Comment from Justin Yhoung

Exceptional

This poem hits home because of a family member who liked sailing on boats and had a poem sewn into his pillow. Needless to say, I was immediately attracted to it.
The flow went very well; it seemed like it progressed.
The telling of a savior at the end makes it comforting.
Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thank you so much, Justin, what a lovely review, and a big hug for the 6 stars! You should join our Picture This Challenge group, its a bit of fun, and it doesn't cost anything. We all right a poem about what thoughts come to us on one picture. If you are interested, going into Jax Franklins profile and post her a message. It would be great to have you along, and you will meet lots more poets and they will all get to meet you. Thank you again, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

reply by Justin Yhoung on 21-Oct-2016

THank you for the heads up, I might check it out in time! Thanks again!

Comment from JTStone

Excellent

So, Sandra...

I miss your poems, I expected your work to be published by now. You have an amazing gift with the children's story poems. This piece of adult targeted material is well done. I thought that the poem read well and the rhymes all worked for me.

I see in my inbox, a new release, part XII of a new story..I guess I really have a lot of catching up to do--I really hate to read out of sequence...

I probably will peak, gotta give you the starz this week end when they have the most meaning. I just hope that it doesn't have to many spoiler alerts in it.

Jimmy

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016

Hi Jimmy, No, you won't find any spoiler alerts in any of the recent parts. You are coming to the end of the very first part which is in chapter 12 part 2, then we will be fast forwarding a year., you might already be there. I've had some children's book published, my very first one, Hedgerow Capers, was picked up by Melrose Books, in 2012. I just haven't had the time just lately to write much poetry, my brother is very ill, and I've been with him a lot. Thank you for reading my Lighthouse poem, you might want to join the Picture This challenge group, it's fun. Big hugs, my friend. :) sandra

Comment from pattipac

Excellent

Sandra, your well chosen descriptive words put your reviewers on this storm tossed ship, Where sailors prayed for God to intervene and guide them safely home. Thanks for the enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2016

Thank you for reading my Picture This challenge, Patricia. I didn't manage to come up with anything till the last minute, but I am enjoying these challenges. I'm so I'm pleased you liked it. Have you written yours yet? I'll take a look, you hadn't last time I looked. Thanks again! :) Sandra xx

Comment from Loren (7)

Excellent

Hi Sandra. I'm a bit behind in my reading as I've been on jury duty for 10 days. But wanted to make a quick comment on your poem. I found it profound and it brought back memories of my dad as his favorite gospel song was "Let the lower lights keep burning." Anyway, best of luck in the contest. You've done a great job with the inspired poem from the picture. Loren

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016

Thank you, Loren. I'm so pleased it brought back a happy memory of your dad. I have many good memories of mine too, so know how precious they are. Thanks, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

The confusion of meter and rhyme here is obvosly deliberate with the form matching the confusion of the content, the raging of the sea. The upper case H in his identifies the metaphorical nature of the lighthouse as a God showing the way. This is quite a common theme connected with lighthouses. One the Salvationists are are fond of goes:

"Oh let it shine, oh let it shine
Let the light from the lighthouse shine on me.
etc."

This has passed into the general folk music world. A fine interpretation of the picture.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016

What a lovely review, thank you so much, Jim. I was stumped when I first saw the picture, so put it aside. I'm really pleased you liked it. I know that song, and now it is playing itself inside me head, I bet it'll be there all day! LOL. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Awwww, Sandra, this is such a lovely take on the Picture This Challege. Being a sailor myself you have captured the essence of being out in rough weather. And the lighthouse can indeed be the beam that brings you home. Hugs. Ulla xxx

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016

Thank you, Ulla. I know you are, and I wanted to be a sailor as a child. My family are all Royal Navy, and when my uncle John (who is only 2 years older than me) went to the Navy academy, and was given his uniform, I was so jealous of him! LOL. Thanks, my friend! :) Sandra. xxx

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

I really like the form you used here. You have such nice iambic meter. I thought your rhymes were nice and you included a near rhyme of, "home". It all works well to me.

So it looks to me that you tell a story with iambic pentameter and then a reaction comes to us in smaller iambic lines of less syllables. It has a musical feel to it.

Line 8 seems to be off meter at the beginning of the line.

All in all this is a creative poem. I like it a lot!

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016

Hi Joy, thank you for this lovely review. I'll check on that line and see if I can sort it out. I'm really pleased you liked the form I used, it was a bit haphazard, but I wanted it to feel like the tossing of the waves. I wasn't sure if I'd achieved it, so I was particularly pleased with what you said. Thanks my friend! :) Sandra xx

Comment from MelB

Excellent

This is a truly beautiful and touching poem, Sandra! No matter how rough the waters or life get, He is always there to calm us and to be our saving grace.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016

Thank you, Melissa, what a lovely review. I'm so pleased you saw the connection. Big hugs! xsx Sandra

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Sandra, what a wonderful story told sweet girl....the sailors thought there prayers weren't heard...and then they saw His lighthouse...The Lord said ...Let there be light...and there it was...a wonderful poem my sweet friend...and a great picture ...love to ya Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016

Aww, thank you, Linda. It was the first thing that came to me. His Light. I'm so pleased you got my message in this poem. But, of course you would, you're just like the lighthouse, spreading light and hope. Love you too, dear friend. :) Sandra

Ian is struggling still, I don't know how he keeps smiling. His amputation isn't healing. I think with all the drugs he is taking, and all his different problems, the wound just can't renew itself. They are trying something else now. It might mean a skin graft, but I'm only guessing. He and Maggie have booked a holiday cruise with six of their friends, for next October! Now that is optimism! So, I must also remain so. Thank you, dear friend, for your continued concern and love, and prayers, and just being our lighthouse. xxx

reply by l.raven on 14-Sep-2016

Tears my friend...thank you so much...I love that Ian did that...that is pure faith in God...Jesus...and They will feel it...I know he will make that trip...my mother is a diabetic too...she has trouble healing as well...goes through a ton of meds to find one...and she has the same allergy problem I do...but God ...Jesus...always come through...I so proud of Ian...what a spirit he has...still have a candle on the table...and a prayer in my heart...it's going to get better...off to find what Lady Ann is up to...LOL...love you as well my dear friend...love to Ian...xxoo Linda

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, Sandra. A wonderful poem here. In fact, I wish I had more sixes left. We have a lot of lighthouises along the coasts of Michigan. And they are wonderrous creations both in aging and practical use.

I liked these lines in particular:

"And then a shout came from the nest,
a light they'd spied along the crest
was flashing on and off to show the way ...
It was His lighthouse come to save the day."

Bravo! Bob

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

My dear friend, thank you so much for your really lovely review. I don't need a 6 when you say such nice things. :) Sandra xxx

reply by Mastery on 13-Sep-2016

XXX Bob