Hora haiku (Horror haiku)
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "horror haiku (animalistic)"A co-authored book of dark haiku poetry
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Comment from GWHARGIS
Very cool. The green eyed monsters was a great double meaning. LIKE the use of the word embroiled. Not used too often but commanding. GREAT job. GRETCHEN
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Very cool. The green eyed monsters was a great double meaning. LIKE the use of the word embroiled. Not used too often but commanding. GREAT job. GRETCHEN
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Thank you very much for reading, Gretchen.
As always, your comments are sincerely appreciated.
Take care,
~Dean
Comment from evilynne
I read the synopsis, which is fascinatingly eerie and scarily enjoyable. I don't know much about poetry forms even now, but it seems perfect to me. Evi
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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I read the synopsis, which is fascinatingly eerie and scarily enjoyable. I don't know much about poetry forms even now, but it seems perfect to me. Evi
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Thanks again for reading and following along with the story, Evi. I'm glad to know that the synopsis helps, as it was intded to do.
Much appreciated.
Comment from Aussie
Jealousy amongst the beastly two. Sorry I don't have six stars for you today. I wish the rules were changed! In three little lines you have told the story so well. Thanks for sharing, Dean. XX
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Jealousy amongst the beastly two. Sorry I don't have six stars for you today. I wish the rules were changed! In three little lines you have told the story so well. Thanks for sharing, Dean. XX
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading and following along with our story, Kay.
This concluded Part I of our book.
The first chapter of Part II has been posted by Gypsy, my talented co-author.
My follow-up will be coming soon.
Thanks again...
~Dean :}
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My condolences on the passing of your ex wife. She is now free and whole, one day you will meet on those golden shores. Love, Kay.
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Oh no, Kay. Unfortunately my ex-wife is just fine. It was her aunt Carol that passed away.
Her aunt Carol does look a great deal like my ex, however.
I do appreciate your condolences.
~Dean
Comment from Sasha
The artwork and sound effects of this one are quite frightening. Brother against brother is most terrifying. This story is getting deeper into the adventures of Mirela and Claudiu. Very scary stuff with this one.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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The artwork and sound effects of this one are quite frightening. Brother against brother is most terrifying. This story is getting deeper into the adventures of Mirela and Claudiu. Very scary stuff with this one.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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We're trying to keep the violence to a bare minimum, Sasha, and concentrating more on the love triangle developing between Mirela and the two brothers.
It should get even more interesting as we move along.
Thanks so much again for following.
Thank you very much for taking the time to respond to this, Rebekka.
I do appreciate your thoughtful comments as always.
Take care. :)
Comment from Just2Write
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Green-eyed monsters, indeed, Dean. Great illustration with some very contemplative words to go with it. Since the days of Cain and Able - some brothers just do not get along. Well done.
Rose.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Especially these two beasts, Rose!
You know what they say. "Never get between a dog and his meat."
Thank you very much for keeping up with our story.
Thank you very much for taking the time to respond to this, Rebekka.
I do appreciate your thoughtful comments as always.
Take care. :)
Comment from chiversmisha
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Wow, this is very direct and well written. The graphic is strong and the sound effects capture the essence of this writing.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading and commenting, chiversmisha.
I appreciate it.
Comment from honeytree
Interesting but very graphic art work
When monsters such as this get together
can be very scary indeed in every way
Wouldn't be near them at all.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Interesting but very graphic art work
When monsters such as this get together
can be very scary indeed in every way
Wouldn't be near them at all.
Honeytree
Comment Written 19-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading, Annie.
Take care...
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great.
honeytree
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Quite...
Comment from Pearl Edwards
The warning made me smile Dean forewarned no jumping. Great continuation from Gypsy's luna moon. Going well with this horror story.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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The warning made me smile Dean forewarned no jumping. Great continuation from Gypsy's luna moon. Going well with this horror story.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 19-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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Thank you for reading and continuing on with the story, Pearl.
It is appreciated.
Cheers,
~Dean
Comment from Nika2016
The story makes so much more sense after reading the synopsis. The art is always fantastic. So which brother will win this fight over love? Stay tuned.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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The story makes so much more sense after reading the synopsis. The art is always fantastic. So which brother will win this fight over love? Stay tuned.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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Thank you for reading and continuing on with the story, Nika. I'm glad to learn the synopsis is working as intended.
It is appreciated.
Cheers,
~Dean
Comment from krys123
Good morning to you or afternoon, your time, Dr. Shadow;
-another find written haiku that is explicitly and most directly involving the horrors of an embattlement of beasts of the night.
-"animalistic brothers embroiled in battle" is a fine descriptive imagery that is, also, supported by the picture which is very appropriate for this haiku.
-The satori gives a very spontaneous excited feeling to your writing and ends with an aha moment that is relative to the conceptual theme of your haiku and your topic.
-One thing I did find, however, is that your kigo or the relevant establish recognition of a season has not been really identified thoroughly or an elastic "green-eyed" is a reference to a season.
-Thank you again, for sharing awesome haiku and take care and have a good one Dr. Shadow.
Alex
PS: I realize that sometimes the Kigo can be and most likely be left out depending on the author's preference, I guess.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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Good morning to you or afternoon, your time, Dr. Shadow;
-another find written haiku that is explicitly and most directly involving the horrors of an embattlement of beasts of the night.
-"animalistic brothers embroiled in battle" is a fine descriptive imagery that is, also, supported by the picture which is very appropriate for this haiku.
-The satori gives a very spontaneous excited feeling to your writing and ends with an aha moment that is relative to the conceptual theme of your haiku and your topic.
-One thing I did find, however, is that your kigo or the relevant establish recognition of a season has not been really identified thoroughly or an elastic "green-eyed" is a reference to a season.
-Thank you again, for sharing awesome haiku and take care and have a good one Dr. Shadow.
Alex
PS: I realize that sometimes the Kigo can be and most likely be left out depending on the author's preference, I guess.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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Thank you for reading and continuing on with the story, Alex.
It is appreciated.
Cheers,
~Dean
