Ah Yes, I Remember It Well
One-Day Good Old Days Contest7 total reviews
Comment from wilkswrites
I loved your poem because it was like digging through a treasure chest of memories. Some I couldn't relate to, but most I could appreciate. The one that touched me the most was Spin the Bottle. Oh I remember that game very well.
Well done!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016
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I loved your poem because it was like digging through a treasure chest of memories. Some I couldn't relate to, but most I could appreciate. The one that touched me the most was Spin the Bottle. Oh I remember that game very well.
Well done!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016
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Thank you for the excellent review, whippersnapper!
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lol
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Awesome work here. Great rhythm and rhyme...flow is very good. A masterpiece of yesteryear in every line. Great job and best of luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016
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Awesome work here. Great rhythm and rhyme...flow is very good. A masterpiece of yesteryear in every line. Great job and best of luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 03-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016
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Wow! I blush! Thank you so much, Susanne, for your superb review, and all those beautiful stars! No whippersnapper, you!
Comment from winnona
A well-written Good Old Days contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of this contest well. Your words flowed right along combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016
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A well-written Good Old Days contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of this contest well. Your words flowed right along combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2016
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Thanks for your complimentary review, Winnona! Much appreciated!
Comment from BeasPeas
Well done. I enjoyed reading this snappy poem about the good old days. These things were some of the good remembrances. I remember most of them OR if I was too young remember hearing about them. Great contribution to the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2016
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Well done. I enjoyed reading this snappy poem about the good old days. These things were some of the good remembrances. I remember most of them OR if I was too young remember hearing about them. Great contribution to the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2016
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Thanks for your much appreciated compliments, Marilyn! Even though you're one of the whippersnappers, it looks like you're not part of the problem referred to in the poem.
Comment from joeruptak
Very well written, the rhyme, rhythm and flow are great
the memories were very well expressed.
You brought up somethings that this old man would like to forget
I do thank you for the pleasure I got from this superb
poem
thank you
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Very well written, the rhyme, rhythm and flow are great
the memories were very well expressed.
You brought up somethings that this old man would like to forget
I do thank you for the pleasure I got from this superb
poem
thank you
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Joe, I can't imagine a more gratifying reaction to my memoir!
I'm curious about what I mentioned that evoked unpleasant memories, but maybe you'd prefer not to revisit them further.
i want to express my appreciation for what you wrote, and, of course, for your generous 6-star compliment. Thank you, Joe!!
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Joe, I can't imagine a more gratifying reaction to my memoir!
I'm curious about what I mentioned that evoked unpleasant memories, but maybe you'd prefer not to revisit them further.
i want to express my appreciation for what you wrote, and, of course, for your generous 6-star compliment. Thank you, Joe!!
Comment from William Ross
hahaha, very good great rhyme, has good meter flows and reads great. And yes I remember a whole lot of that. Great job and good luck, have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2016
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hahaha, very good great rhyme, has good meter flows and reads great. And yes I remember a whole lot of that. Great job and good luck, have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2016
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Thanks a lot for your kind words and support, William. We old-timers have to stick together. :o)
Comment from rama devi
This is fun and well timed and rhymed. I actually could not remember most of it (too young at fifty?) but I do recall Lucille Ball (not before I Love Lucy, though)
I enjoyed reading this aloud with all the fantastic phonetics, especially:
You... remember zoot suits,
Zazu Pitts, Soupy Sales,
and
Still struggle with "galoshes instead of boots,
And gosh, you can recall those lovable Shmoos!
I REMEMBER THESE:
Laurel and Hardy, spin-the-bottle party,
LOL:
A single lady was supposed to say "No!"
Recall this too:
Bud Abbott and Lou Costello made you giggle,
but not this:
And the gals wore girdles so they wouldn't jiggle.
FUN RHYMES!
*Spag
With running boards,(no ,) and the one-slice toaster,
When the waiters said(,) "Yes sir" or "No sir."
Perfect closing note for this section:
Teacher says, "Sit down!," and the kid obeys.
Those things have changed since "the good old days."
The last four lines are funny and satirically rhymed!
Hoping you'll edit spag and consider suggestions, five stars in advance. Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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This is fun and well timed and rhymed. I actually could not remember most of it (too young at fifty?) but I do recall Lucille Ball (not before I Love Lucy, though)
I enjoyed reading this aloud with all the fantastic phonetics, especially:
You... remember zoot suits,
Zazu Pitts, Soupy Sales,
and
Still struggle with "galoshes instead of boots,
And gosh, you can recall those lovable Shmoos!
I REMEMBER THESE:
Laurel and Hardy, spin-the-bottle party,
LOL:
A single lady was supposed to say "No!"
Recall this too:
Bud Abbott and Lou Costello made you giggle,
but not this:
And the gals wore girdles so they wouldn't jiggle.
FUN RHYMES!
*Spag
With running boards,(no ,) and the one-slice toaster,
When the waiters said(,) "Yes sir" or "No sir."
Perfect closing note for this section:
Teacher says, "Sit down!," and the kid obeys.
Those things have changed since "the good old days."
The last four lines are funny and satirically rhymed!
Hoping you'll edit spag and consider suggestions, five stars in advance. Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 30-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Thank you, rd, for your wonderful deconstruction of my poem. It was very rewarding to see your reactions to some lines, suggesting where you fit in the determination of your demographic potential as a voter. Alas, you are a whippersnapper!
I appreciate your alerting me to those spags, which, thankfully, I corrected before many others could see them.
More thanks for sparking a thought of possibly promoting the piece (seldom a good investment). ??
