Shit Happens
Milking cows in the sixtys and seventys32 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
Great story, if a bit stinky imparts. Haha. Not a job I would like to have although I used to. Kind of sounds less romantic when you include the shit. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2016
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Great story, if a bit stinky imparts. Haha. Not a job I would like to have although I used to. Kind of sounds less romantic when you include the shit. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2016
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Thank you. Oh, it wasn't really as bad as this story might imply. They wanted the work challenges so that is what I was trying to show. I miss the dairy sometimes.
Comment from William Ross
very good, great read about a dairy farm and farming. I grew up around a huge dairy farm, worked 1 summer there that was enough for me. farming's not for everyone. Great write, and good luck on this. have a great day
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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very good, great read about a dairy farm and farming. I grew up around a huge dairy farm, worked 1 summer there that was enough for me. farming's not for everyone. Great write, and good luck on this. have a great day
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Thank you, William. We spent over 40 years dairy farming. Then we went into raising beef until my husband got hurt by a bull. Now I sit here writing stuff all the time. LOL
Comment from F. Wehr3
Shitty story, lol. I was entertained by this little trip to the farm. I wish you luck in the contest.
I found a couple of sentences I'd like to discuss. Please consider the following.
Anyhow, after successfully capturing all the beasts; the person milking must take a wide scraper, and shove the poop off the walkway behind the cows, and into the gutters.--You start with a dependent clause after...beasts. This is not a sentence because it does not complete a thought. Suggest a change from semi-colon to comma. The person milking is the subject and performs two actions (take and shove), so no comma is needed after scraper. Equally there is no need for the comma after cows.
I could go on forever about the challenges of working with cattle. Getting up at two A.M to deliver calves, herd bulls that decide they might like to kill you, hot days spent in the fields so the critters could eat next winter, working seven days a week, etc. --I stumbled over this sentence. You change your verb tense through this list. I would suggest using your ing verbs getting, herding, spending, and working.
I hope this is helpful. Have a great day!
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Shitty story, lol. I was entertained by this little trip to the farm. I wish you luck in the contest.
I found a couple of sentences I'd like to discuss. Please consider the following.
Anyhow, after successfully capturing all the beasts; the person milking must take a wide scraper, and shove the poop off the walkway behind the cows, and into the gutters.--You start with a dependent clause after...beasts. This is not a sentence because it does not complete a thought. Suggest a change from semi-colon to comma. The person milking is the subject and performs two actions (take and shove), so no comma is needed after scraper. Equally there is no need for the comma after cows.
I could go on forever about the challenges of working with cattle. Getting up at two A.M to deliver calves, herd bulls that decide they might like to kill you, hot days spent in the fields so the critters could eat next winter, working seven days a week, etc. --I stumbled over this sentence. You change your verb tense through this list. I would suggest using your ing verbs getting, herding, spending, and working.
I hope this is helpful. Have a great day!
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Thanks. I will edit and take your suggestions to heart. You're right. I did change tenses, my bad.
Comment from johngie
Outstanding Aunt Ruth. Great Job! I almost entered this challenge. Mine would have been centered around the shift differential and people. The people is the hardest. Hard to have conversations with close minded, self-centered, ignorant boobs that couldn't get past their own views. Mostly, I smile and nod in agreement while thinking this is how Hillary could win the election.
Great job on describing milking cows in those days. People have no idea where the food comes from in the grocery store. Keep up the great work.
Love ya.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Outstanding Aunt Ruth. Great Job! I almost entered this challenge. Mine would have been centered around the shift differential and people. The people is the hardest. Hard to have conversations with close minded, self-centered, ignorant boobs that couldn't get past their own views. Mostly, I smile and nod in agreement while thinking this is how Hillary could win the election.
Great job on describing milking cows in those days. People have no idea where the food comes from in the grocery store. Keep up the great work.
Love ya.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Thanks, Angie. Glad you liked this trip into the past. When I was a child milking was ever harder; we milked by hand. Thak god, I had seven brothers who got stuck with that chore. Your dad was one of them and I remember him losing his cool over the shitty tails in the face. The boys did all the barn cleaning by hand too. Love Ya, Auntie
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I think in the description line it should be sixties and seventies. if you can't fit it all in it would probably be best to change it to 60s & 70s.
Author's choice here but you might want to think about putting up a language warning. I know it sounds silly due to the context but I have been berated for 'shit' without a warning before! LOL
the dairy's today never let the cows - dairies.
