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Comment from Liz O'Neill
Cody has good strong skills of knowing how to assess the situation and he did it all. Very good planning. This is the danger for runaways. Some get thrown into a trafficking operation. Then when they get scared, they kind of conclude 'the devil you know is better than the devel you don't know...how pathetic.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
Cody has good strong skills of knowing how to assess the situation and he did it all. Very good planning. This is the danger for runaways. Some get thrown into a trafficking operation. Then when they get scared, they kind of conclude 'the devil you know is better than the devel you don't know...how pathetic.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Agree with your comments. Appreciate thevreview.
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A good topic
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Exciting! Cody was smart and no doubt saved himself from living hell. After that, I doubt he'll try running away ever again. LOL!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2016
Exciting! Cody was smart and no doubt saved himself from living hell. After that, I doubt he'll try running away ever again. LOL!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Comment from crybry67
That's a very well written story. I'm interested to see what happens next. I love the phrase 'stewing like a pickle with no way out of the jar'.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
That's a very well written story. I'm interested to see what happens next. I love the phrase 'stewing like a pickle with no way out of the jar'.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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The conclusion of this story is now posted. Glad you enjoyed this portion. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from simmonska
Liking that the hobo has a bit of polish to him, using rhyming words like fricasseed and escapades. Also liking that he uses wrong verb tenses like "runned away" which is reminiscent of Lennie Small in "Of Mice and Men".
Re: the line "where the hobo told him they would disembark the train"; disembark conveys they will exit the train in a civilized orderly manner as if they were traveling for pleasure.. which is the opposite of what they're about to do. Consider revising to "where the hobo told him they would be getting off of the train". The emotion and drama between the characters and mind chatter of the boy are aptly conveyed.
Nicely done!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
Liking that the hobo has a bit of polish to him, using rhyming words like fricasseed and escapades. Also liking that he uses wrong verb tenses like "runned away" which is reminiscent of Lennie Small in "Of Mice and Men".
Re: the line "where the hobo told him they would disembark the train"; disembark conveys they will exit the train in a civilized orderly manner as if they were traveling for pleasure.. which is the opposite of what they're about to do. Consider revising to "where the hobo told him they would be getting off of the train". The emotion and drama between the characters and mind chatter of the boy are aptly conveyed.
Nicely done!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. The first, second, conclusion parts of this story are also posted. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from emptypage
I love this. It gripped me. I hated/feared the hobo and was glad Cody recognized the danger the guy represented. I haven't read your other chapters, but I see I can click on them above. This makes me happy. Your voice is distinctive.
You wrote: "I got big plans for you gorgeous." You need a comma between "you" and "gorgeous."
You wrote: "Hate to tell you this, Kiddo, but your reputation proceeds you far and wide." "Precedes," not "proceeds."
Good stuff.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
I love this. It gripped me. I hated/feared the hobo and was glad Cody recognized the danger the guy represented. I haven't read your other chapters, but I see I can click on them above. This makes me happy. Your voice is distinctive.
You wrote: "I got big plans for you gorgeous." You need a comma between "you" and "gorgeous."
You wrote: "Hate to tell you this, Kiddo, but your reputation proceeds you far and wide." "Precedes," not "proceeds."
Good stuff.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments, support, and the catches appreciated.
Comment from barkingdog
Good for Cody. Smart boy pushed the hobo out and managed to keep his own footing.
Now, he regrets running away. He want to be back with his dad.
I felt how scared Cody was, and now alone, how full of regret he is.
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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
Good for Cody. Smart boy pushed the hobo out and managed to keep his own footing.
Now, he regrets running away. He want to be back with his dad.
I felt how scared Cody was, and now alone, how full of regret he is.
:) e
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Heidi M
You have a spunky MC, so your readers are cheering for him. He is learning a valuable lesson and gaining new perspective on life.
Two small spags: preceded (not proceeded) and fell (not feel) flat on his back
Great job of story-telling!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
You have a spunky MC, so your readers are cheering for him. He is learning a valuable lesson and gaining new perspective on life.
Two small spags: preceded (not proceeded) and fell (not feel) flat on his back
Great job of story-telling!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Appreciate your comments, review, and the catches.
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
I almost missed reading and reviewing this chapter! Cody is such a resourceful young boy! Never seems to get rattled by whatever he is facing! Using his head to figure out that if he jumped up and caught the hobo off guard he could possibly get away. A stroke of luck, the hobo lost his balance and flew out the opposite open door! Now he can get off of the train anytime he feels safe in doing so!
Brett another intense story with Cody using some ingenuity to get rid of that hobo! Well done my friend,,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
I almost missed reading and reviewing this chapter! Cody is such a resourceful young boy! Never seems to get rattled by whatever he is facing! Using his head to figure out that if he jumped up and caught the hobo off guard he could possibly get away. A stroke of luck, the hobo lost his balance and flew out the opposite open door! Now he can get off of the train anytime he feels safe in doing so!
Brett another intense story with Cody using some ingenuity to get rid of that hobo! Well done my friend,,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 11-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come. The conclusion of this story is also posted.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I truly like the way you took this, as I saw the different avenues you could go.
Now to get him back home where he belongs.
Nicely written
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
I truly like the way you took this, as I saw the different avenues you could go.
Now to get him back home where he belongs.
Nicely written
Comment Written 09-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Way to geo Cody. Wondered how he would escape from this maniac. You built the suspense and resolved the issue perfectly.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
Way to geo Cody. Wondered how he would escape from this maniac. You built the suspense and resolved the issue perfectly.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. The conclusion has also been posted. Your comments appreciated.