Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi there, I came in late to this, but this is a great story and really sweet. It's refreshingly different. Well done and good luck All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016

I'm glad you like it, Ulla. For some strange reason I love writing stories about snails and slugs.
Have a nice evening.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Well this entry into the contest is priceless. You've done a great job with it. It's entertaining, interesting, and has a larger point you wish to express. I wish you the best with this fun write. Marilyn

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2016

Thanks once again for your constant support, Marilyn.

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

Poor Shelly, but her death changed Sheldon's life forever. Great story with a fantastic ending.
I appreciate the way you approached bigotry by using shells' colors and what I felt were adorable little snails.

Suggestions:
-I might fall in love with you.(')
-Yes, the snails in this story have tongues...(I would delete this. It takes the reader out of the story. Quite a jolt to hear the writer's voice.)and this: (yes, they have arms too)

Good luck in the contest.

:) e

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2016

Thanks for your comments, Ellen.
I have added the missing inverted comma, thanks for noticing.
I haven't deleted the asides, though as I quite like them, but I see your point.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, M J

= Cute story. Well in keeping prejudices of today.
= Age old problem, and I don't think it will change any too quickly.
= Excellent entry for the contest. Good Luck.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2016

I'm glad you enjoyed it, Jax.

Comment from heyjude

Excellent

MJ, I think this is a good story for the Star-Crossed Lovers contest.
It's also a way to get a point across about prejudice. I felt sad when
I realized what was going to happen to Shelly. I think you did very well.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016

Thanks for reading, Judith

Comment from winnona

Exceptional

This is more than good. It is great! I absolutely loved this story. It is well written, imaginative and very creative, This would be a great story for kindergarteners or preschool children's story hour would you mind if I shared this story on my facebook page?

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016

Hi Winnona,
I'm glad you liked the story. Thanks so much for the great review, the six stars and for bookmarking it. Of course you can share in on Facebook.
Take care,
MJ

Comment from aryr

Excellent

Oh my, a tragedy actually within a tragedy. Romeo and Juliet were recreated with Sheldon and Shelly. This was a great little story that addressed the one sided feelings of some parents that even exists in these times. I guess the goodness is that Sheldon took a stand and perhaps his father learned a lesson. Great job, thanks.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016

Thanks once again for reading my work. I'm glad you liked this one.

reply by aryr on 16-Sep-2016

It was good and you are welcome.

Comment from MelB

Excellent

It took me a little bit to figure out I wasn't reading about a boy and his pet snail. It's a sad story, right down to Shelly getting crunched.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016

Thanks for reading, Melissa.

reply by MelB on 16-Sep-2016

You're welcome.

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Hehe I love this story and i appreciate the hidden meaning This my friend is a great illustrated children's book that could have many more books told of the adventures of Sheldon the blue shell snail.

dip

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016

I'm glad you liked it, Dip. I might write more about Sheldon one day.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written story about diversity between different races and sexes. We are all one human race, it is time to accept each other's differences and live without prejudice.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016

Thanks, Sandra. I'm glad you think the story is well-written. I enjoyed writing it.