Irish Eyes
A stranger's eyes brought me back to a face from childhood.14 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Congratulations on winning the haiku life contest. It is sometimes the smallest things that can remind us of our childhood and make us feel comfort in those memories.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Congratulations on winning the haiku life contest. It is sometimes the smallest things that can remind us of our childhood and make us feel comfort in those memories.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you for understanding the poem and for your kind words.
Comment from RoostyNester
What a wonderful haiku - life poem. I know what you mean...such small things can melt our hearts, and take us back to a better time in our lives. The smile of the Irish eyes...how unique and touching. I loved your poem. Well done with the 16 syllables, and the satori at the end.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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What a wonderful haiku - life poem. I know what you mean...such small things can melt our hearts, and take us back to a better time in our lives. The smile of the Irish eyes...how unique and touching. I loved your poem. Well done with the 16 syllables, and the satori at the end.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Comment from winnona
Very nicely written haiku. Your well-chosen words flowed well together combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader well. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Very nicely written haiku. Your well-chosen words flowed well together combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader well. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your positive words and encouragement.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Yeah. Congrats and good luck in contest. Love your title--so lovely and colorful. You took a trip down memory lane that is so fascinating back to your childhood. Trip is so amusing and intriguing. liberty justice
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Yeah. Congrats and good luck in contest. Love your title--so lovely and colorful. You took a trip down memory lane that is so fascinating back to your childhood. Trip is so amusing and intriguing. liberty justice
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your positive comments and understanding the importance of memory jolts.
Comment from Lu Saluna
heart warming and lovely
amazing how one look even from a stranger can wam ones heart
the Haiku meets the criteria of the haiku-life contest entry, personification, interconnected lines of imagery (first two lines connect very nicely) and second line contains the seasonal reference, childhood
the third line a lovely satori
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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heart warming and lovely
amazing how one look even from a stranger can wam ones heart
the Haiku meets the criteria of the haiku-life contest entry, personification, interconnected lines of imagery (first two lines connect very nicely) and second line contains the seasonal reference, childhood
the third line a lovely satori
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your knowledgeable and positive review.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
An excellent example of this difficult style.
A friend showed me a poem he had written. He said it was Haiku.
When I told him it wasn't. He insisted it was because a guy in a bar told him.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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An excellent example of this difficult style.
A friend showed me a poem he had written. He said it was Haiku.
When I told him it wasn't. He insisted it was because a guy in a bar told him.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your positive comments and for the opinion from the guy in the bar.
Comment from Pantygynt
I liked this one although from the start I thought it more of a senryu than a haiku and I don't find a kigo -- seasonal reference in there to be honest -- which is a pity because otherwise it is excellently constructed with a good satori. Let's hope no one important notices. I shan't mark it down.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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I liked this one although from the start I thought it more of a senryu than a haiku and I don't find a kigo -- seasonal reference in there to be honest -- which is a pity because otherwise it is excellently constructed with a good satori. Let's hope no one important notices. I shan't mark it down.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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I always appreciate your expertise. Thank you for your suggestions and for your positive comments.
Comment from Ronni
Quite a nostalgic trip for you in those stranger's Irish eyes!
Irish eyes are always beguiling and enchanting, even in a stranger too,
I have myself found and seen. Can totally relate!
Most precious of all is that that brief glow and smile snuggled you
back to that 'haven" of your childhood heart!
Fantastic prompt entry, best of luck! Ronni
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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Quite a nostalgic trip for you in those stranger's Irish eyes!
Irish eyes are always beguiling and enchanting, even in a stranger too,
I have myself found and seen. Can totally relate!
Most precious of all is that that brief glow and smile snuggled you
back to that 'haven" of your childhood heart!
Fantastic prompt entry, best of luck! Ronni
Comment Written 15-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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Thank you for getting the nuances of the poem and those Irish eyes.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good poem you have penned about the Irish Eyes. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Teri
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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This is a very good poem you have penned about the Irish Eyes. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Teri
Comment Written 15-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your positive comments.
Comment from mvbrooks
Your poem took me back to childhood and my grandmother singing "When Irish eyes are smiling." She was born in Ireland and remained loyal to her homeland her whole life. The theme of something taking you back to a positive time is a strong element of this poem.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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Your poem took me back to childhood and my grandmother singing "When Irish eyes are smiling." She was born in Ireland and remained loyal to her homeland her whole life. The theme of something taking you back to a positive time is a strong element of this poem.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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You interpreted this poem correctly and it sounds like you have had similar experiences.
