Posterity
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Comment from rama devi
I am unsure if the parenthetical comment is meant as a note or part of the poem. It does not work well as part of the poem. The answer, I think, is WILL BE.
Potent message--timely (as who knows if it will be bearable) and fine entry for the contest. Suggest a comma after perchance (optional).
Good luck!
Warmly, rd
PS Five stars in advance, hoping you remove those parenthesis.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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I am unsure if the parenthetical comment is meant as a note or part of the poem. It does not work well as part of the poem. The answer, I think, is WILL BE.
Potent message--timely (as who knows if it will be bearable) and fine entry for the contest. Suggest a comma after perchance (optional).
Good luck!
Warmly, rd
PS Five stars in advance, hoping you remove those parenthesis.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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Thank you for de-parenthesizing me, Rama! I'm still not sure about the correctness of "will be" versus 'is' or 'are,' but I took your suggestion, the easiest way out of the silly brackets. I went along with your comma, too. I originally had been indecisive about that, also, because I didn't want to give the next line an undeserved comma in the same construction.
You deserve a reward.
Don.
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Aw, thanks for your kind response, dear Don. I think IS also can work there but not ARE. posterity is not plural. But WILL BE makes most sense since you're talking about the future and not the present.
Warm Smiles, rd
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Yes, I think we made the right choice, partner. 'Posterity is people...' may be correct, but it sounds kinda rough. Yea! for will be!
And don't forget, you owe me a star!
xxoo Don
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Yes, I think we made the right choice, partner. 'Posterity is people...' may be correct, but it sounds kinda rough. Yea! for will be!
And don't forget, you owe me a star!
xxoo Don
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Hi Don - I gave five stars in advance!
Glad you're happy with the edit. :-)
Warm smiles, rd
xxoo
Comment from Cass Carlton
this is an eerie little piece that had my neck hair prickling ever so slightly. The artwork is spot on, with a strange androgynous face looking away from center. I got the impression that when I looked away the eyes would look straight at me, but flick away again if I looked directly. The poem asks just how much our present generation will mean to those who come after us. It is certainly a question for those engaged in genealogy and family trees etc. I like to think that my life will be something relevant and valid to my future descendants, if only as an example of someone who lived honestly and who taught their children to do the same. Well done, thought provoking. cheers Cass
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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this is an eerie little piece that had my neck hair prickling ever so slightly. The artwork is spot on, with a strange androgynous face looking away from center. I got the impression that when I looked away the eyes would look straight at me, but flick away again if I looked directly. The poem asks just how much our present generation will mean to those who come after us. It is certainly a question for those engaged in genealogy and family trees etc. I like to think that my life will be something relevant and valid to my future descendants, if only as an example of someone who lived honestly and who taught their children to do the same. Well done, thought provoking. cheers Cass
Comment Written 15-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much for your insightful comments, Cass, and, of course, for the 6-star rating!
From your remarks, I'm sure you will be admired by your posterity for generations.
Best wishes1
