To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 " Origins hunger"Poems by Michael
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Comment from tfawcus
Loved the atmosphere of this. Just beautiful. Those long 'a' sounds throughout are just delicious. (shade/aubade/serenade/persuade/unmade/escapade/etc). Aubade is a new word for me - perfect in the context - for your poem is truly a dawn serenade. Wish I had a six left for it, but alas...
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Loved the atmosphere of this. Just beautiful. Those long 'a' sounds throughout are just delicious. (shade/aubade/serenade/persuade/unmade/escapade/etc). Aubade is a new word for me - perfect in the context - for your poem is truly a dawn serenade. Wish I had a six left for it, but alas...
Comment Written 11-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Hey thanks ...-smile-
means much comong from you Sir....thanks.....love Michael
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, in a serenade of words...you want to taste marmalade on Melba toast...feel Strawberries preserves cool shade...all the things you crave...you owe me some...
as I told you...in every poem you write...there are words that win a person over...lines...so very well written you...and your picture is stunning...love you Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Hi Michael, in a serenade of words...you want to taste marmalade on Melba toast...feel Strawberries preserves cool shade...all the things you crave...you owe me some...
as I told you...in every poem you write...there are words that win a person over...lines...so very well written you...and your picture is stunning...love you Linda xxoo
Comment Written 11-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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-smile-...hi.
well if words could wing wishes true...I wouldn't dream of Genie. but chances are lottery's here to stay Linda. aha...thank you Dear...I liked this too....love you Michael
Comment from Domino 2
A 'breadcrumb' extravaganza of excellent alliteration, assonance and consonance, Michael.
Your usual very gifted unique style to get our lazy brain-cells working, and even if they come to no conclusion, it's a great exercise.
Food/'taste' mixed with sensuality equals a hit!
Top free verse, my friend.
Cheers, Ray.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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A 'breadcrumb' extravaganza of excellent alliteration, assonance and consonance, Michael.
Your usual very gifted unique style to get our lazy brain-cells working, and even if they come to no conclusion, it's a great exercise.
Food/'taste' mixed with sensuality equals a hit!
Top free verse, my friend.
Cheers, Ray.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Hey Ray...-smile-
thank you man....ha....yea well the belly is mans second favorite organ. breeding and food Brother that's what its all about aha....love Michael
Comment from lancellot
Em, is that what it like to kiss the ruby red lips of a perfect ten? One could only imagine. Well, one could also read this poem and know. Well done, makes a man want to seek out a woman just like this.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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Em, is that what it like to kiss the ruby red lips of a perfect ten? One could only imagine. Well, one could also read this poem and know. Well done, makes a man want to seek out a woman just like this.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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you know as well as I the "perfect ten" is the one who's eyes light up when she sees you coming....Hey Lance...-smile-
yes every man seeks a woman like this....love to you Bro....Michael
Comment from Senyai
Reconciled, this is excellent! Chris Isaac always sets the mood :)
But back to the words, free form is great for painting so much in very little time. The back story here is deep, the future is lit but the now is fascinating...
Well done on this one. Bookcased for safe keeping.
Senyai
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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Reconciled, this is excellent! Chris Isaac always sets the mood :)
But back to the words, free form is great for painting so much in very little time. The back story here is deep, the future is lit but the now is fascinating...
Well done on this one. Bookcased for safe keeping.
Senyai
Comment Written 10-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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Hi...-smile-
Michael...please call me Michael.
I've read four of yours...and they are full of life. I'm very surprised I've not noticed you until now. Senyai...I wont forget. love Michael
Comment from Slythytove2
Afraid I had to go to the dictionary for" aubade" but was quickly back on track. I'm particularly, well not "envious" so much as envious of your last four lines. The"...wild honeys sound like taste", with out the possessive apostrophe play on honey. Damn that's grate. lol
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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Afraid I had to go to the dictionary for" aubade" but was quickly back on track. I'm particularly, well not "envious" so much as envious of your last four lines. The"...wild honeys sound like taste", with out the possessive apostrophe play on honey. Damn that's grate. lol
Comment Written 10-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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lol....I really dont do it on purpose. I'm a natural nerve grater you see...my sense of apostrophe never made it out of elementary science...aha....thanks man....love Michael
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I went and looked up "apostrophe"thinking it might not be totally out of character for you to play with that, and surprisingly found a secondary meaning. It can also be used as" a digression in the form of an address to someone who isn't present" I guess like an "aside", so at least it didn't go over my head. Thanks too.
Comment from robyn corum
I have to admit that most of this was too far above my head, but it was gently romantic sounding in my ear. Wish I understood, but it sounds like someone is happy with just the breadcrumbs. (??)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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I have to admit that most of this was too far above my head, but it was gently romantic sounding in my ear. Wish I understood, but it sounds like someone is happy with just the breadcrumbs. (??)
Comment Written 10-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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negative....were you ever...?
Hi Robyn....-smile-
no Maam...this is image placement...precise as the readers mind.
maybe I should have went with crackers....that would work with melba toast right...? ah Jesus Robyn...this is about motivating poets to give me some.......and you too....I want you to take me there....its a quiet lil' place just on the outskirts of whoops...I think I just broke. aha..-smile-...ah well lil' convalescing cant kill me right...see ya when I feel better. love Michael
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hahahaha!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written love poem. When we are in love with someone we are happy with the crumbs they give us, and will never demands for more than they willing to give.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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A very well-written love poem. When we are in love with someone we are happy with the crumbs they give us, and will never demands for more than they willing to give.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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lol...now that is funny....Hi Sandra...-smile-
ah -headshake-...no we're not. in fact the kind of love that satisfies...is never satisfied...it always wants more.
really this poem is about the power of the right words and the poet's ability to place you in them. sshhwwwoo...I'm just sitting here watching airplanes...take off...and fly....aha...love Michael
Comment from DonandVicki
I always enjoy reading your work because of the inspiration that I get from reading your poetry. Well done and I hope to read more.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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I always enjoy reading your work because of the inspiration that I get from reading your poetry. Well done and I hope to read more.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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well thank God you're married...your probably safe....aha...hey Guys....-smile-...I'm glad you enjoyed this with me....love Michael
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello Michael,
You have a unique and interesting style of writing that stands out.
Breadcrumb bliss ... I like the line.
An invigorating read. :)
Have a great weekend.
Sonali
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Hello Michael,
You have a unique and interesting style of writing that stands out.
Breadcrumb bliss ... I like the line.
An invigorating read. :)
Have a great weekend.
Sonali
Comment Written 09-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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yes yes I do...apparently just like Chernobyl. aha...hey Sonali...-smile- thanks for showing up, most only do Nicodemus now a days..-shouldershrug-....always wanting to know how to be born again...never willing. same old song and dance Sonali....I'm here when you need me. love Michael
