What is this moon?
A Villanelle70 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
You certainly established the mood well for this Vilanelle with MoonWillow's artwork. I admired your rhymes and refrain plus it modification. Your description is vivid and your metaphors like "death mask," "rotting cheese" and "parasite" are very effective, along with your personification of the "night". Well done! -Joan
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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You certainly established the mood well for this Vilanelle with MoonWillow's artwork. I admired your rhymes and refrain plus it modification. Your description is vivid and your metaphors like "death mask," "rotting cheese" and "parasite" are very effective, along with your personification of the "night". Well done! -Joan
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Thanks, Joan. Glad you enjoyed it. There is a strong field of entrants in this contest of Steve's. I shall enjoy reading the rest of them.
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Your entry is right up there with the other strong entries. Here's go being well recognized with a glorious win! -Joan
Comment from Treischel
This is an outstanding Villanelle that harkens to the dark side of the macabre. The imagery of death and decay is outstanding. The flow and transitions are remarkably creative as they paint the image of an evil moon. Very compelling,
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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This is an outstanding Villanelle that harkens to the dark side of the macabre. The imagery of death and decay is outstanding. The flow and transitions are remarkably creative as they paint the image of an evil moon. Very compelling,
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thanks very much for your kind review, Tom, and the six stars. Haven't seen you on site recently. Hope all is well.
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Hi Tony. Just been off on vacation p, and dealing with some family business. Setting up a website with my publisher too. So, just busy.
Comment from Just2Write
Man, you always show us how to do things right. A fine example of a Villanelle - and a superbly creepy look at the moon through the eyes of a lunatic. Loved how you worked in the haunting repeating lines to add intensity into the ramblings of the person tortured by the sight of the moon.
You've outdone yourself, Tony.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Man, you always show us how to do things right. A fine example of a Villanelle - and a superbly creepy look at the moon through the eyes of a lunatic. Loved how you worked in the haunting repeating lines to add intensity into the ramblings of the person tortured by the sight of the moon.
You've outdone yourself, Tony.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Always good to hear from you, Rose - especially when you've such nice things to say! LOL Six stars as well! I'm purring.
Read your very fine Villanelle this morning. Hoping to find time to review within the next day or so. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Wow this is a great Villanelle Tony, and such a different way to think about the moon - far from a romantic moon this one, I love it.Good luck in the contest, this is great.
cheers.
valda.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Wow this is a great Villanelle Tony, and such a different way to think about the moon - far from a romantic moon this one, I love it.Good luck in the contest, this is great.
cheers.
valda.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Very many thanks for this lovely review with its supportive comments and six stars. Much appreciated! Tony
Comment from F. Wehr3
I don't know where to begin. It's simply beautiful. Excellent word choices and vivid often creepy imagery throughout. Being a fantasy writer, I gobble this up. Yum!
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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I don't know where to begin. It's simply beautiful. Excellent word choices and vivid often creepy imagery throughout. Being a fantasy writer, I gobble this up. Yum!
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 11-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Thank you for this glowing review and six stars, Russell. Much appreciated! Tony
Comment from tollyfaye
I think this is one of the hardest poems. To write and to read. It can easily become a chore on both ends. Yours is great. You have either natural skill or you really worked to make this poem. Either way is a talent. BTW, I also like that you had a glossary, just to confirm that I truly knew what a wight was. Thanks!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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I think this is one of the hardest poems. To write and to read. It can easily become a chore on both ends. Yours is great. You have either natural skill or you really worked to make this poem. Either way is a talent. BTW, I also like that you had a glossary, just to confirm that I truly knew what a wight was. Thanks!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Hi Faye, Glad you enjoyed this bit of nonsense! Thanks very much for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from vkmack
What a spectacularly eerie portrait of the moon! Each line reiterates the ominous nature of "this fetid pool of light" and all it illuminates. Stanzas two and four are especially effective; they create a haunting vision. You really know how to create an image. Great use of villanelle form; this is tight and stylistically sound. Your iambic pentameter scans perfectly.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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What a spectacularly eerie portrait of the moon! Each line reiterates the ominous nature of "this fetid pool of light" and all it illuminates. Stanzas two and four are especially effective; they create a haunting vision. You really know how to create an image. Great use of villanelle form; this is tight and stylistically sound. Your iambic pentameter scans perfectly.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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I very much appreciate your perceptive and supportive review and the six stars accompanying it. It is always a pleasure to receive a critical accolade from a fellow writer. Thank you. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is well crafted. It does seem like an easy post or form to master but you did it well and the reader understands. The glossary helped. I was thinking what is a wight?
Good work.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Hmm, this is well crafted. It does seem like an easy post or form to master but you did it well and the reader understands. The glossary helped. I was thinking what is a wight?
Good work.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Many thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from l.raven
Hi Tony, LOL...well you see the moon a bit different than me...LOL...but to each his own...LOL...I don't know much about the villanelle form...but I know you as a writer...so I'm sure you nailed it my friend...very well written...and great rhythm and rhyme...love your picture you...Love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Hi Tony, LOL...well you see the moon a bit different than me...LOL...but to each his own...LOL...I don't know much about the villanelle form...but I know you as a writer...so I'm sure you nailed it my friend...very well written...and great rhythm and rhyme...love your picture you...Love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 10-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Many thanks, Linda. Glad you enjoyed it!
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you are so very welcome Tony...xxoo Linda
Comment from Ulla
Hi there. O gosh, I shouldn't even be reviewing this as I haven't the faintest idea what a villanelle is, but I'm doing it anyway as I find it is a lovely poem that I really enjoyed to read. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Hi there. O gosh, I shouldn't even be reviewing this as I haven't the faintest idea what a villanelle is, but I'm doing it anyway as I find it is a lovely poem that I really enjoyed to read. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 10-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2016
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Many thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!
