Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

I love the title, "October Witches". Anything about witches gets me running to read during this Halloween season :) Too bad the contest won't allow for pictures. No matter, I have a witch imagination lol! I can hear the cackle. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you for reviewing and for your kind comments, I appreciate the stars and of course the good wishes.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

"October witches
Cackle, brew and fly on brooms
Close out October"
hehe. this is an entertaining piece of poetry dear anonymous! i'm not a real fan of repeating words as you have done with october. but the alliteration works.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you for reviewing and for your kind comments, I appreciate the stars and of course the good wishes.

Comment from Matthew Franklin

Excellent

I like this poem. While following the form of Haiku in being short it says a lot to me. "Closing out October" Are you not a fan of Halloween? Did you skip thanksgiving and go right to putting your Christmas tree up? If they're only October witches and it gets closed where do they go? :-)
Haiku is super fun! Great job with this one!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you for reviewing, I appreciate the stars and your comments. I definitely enjoy Halloween, it's my time of the year. I actually enjoy 2 Thanksgivings lol and although Christmas is good it is not as good as Halloween. MMM October witches don't really go anywhere since they are everywhere at all times. Society seems to think they are just here for Halloween. :)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem for October. The end of October is when Halloween is celebrated with fun activities and scary costumes.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you for reviewing and of course the stars. I really appreciate your kind comments.

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Nice, went with the Halloween theme on October, witches on their brooms. nicely done, best of luck on this and have a wonderful day.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you for reviewing and of course the stars. I really appreciate your kind comments and the good luck wishes.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Good

Works very good without a picture.
The description of the witches is perfect and the last line pulling it together was perfect

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you for reviewing and of course the stars. I really appreciate your kind comments.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

First of all, contrary to popular opinion, haiku does NOT have to contain exactly seventeen syllables. It may contain less. In fact, less is best where westernized haiku is concerned.
Japanese haiku poets use sounds, not syllables, in creation of their poetry. Since the sounds translate differently from Japanese to English, you might get a westernized haiku which contains just 14 syllables.
Having stated that, your haiku conforms to the requirements of this particular contest perfectly.
Your "kigo", or seasonal reference, is obviously Autumn.
You final line, or the "satori" sums up the content within your poem nicely.
All in all, a good effort.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you for reviewing and of course the stars. I really appreciate your kind comments and the good luck wishes. I will take care of the punctuation. Thank you for teaching me as you always do.

reply by Dean Kuch on 21-Oct-2016

Don't forget about the capitalization as well.
Proper nouns must be capitalized, but that's all that should be in haiku.
You're very welcome.
~Dean

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Whew okay fixed the capitals as well, you drive a hard bargain but your advise is well appreciated.

reply by Dean Kuch on 21-Oct-2016

Well, I want you to have a chance in the contest.
Haiku purists would not vote for your entry as it was written.
Your star has been returned...
~Dean

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

(blushing) I really do appreciate your suggestions and advise- it is all part of the learning process.

reply by Dean Kuch on 21-Oct-2016

I know, that's what we're (supposed to be) here for.
~Dean :)

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Well I am glad to have your expertise available.

reply by Dean Kuch on 21-Oct-2016

On, I'm no expert, not by a l-o-o-o-o-o-n-g shot.
But, I know a little :)

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

MMM methinks you know more than you claim credit for, anyway I really appreciate what I learn from those who are shall I say more seasoned than I.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Very good.

Believe it or not I was married on Halloween. (Don't ask)

I tell people, I came as a groom. My wife came as a witch.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you for reviewing and of course the stars. I really appreciate your kind comments, wow what a memory.

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Found "The Haiku Handbook" at the thrift store. Have just begun to read.
So, until I know a lot more about Haiku, let's call this one excellent...

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you for reviewing and of course the stars. I really appreciate your kind comments. Raising a toast to your learning more, I am still learning. lol

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

As far as I can see, this complies with the strictures of the Japanese form, with its seasonal reference, the use of the present tense, etc. I'm not sure about the repetition of October in both first and last lines, but the poem connects the spirit of Halloween to the season in which it occurs.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you for reviewing and of course the stars. I really appreciate your kind comments.