the weak and fragile.
-Thanks for sharing a topic that, unfortunately, seems to
repeat throughout time.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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Very many thanks for your review, your comments and your clear synopsis, Pam. Appreciated! Tony
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You are quite welcome, Tony.
Comment from rspoet
I guess in today's world we'd have to rename them
the four bikers on their thunderous Harley hogs
no place to hide from the engines roar
Excellent rhyme-less blank verse poem
if it was a contest with fearsome judges
I'd mention internal rhyme but here
the magnificent imagery far outweighs
such picayune thoughts
Great art work by Vasnetsov to accompany
your poem. Well done
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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I guess in today's world we'd have to rename them
the four bikers on their thunderous Harley hogs
no place to hide from the engines roar
Excellent rhyme-less blank verse poem
if it was a contest with fearsome judges
I'd mention internal rhyme but here
the magnificent imagery far outweighs
such picayune thoughts
Great art work by Vasnetsov to accompany
your poem. Well done
Comment Written 24-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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Very many thanks for your review, RS, and for the six stars. You gave me quite a smile this morning with your bikes and their Harley hogs! Appreciated!
I had a few arguments with Ray about the fine line between assonance and internal rhyme, when I was doing the BV course. Darn! I thought I'd got away with it this time! LOL Tony
Comment from johnwilson
I would call your thoughts profound as well as the questions asked. Beautiful adjectives abound and I particularly liked the last two stanzas as they so beautifully summed up your thoughts. Another one for the next book, eh?
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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I would call your thoughts profound as well as the questions asked. Beautiful adjectives abound and I particularly liked the last two stanzas as they so beautifully summed up your thoughts. Another one for the next book, eh?
Comment Written 24-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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Another deeply appreciated review and six stars. Yes, I am shortly sending a new collection to the publishers to look over. It'll probably be six months or more before they have time to consider it though. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Alan K Pease
I fear that these four stalk the earth again and their form will infect the living and the leadership we all need to achieve positive ends will be warped with lies and hatred.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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I fear that these four stalk the earth again and their form will infect the living and the leadership we all need to achieve positive ends will be warped with lies and hatred.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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Thanks, Alan. I fear you may be right. Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written blank verse poem. It seems the whole world are start to go crazy in human behavior. The hatred between people are very high.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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A very well-written blank verse poem. It seems the whole world are start to go crazy in human behavior. The hatred between people are very high.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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Disturbing comments but true, Sandra Thank you so much. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from RoostyNester
Your Four Horsemen poem of the Apocalypse, brings your message home to the reader. Well done in style and quatrains. I liked your poem.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2016
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Your Four Horsemen poem of the Apocalypse, brings your message home to the reader. Well done in style and quatrains. I liked your poem.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2016
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Very many thanks for your review, RoostyNester. So glad that you enjoyed my poem. Best wishes, Tony
