Bits and Pieces
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Comment from melyuki
Hi Suzie thanks for sharing this original verse, with your own personalized format. I really like the form. You've done a great job of showing how it works in this poem .. The contents of the poem certainly are in keeping with the rules, and tell a very interesting journey. Hope someone here gives it their best effort to reproduce the style. thanks so much for sharing. cheers mel xx
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hi Suzie thanks for sharing this original verse, with your own personalized format. I really like the form. You've done a great job of showing how it works in this poem .. The contents of the poem certainly are in keeping with the rules, and tell a very interesting journey. Hope someone here gives it their best effort to reproduce the style. thanks so much for sharing. cheers mel xx
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much! I appreciate you taking time to read it and I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Pantygynt
An interesting form that works similarly to a conversation between two people. A three line rhyming statement refuted in each final line. If you are going to claim it as a form, and why not, I would open it up into something like a conversation that involves the airing of two pposing views rather than confining it to spiritual content.
It is so close to having a regular meter with many lines having ten syllables, I would write mine in iambic pentameters. It would surely improve the flow.
What will you call the form? The Suziequatrains?
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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An interesting form that works similarly to a conversation between two people. A three line rhyming statement refuted in each final line. If you are going to claim it as a form, and why not, I would open it up into something like a conversation that involves the airing of two pposing views rather than confining it to spiritual content.
It is so close to having a regular meter with many lines having ten syllables, I would write mine in iambic pentameters. It would surely improve the flow.
What will you call the form? The Suziequatrains?
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Thank you for this kind review and suggestions. Not sure what I'd call it. I guess since each verse ends in a positive I have leaned toward the inspirational content but could definitely change it up. Thank you again!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and a great style. For every three negative thoughts only one positive thought is enough to replace the negatives.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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A very well-written poem and a great style. For every three negative thoughts only one positive thought is enough to replace the negatives.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much!
Comment from winnona
a very well written poem. I like the white words on the dark background, they are easily read. Your well-chosen words flowed well line to line and combine easily forming their message of the poem for the reader.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017
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a very well written poem. I like the white words on the dark background, they are easily read. Your well-chosen words flowed well line to line and combine easily forming their message of the poem for the reader.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much! I'm sorry I'm so late responding. Don't get on here as often as I'd like. Thank you again!
Comment from clsandau
I like your idea about writing poems of this nature. Just a little different but another new challenge and easy to read. Its so true that life is like a puzzle and you have expressed it with negatives first 3 and positive on the 4th, giving God credit which is only right. Thanks and Blessings, Carol
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017
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I like your idea about writing poems of this nature. Just a little different but another new challenge and easy to read. Its so true that life is like a puzzle and you have expressed it with negatives first 3 and positive on the 4th, giving God credit which is only right. Thanks and Blessings, Carol
Comment Written 19-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much! I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond but I don't get on here as much as I'd like. Thank you again!
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The main thing is you eventually did reply. I truly enjoyed that poem and the meaning. Carol
Comment from foxangie123
I enjoyed this very much so as life is like one big puzzle. You brought that out very nicely with this perfect penning of yours. Excellent.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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I enjoyed this very much so as life is like one big puzzle. You brought that out very nicely with this perfect penning of yours. Excellent.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Thank you! I appreciate you reading it and I'm glad you liked it!
Comment from RodG
I am impressed with the Suzie Q pattern you have created. It certainly works for spiritual poems like this. An excellent job of describing the negative aspects of the Speaker's life and the the one-line rebuttal that emphasizes God's role. I also like your use of a refrain to begin each stanza. I just may accept your challenge to write one of these myself in the near future. Rod
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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I am impressed with the Suzie Q pattern you have created. It certainly works for spiritual poems like this. An excellent job of describing the negative aspects of the Speaker's life and the the one-line rebuttal that emphasizes God's role. I also like your use of a refrain to begin each stanza. I just may accept your challenge to write one of these myself in the near future. Rod
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much! I hope you try it. It's challenging but fun. Thanks again for reading it!