I live in Northern Ireland and the cows are out all the time! It's great to drive through the countryside and see so many fields full of them.
front of the cows too close - to close.
This walkway must be clean off - cleaned off?
I really enjoyed this testament to farming. A fine vein of humour throughout and well-written.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Hi there,
I think in the description line it should be sixties and seventies. if you can't fit it all in it would probably be best to change it to 60s & 70s.
Author's choice here but you might want to think about putting up a language warning. I know it sounds silly due to the context but I have been berated for 'shit' without a warning before! LOL
the dairy's today never let the cows - dairies.
I live in Northern Ireland and the cows are out all the time! It's great to drive through the countryside and see so many fields full of them.
front of the cows too close - to close.
This walkway must be clean off - cleaned off?
I really enjoyed this testament to farming. A fine vein of humour throughout and well-written.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Thank you. Thanks for the catches too. I wrote this in a hurry yesterday and never got back to edit. I will do so now.
Comment from emptypage
Oh, dear. Did you really ever forget to shower??
Cow shit out-grosses any job challenge I can come up with. Very original. I love cows, but I prefer to love them from afar.
The writing is clear and concise.
My only real suggestion? Add some dialogue to better engage the reader. I can imagine some things you and your hubby might have said during these experiences, and I truly think readers would rather be shown--via dialogue--than be told.
Good start.
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Oh, dear. Did you really ever forget to shower??
Cow shit out-grosses any job challenge I can come up with. Very original. I love cows, but I prefer to love them from afar.
The writing is clear and concise.
My only real suggestion? Add some dialogue to better engage the reader. I can imagine some things you and your hubby might have said during these experiences, and I truly think readers would rather be shown--via dialogue--than be told.
Good start.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Thank you. I have a bad habit of telling stories and not showing enough. Thanks for the constructive remarks.
Comment from Lu Saluna
I love the photo of the cow you have with your story, she looks so sweet and innocent. Hard to believe that those sneaks can be that devious, lol. I loved your story, I have to admit though by the end I was laughing so hard I had tears running down my cheeks. Of course not at the bumps, bruises or injuries you had to endure, I know cows and bulls can be very dangerous. I was the very matter-of-fact way you laid it all out, so beautifully and succinctly without mincing words and I loved it. I guess because I love animals so much and have spent so much time around them I know what little shits they really can be, your story is so honest open.
Thank you for a well written, honest and heart warming story of what some of your work challenges were.
Best of luck to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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I love the photo of the cow you have with your story, she looks so sweet and innocent. Hard to believe that those sneaks can be that devious, lol. I loved your story, I have to admit though by the end I was laughing so hard I had tears running down my cheeks. Of course not at the bumps, bruises or injuries you had to endure, I know cows and bulls can be very dangerous. I was the very matter-of-fact way you laid it all out, so beautifully and succinctly without mincing words and I loved it. I guess because I love animals so much and have spent so much time around them I know what little shits they really can be, your story is so honest open.
Thank you for a well written, honest and heart warming story of what some of your work challenges were.
Best of luck to you in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Thank you. Yeah, most of the cows were not really mean; just tricksters. We had a couple with a mean streak, though. Like the Cow named Killer that broke my ankle. She had that name for a reason and she lived up to it.
Comment from gene roush
I grew up on a farm. Every spring, I cleaned the calf pens. Shit so deep that the rats tunneled through it.
This is clever and your voice is clear.
Maybe you had to be there, but I could smell the steamy shit.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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I grew up on a farm. Every spring, I cleaned the calf pens. Shit so deep that the rats tunneled through it.
This is clever and your voice is clear.
Maybe you had to be there, but I could smell the steamy shit.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Thank you. It's good to meet a fellow shit shoveler. Farming today is so much easier.
Comment from crybry67
Well I have to admit I've used that expression many times....I thought your story was very well written. It was very educational, and entertaining.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Well I have to admit I've used that expression many times....I thought your story was very well written. It was very educational, and entertaining.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Thank you. I was simply calling it what it was. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from MTF1955
i wish I had a six to give you. I'm still laughing at all the shit. You've turned handwork into an amazingly funny story. Kudos to you and no more shit. Great job. Mary
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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i wish I had a six to give you. I'm still laughing at all the shit. You've turned handwork into an amazingly funny story. Kudos to you and no more shit. Great job. Mary
Comment Written 30-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016
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Thank you. Farming is much easier today. Look how the dairies milk 3000 or 5000 head. Boy, that's a lot of shit.
