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A Dactylic Redoubled Rondeau43 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Your poem is a fun contest entry. I enjoyed reading the rhythm was excellent as are the descriptions. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
Your poem is a fun contest entry. I enjoyed reading the rhythm was excellent as are the descriptions. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Barbara. Appreciated, as always! Tony
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
that's a lot to fill in a lifetime of waiting.
Very well done, rules followed spot on.
Nice and light and very lively to read.
Each repeating verse changes with the placement
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
that's a lot to fill in a lifetime of waiting.
Very well done, rules followed spot on.
Nice and light and very lively to read.
Each repeating verse changes with the placement
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Barb. Appreciated, as always! Tony
Comment from L.lora
Nicely done with excellent
meter and well chosen words
that compliment each other.
Yes, strike the drum...speak
up and out loud. A most enjoyable
read, no nits or spags. Good
luck with the contest. Lora
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
Nicely done with excellent
meter and well chosen words
that compliment each other.
Yes, strike the drum...speak
up and out loud. A most enjoyable
read, no nits or spags. Good
luck with the contest. Lora
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Lora. Appreciated, as always! Tony
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A pleasure to do, Lora
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Wonderful!!! You are much braver than I adding an extra level of difficulty with the meter selected. This is just such a delightful read with such a life affirming message. LOVED your refrain lines and the two rhymes you went with as they are truly unique which should make this a stand out. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
Wonderful!!! You are much braver than I adding an extra level of difficulty with the meter selected. This is just such a delightful read with such a life affirming message. LOVED your refrain lines and the two rhymes you went with as they are truly unique which should make this a stand out. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Monica. I appreciate your kind and constructive comments! Tony
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My pleasure. You knock my socks off in all your posts and this one was no different.
Comment from LIJ Red
There is poetry for the message, which iambic with a few anapests can cover. Then there is showing off. Gotta admit, you did a fine job on this one.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
There is poetry for the message, which iambic with a few anapests can cover. Then there is showing off. Gotta admit, you did a fine job on this one.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Red. Appreciated, as always! Tony
Comment from rjuselius
This is a brilliant entry for this particular writing prompt dear tony! It's insightful and profound. Carpe diem my friend!
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck !
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
This is a brilliant entry for this particular writing prompt dear tony! It's insightful and profound. Carpe diem my friend!
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck !
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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What a lovely review and garland of stars! Thank you so much! Tony
Comment from oliver818
I really enjoyed your poem. It looks like a very challenging style, but it flows well and has very nice Rythm. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
I really enjoyed your poem. It looks like a very challenging style, but it flows well and has very nice Rythm. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Oliver. Appreciated, as always! Tony
Comment from RGstar
A strong beat throughout this. Good families of words incorporated.
Nicely thought through. Good alliteration throughout.
Well done.
Have a good Sunday, author.
RGstar
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
A strong beat throughout this. Good families of words incorporated.
Nicely thought through. Good alliteration throughout.
Well done.
Have a good Sunday, author.
RGstar
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Roy. Appreciated, as always! Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
You have scooped me as they say in journalistic circles. This is an absolute cracker. It reminded me of an old hymn we used to sing at school but when I ran it to eart only two lines of it were truly dactylic. Here is a link to it.
http://www.hymntime.com/tch/htm/o/w/o/oworship.htm
It was your ...ess rhymes that reminded me of it. There is something that is intrinsically humorous about these triple beat feet that makes them difficult to adapt to a more serious vein. I wouldn't even think of awarding less than six.
I am having my arch villain Count Scjzpondee trying defend himself dactylicly against St Peter's inquisition when he finds himself knocking soggily at the Pearly gates. In a short redoubled rondeau-drama. Watch this space.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
You have scooped me as they say in journalistic circles. This is an absolute cracker. It reminded me of an old hymn we used to sing at school but when I ran it to eart only two lines of it were truly dactylic. Here is a link to it.
http://www.hymntime.com/tch/htm/o/w/o/oworship.htm
It was your ...ess rhymes that reminded me of it. There is something that is intrinsically humorous about these triple beat feet that makes them difficult to adapt to a more serious vein. I wouldn't even think of awarding less than six.
I am having my arch villain Count Scjzpondee trying defend himself dactylicly against St Peter's inquisition when he finds himself knocking soggily at the Pearly gates. In a short redoubled rondeau-drama. Watch this space.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Thanks, Jim. I remember that one well from school, too. One of the loud ones that enabled me to sing at the top of my voice without anyone hearing me! I appreciate the six stars! Tony.
Comment from Aussie
Loved the old fashioned illustration to compliment your poem. This sounds like the Pied Piper with a drum! I wish you well with your contest entry; enjoyed it immensely. There is nothing like riding a bike with the wind in your hair, finding your brakes have failed! Oops!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
Loved the old fashioned illustration to compliment your poem. This sounds like the Pied Piper with a drum! I wish you well with your contest entry; enjoyed it immensely. There is nothing like riding a bike with the wind in your hair, finding your brakes have failed! Oops!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Thanks, Aussie, I enjoyed your entertaining review and appreciate the six stars. Most generous! Cheers, Tony