Comment from honeytree

Excellent

Where ever we are
we have a different
outlook everyday
nothing may not be the same as yesterday
life can be come so changeable in every way.

Honeytree

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2016

Comment from KyColonel Randal

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this free verse poem. My constructive criticism would be to avoid end rhymes altogether when writing free verse poetry. The same goes for meter. This allows readers to focus on the other literary devices you might you and keeps them from become distracted by the odd rhyme or rhythm here and there.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

thanks for the visit, hugs, my poetry is a bit different, thanks for the stop

Comment from JanPerry

Excellent

This is very profound and over my head but I'll give it a shot anyway.
What is saiing? You said "the" twice on lines 7/8. What is "prier".
Am I supposed to lug my heavy dictionary around every time I read FAnstory?
It might be a good idea to put the weird words with a definition at the bottom.
Thanks.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016

Dice game, they threw die for Christ's clothes, a type of mind travel, using military situation, to fill as a vehicle for mental movement