Comment from angel123

Excellent

Your Christmas poem is well written and I enjoyed reading it. It flows well with a sense of humor. Christmas is right around the corner

Angel123

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016

Thanks for your compliments, Angel. Yes, turn on the radio or TV, and it seems like we've already turned the corner.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

It's true. I was out this morning. Went to Lowe's for some end of the summer garden mulch. All the plants are gone--guess what's there--Christmas trees. Good entry for the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016

Yep. Turn on the TV or radio. Season's Greetings.
Thanks for the compliment. Reviewers agreed, but nary a voter.
Don

reply by BeasPeas on 23-Oct-2016

Well, maybe that proves your point (which is a compliment in itself)--it's too early for Christmas. Right now, people are still in Halloween phase.

Comment from pharp

Excellent

Mystery Poet,

Excellent job in the penning of the very insightful Haiku. It really rings loud and clear. I so remember those days with my children. Yet with the grandchildren it is all so different. Thanks for sharing and the very best to you in the contest. Blessings................Portia

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016

Thanks for the memories, Portia. I'm so glad my poem sparked them!

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Good

Hello,

You didn't have much help with the contest so you may have misunderstood. But your senryu is not a haiku about October, and that's the contest's requirement.


If I may suggest...

shop in October
to prepare for their Christmas
anxious children pray

If you change it let me know and I will give you five stars.


. Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Gypsy

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016

Hi Rose,

I think you missed the point. :) It IS precisely about October.
Maybe you didn't notice the intro:

"Earlier every year....
Christmas Looms, Grownups Grumble
5-7-5 October haiku (senyru)"

The Christmas season used to begin after Thanksgiving. Lots of people now always complain about the Christmas creep. I wrote about parents who get caught up in the early hype, especially those who don't want to miss out on this year's hot toys. Most years the most popular ones get gobbled up early, disappointing zillions of kids.

I hope you'll appreciate the poem more now. Thanks for wanting to help.

Don

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 22-Oct-2016

Hello,

I didn't miss the point. I read the contest rules above the reviewing box. All it says "write haiku (senriu is not haiku, different rules) about October, 5/7/5. The contest sponsor doesn't know what Japanese haiku is, as she claims. I have published a haiku book and I teach haiku, I know what Japanese haiku is.

If I go by the rules showing on the reviewing box, I would not know all the other stuff you mentioned, and those rules, above reviewing box, are the only ones I'm required to go by. Read that prompt again to see what I mean.

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Classic Haiku is somewhat simple but people tend to complicate it.

Haiku is one of the oldest types of poetry- 17th century. I love it and I'm teaching a class here at the end of November.

The basic traditional haiku rules are= 17 Japanese syllables (English syllables are different therefore can be 17 or less), related to nature directly or indirectly-for example: summer, cherry blossoms that indicate spring, Chinese New year's, harvest moon, cold ground, etc ...; succinct, brief; enlightening satori is a must (aha!); no punctuation or capital letters (except proper names); no "ing" ending words; present tense; art is allowed, haikuist do it, it's called -Haiga; those are the rules of classic haiku. There are many subspecies in western haiku and that is why rules are contradictory sometimes, but even contemporary haiku must be brief and enlightening in some way.

Dean Kuch and I are writing a horror haiku in a story form and we are punishing book one of a series.

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 22-Oct-2016

By the way, my name is gypsy, not rose.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This is how most people see Christmas. But I am one of the few who like Christmas. I like the decorating and the shopping. Though I do it the smart way. I make lists of what I am going to buy and then go on one day and buy them all. Then on another day wrap them all while listening to Christmas carols or watching Christmas dvds.

I like the seasonal color scheme. Though it seems like more of a poem for December than October.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you for your comments and excellent rating, Dragonpoet! In my intro above the title, I allude to how Chritmas shopping begins in October. So, Happy Holiday season!

reply by dragonpoet on 21-Oct-2016

You're welcome. I don't shop until after Thanksgiving though many start shopping much earlier.

dp

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

A timely poem. I said to my wife the other day, "Christmas is at our throats again." I have six kids. Christmas is the happiest time of year, for them, not me.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

I think we are in complete agreement. Thank you, Thomas!