haiku (hot apple cider)
5-7-5 contest42 total reviews
Comment from Oatmeal
You did a wonderful job with this challenge. Your arrangement looks very nice.
The flow was very nice. The theme was good. The artwork complemented your poem.
There was nothing wrong that I could tell.
The words you chose worked very well. Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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You did a wonderful job with this challenge. Your arrangement looks very nice.
The flow was very nice. The theme was good. The artwork complemented your poem.
There was nothing wrong that I could tell.
The words you chose worked very well. Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Thank, Oatmeal, for your kind review for my poem. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thanks!
Comment from foxangie123
I love this and what a great five seven five at this time of year. I want to go and drink some right now. This is excellent and a great entry indeed.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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I love this and what a great five seven five at this time of year. I want to go and drink some right now. This is excellent and a great entry indeed.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Thank you very much, Foxangie, for your review for my poem. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thanks!
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent entry for the contest
correlated to the autumn season
Excellent imagery with the cider/leaves
and nice touch of alliteration
We have apple cider doughnuts in this area
Excellent color in presentation
Well done
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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This is an excellent entry for the contest
correlated to the autumn season
Excellent imagery with the cider/leaves
and nice touch of alliteration
We have apple cider doughnuts in this area
Excellent color in presentation
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Thank you very much, rspoet, for this very kind review for my poem. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm delighted you enjoyed the imagery, and I'd love to try one of your cider doughnuts.
Thanks!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Format is good; nice Autumn presentation.
-You create a good scene with the hot cider
and raking leaves.
-I like the final line with alliteration
and a good point for the poem.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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-Format is good; nice Autumn presentation.
-You create a good scene with the hot cider
and raking leaves.
-I like the final line with alliteration
and a good point for the poem.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Thank you very much, Pam, for this very kind review for my poem. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thank you for mentioning you liked the last tine ...I do, too. Thanks!
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You are very welcome for the review and pointing out the last line.
Comment from RodG
This is a novel approach to seeing/experiencing autumn. Hot cider is a THE drink of the season.
Excellent blending and juxtaposition of three senses: taste, touch, and sight. And smell is implied.
I love the last line!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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This is a novel approach to seeing/experiencing autumn. Hot cider is a THE drink of the season.
Excellent blending and juxtaposition of three senses: taste, touch, and sight. And smell is implied.
I love the last line!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Thank you very much, Rod, for this very kind review for my poem. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm so pleased your mentioning the poem touched on the senses and for mentioning you liked the last line...I do, too. Thanks!
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
This is very lovely for the 5-7-5 contest. I would have liked to see some kind of artwork accompanying it to enhance the words, as they have a hard time standing alone. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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This is very lovely for the 5-7-5 contest. I would have liked to see some kind of artwork accompanying it to enhance the words, as they have a hard time standing alone. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your review and comments for my poem, Susanne. If I can't find an appropriate gotograph, I would rather use nothing than using just anything. Thanks for your feedback and good luck wish for the contest.
Comment from Ben Colder
If I dig this, I would never return back to the pile of leaves. LOL. Never found anything wrong. Good contest piece. Best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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If I dig this, I would never return back to the pile of leaves. LOL. Never found anything wrong. Good contest piece. Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Thank you very much, Ben, for this very kind review for my poem. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thanks!
Comment from johnwilson
I'm amazed that a piece with such a few words can evoke so much feeling; however, this absolutely flows with the feeling of Autumn. Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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I'm amazed that a piece with such a few words can evoke so much feeling; however, this absolutely flows with the feeling of Autumn. Well done!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Oh, I love this review, John! I'm so pleased you could feel the emotions of autumn with the words of this short poem. I sure couldn't ask more encouragement from a reader and review. Thank you so much!
Comment from Suzie Q
I love this! Perfect title and presentation. I can almost smell the leaves and the use of "mug of hot cider" and " sweet sip of Autumn" are the perfect combination! The syllable count may be limited, but it didn't limit you. You said it all! Great job! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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I love this! Perfect title and presentation. I can almost smell the leaves and the use of "mug of hot cider" and " sweet sip of Autumn" are the perfect combination! The syllable count may be limited, but it didn't limit you. You said it all! Great job! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Wow, what a wonderful review for my short 5-7-5 poem, Suzie Q! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and share your kind words. I'm delighted you enjoyed autumn imagery, and I truly appreciate your good luck wish for the contest. Thanks!
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You're certainly welcome. I can't get the phrase "sweet sip of Autumn" out of my head. That would be a great title for a poem itself. Thanks for sharing
Comment from l.raven
very nicely written...puts you right in the mood for Autumn...fallen leafs and beautiful colors...it's almost here...love the wording in your poem
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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very nicely written...puts you right in the mood for Autumn...fallen leafs and beautiful colors...it's almost here...love the wording in your poem
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your kind review and comments for my poem, Linda. I'm always happy to hear from you and receive your feedback. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts!
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you are so very welcome...xxoo Linda
