Heroes Within
Hospitals and Books have many heroes within19 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
What's a book? Someone should make a movie about it.
Great poem.
Patients with patience
Great line, well phrased.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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What's a book? Someone should make a movie about it.
Great poem.
Patients with patience
Great line, well phrased.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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Thank you--I heard they might be making a movie about that book thing!! :)
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting read! At first I was puzzled by some of the phrases which seemed disjointed in the first stanza. In the reverse order, it flows much more naturally. But it is quite an accomplishment to make sense forward and backwards with both books and hospitals as the subject!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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Interesting read! At first I was puzzled by some of the phrases which seemed disjointed in the first stanza. In the reverse order, it flows much more naturally. But it is quite an accomplishment to make sense forward and backwards with both books and hospitals as the subject!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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I flip flopped the thing so much, I decided to go for a better end than a beginning. I don't know if that is the right choice, I could lose people at the beginning, but alas, I have left it be for a couple days.
Comment from Irish Rain
Oh wow. It IS the same forwards and backwards. I like the idea! I also like the theme, hospitals, books, books, hospitals....great job!!!! Blessings....
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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Oh wow. It IS the same forwards and backwards. I like the idea! I also like the theme, hospitals, books, books, hospitals....great job!!!! Blessings....
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016
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Thank you! Circles of life in life and such!
Comment from Nika2016
Very nice reversal....
The subject of soldiers
with wounds makes me furious in that the last four wars were not defensive but offensive...
They are NOT fighting for our freedom but for oil...and dollars...pawns.
I liked the structure and the empathy...
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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Very nice reversal....
The subject of soldiers
with wounds makes me furious in that the last four wars were not defensive but offensive...
They are NOT fighting for our freedom but for oil...and dollars...pawns.
I liked the structure and the empathy...
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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me too me too me too!!! I feel your anger!!
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. These are difficult; it is really hard to right one without it feeling like a stretch in places. I believe this one should meet the criteria of the contest you have entered. Good luck with your contest entry!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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Thank you for sharing. These are difficult; it is really hard to right one without it feeling like a stretch in places. I believe this one should meet the criteria of the contest you have entered. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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Indeed. I put too much time in it, but it was interesting way to work the old brain. Thank you for your review.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
An excellent entry for the contest, TollyFaye! This was an original idea (original to me at least) for the Palindrome contest. Your palindrome poem made excellent sense both ways (forwards and backwards).
I could relate well right now to the "patients with patience" and "patience with patients" as my Wayne is currently in hospital having undergone hip replacement surgery. I loved it all. For some reason "hands missing, battles scarring" is the line that really jumped out at me the most. "Reality escaping. Imagining sterile settings" ... this line was very clever. How about changing the backwards line to ... Settings sterile. Imagining escaping reality?
Well done! Good luck in the contest TollyFaye!
Connie
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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An excellent entry for the contest, TollyFaye! This was an original idea (original to me at least) for the Palindrome contest. Your palindrome poem made excellent sense both ways (forwards and backwards).
I could relate well right now to the "patients with patience" and "patience with patients" as my Wayne is currently in hospital having undergone hip replacement surgery. I loved it all. For some reason "hands missing, battles scarring" is the line that really jumped out at me the most. "Reality escaping. Imagining sterile settings" ... this line was very clever. How about changing the backwards line to ... Settings sterile. Imagining escaping reality?
Well done! Good luck in the contest TollyFaye!
Connie
Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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I like your spin on that on that line!
I work up in the middle of the night and thought to add
passing time reading
reading, time passing
But I haven't "placed them in, think in the very beginning/end.
Thank you for taking the time to read it and good luck and fast healing to your Wayne! (and an extra order of patience!)
Cheers!
Tolly
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Yes, "passing time reading
reading, passing time" ... I like that, Tolly! :)
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Even though it is rough in some spots it is an excellent palindrome.
They are hard to write and you picked a perfect subject that affects all of us.
Very nicely done
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Even though it is rough in some spots it is an excellent palindrome.
They are hard to write and you picked a perfect subject that affects all of us.
Very nicely done
Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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I struggled. I keep editting it. . . Very challenging.
Comment from winnona
A well written Palindrome poetry entry ,the words are well chosen and flow together nicely line to line combining and forming the message of the poem to the reader.
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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A well written Palindrome poetry entry ,the words are well chosen and flow together nicely line to line combining and forming the message of the poem to the reader.
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thank ypu so very very muchThose are really really hard to do!
Comment from Mike Stevens
A fine poem, and two subjects I never would have thought go together, but damn if you didn't make it work, good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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A fine poem, and two subjects I never would have thought go together, but damn if you didn't make it work, good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
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Thank you. That was really really hard!!! I struggled!!
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Well, ya done good!
