Comment from CEO2020

Excellent

Hi. I define your style as classic. Basic, simple, but poignant in critical areas to please the reader. You might be surprised because I have a different writing style , but I have learned a lot from reading your work. I seek to accomplish what you have done already.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016

Thank you for the encouraging review.

Comment from tollyfaye

Excellent

Greed and Machismo are probably man's two most motivating factors. You write in your notes that you struggled to write it, but I think your dialogue is impressive and tells a story well.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016

My characters like to take over. It's hard to keep them in line. LOL Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from RPSaxena

Exceptional

Hello Barbara.wilkey,
I've almost been a regular reader; sometimes missing some pieces, but even then I'm able to catch the point and start enjoying the story because of its impressive wording and captivating flow. Here lies the greatness of a writer. It's my opinion.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

I'm sorry that I've obviously missed a few chapters, but this is well written from a standpoint of dialogue, scene set up and character interaction. The piece about the drug cartels matches well the news we hear from time to time with regard to our southern border. Looking forward to the concluding chapters.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

Aha. Grandfather has asked the pertinent question! Something of a transitional chapter, this one. Putting the pieces together, figuring things out. It flowed well, I think, Barbara.

One teeny nit:

Kuruk tapped his chest with his fist(,)


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 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016

Thank you for the kind review. i will fix that.

Comment from DLBoo

Good

Excellent chapter! Mind you this is the only chapter that I have had the pleasure of reading, but based on that your book seems more like a crime thriller than a romance to me. Not that there is anything wrong with a crime thriller having a bit of romance in the story line. In fact I find you get a wider audience that way.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016

I am not exactly sure what I can improve to get a five. Please let me know.

reply by DLBoo on 28-Sep-2016

I am not a professional reviewer. I only had the one chapter to base my review on and that was chapter 63 at that. With that being said; that chapter read more like a crime thriller than a romance to me. Now fro only the one chapter it lead me to think perhaps the book needs to be re-categorized and that's where the five star rating came in. If I had the opportunity to read previous chapters maybe I wouldn't feel this way.

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2016

From another reviewer, just a thought.

I think the story consist of multiple genres. I can feel the fun you are having writing this story through the words from the characters. I cant give you a review from the eyes of an editor. But from the eyes of a common reader which are the people that buy books - the story captures the general reading audience attention.

reply by DLBoo on 04-Oct-2016

I couldn't agree more. Finding a genre for the book your writing when it fits into multiple genres is always a pain in my behind. At least for me because I also inevitably end up falling into more than one.

Comment from kriver

Excellent

Hi,

Congrats on being so close
to the finish of your novel.
I think this is a tremendous
achievement.
Because only a very small percentage
actually finish and you have done it.
It looks like editing fun will soon be in your future.
Congrats again, and best wishes for success
with you new book.
Best regards,
K River

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

Good chapter, Barbara, and I like the ending, with Kuruk's question.

He walked over to (the) kitchen area.

"Not as good as Tatiana's(,) but will work for now."

He decided to help his cousin,(no comma) Eduardo for two reasons,(:) greed and machismo."

Kuruk waited for Jim to respond,(. When) when he didn't(,) he continued,

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016

Thank you for the kind review. I have made the corrections.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Barbara,

Good continuation once again. Fleshing things out and rounding some stuff up. A pointed question to finish on too. LOL

Shaman's pouch. "What did you give him anyway? - need closing speech marks here.

Kuruk stood. "What are your intentions for my granddaughter?
- need closing speech marks here as well.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016

I have made the correction. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

It sounds like Kuruk is getting down to family business with Jim. haha
I can see how things are pulling together as you approach the conclusion. They still have to clear the ownership of the ranch so that it's Soni's and Littleton doesn't have any rights.

Your getting there. You've done a fantastic job and I know the end will be terrific.

:) e

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2016

Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the support.