nose sniffing autumn (senryu)
Who's walking whom?98 total reviews
Comment from Nika2016
This is very good and many of us have dogs that walk us..ha..
Mine would have none of being pulled on a leash but ran out ahead to protect me. He was about 12 inches long.
Funny poem..very visual.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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This is very good and many of us have dogs that walk us..ha..
Mine would have none of being pulled on a leash but ran out ahead to protect me. He was about 12 inches long.
Funny poem..very visual.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Yes, Nika2016, our dogs will run ahead to protect us and sniff out the scenery. I am thrilled that my poem resonated with many dog owners and that my poem placed second in the contest. Thank you for your review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
I think many dog-owners will recognise and sympathise with this situation.
The humour arising from the role-reversal scenario is appropriate for the senryu, and your words conjure up a vivid image, which adds to the scene setting of the first line.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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I think many dog-owners will recognise and sympathise with this situation.
The humour arising from the role-reversal scenario is appropriate for the senryu, and your words conjure up a vivid image, which adds to the scene setting of the first line.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Oh, thank you, Steve, for your review. Yes, "many dog-owners will recognise and sympathise with this situation" enough for my poem to win second in the contest! Thanks again.
Comment from krys123
Hello Anonymous;
-we, having two dogs of our own, can completely relate to your writing and is mostly talked about with our neighbors when we say that the dogs took us for a walk and not the other way around. I find this very humorous and quite funny and very apropos to a Senryu's meaning.
-Good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016
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Hello Anonymous;
-we, having two dogs of our own, can completely relate to your writing and is mostly talked about with our neighbors when we say that the dogs took us for a walk and not the other way around. I find this very humorous and quite funny and very apropos to a Senryu's meaning.
-Good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016
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Thank you, Alex, for your review. Many dog owners related to my Senryu. Thank you also for wishing me success in the contest.
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You are so very welcome my friend.
Alex
Comment from Alex Rosel
Ha, ha. This meets the contest's remit and brought a smile to my face. As a frequent dog walker of numerous neighbours dogs, how I can relate to the sentiment expressed.
As a Senryu, it's nicely balanced. Good luck with the competition.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016
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Ha, ha. This meets the contest's remit and brought a smile to my face. As a frequent dog walker of numerous neighbours dogs, how I can relate to the sentiment expressed.
As a Senryu, it's nicely balanced. Good luck with the competition.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016
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Oh, thank you, Alex, I am glad my Senryu brought a smile to your face. Thank you for your review.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Aww, a Chihuahua poet. Now there's a first. However I do understand about the dog taking charge of the walk. My old Boston Terrier was good at it, himself. It's amazing how a dog can get us out of the house and about meeting others. Guess that's why they are "man's best friend".
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Aww, a Chihuahua poet. Now there's a first. However I do understand about the dog taking charge of the walk. My old Boston Terrier was good at it, himself. It's amazing how a dog can get us out of the house and about meeting others. Guess that's why they are "man's best friend".
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Oh, thank you, Rhonda, for your review. I will share your praise to Mina being a Chihuahua poet. When I heard the good news that our poem placed second in the contest, I fed her a treat. Thanks.
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Wooo, hooo, congrats, my friend!
Comment from Alan K Pease
Your Senryu, "nose sniffing autumn," fits the constraints of this form of poetry in an excellent fashion. Good luck in the writing prompt contest.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Your Senryu, "nose sniffing autumn," fits the constraints of this form of poetry in an excellent fashion. Good luck in the writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Oh, thank you, Alan, for your review and wishing me good luck. My poem just placed second in the contest. Thanks.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Senryu very much for the funny poem. A friend of mine wrote a poem he let (insisted) I read it. he said, "What do you think? It's senryu."
I said, "No it isn't."
He said, "Yes it is. A guy in a bar told me."
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Senryu very much for the funny poem. A friend of mine wrote a poem he let (insisted) I read it. he said, "What do you think? It's senryu."
I said, "No it isn't."
He said, "Yes it is. A guy in a bar told me."
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Thank you, Thomas, for your review and your funny anecdote. I appreciate them. My poem just placed second in the contest, making me smile more. Thanks.
Comment from Bollie
How cute!!! This is a very clever and creative poem that is perfect for the Senryu contest. I've had a few dogs lead me around town too. Thanks for making me laugh.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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How cute!!! This is a very clever and creative poem that is perfect for the Senryu contest. I've had a few dogs lead me around town too. Thanks for making me laugh.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Yes, Bollie, not only did my dog lead me around, but she led me to a second place win in the Senryu contest! Thank you for your review.
Comment from Kazzawin
I love this!
As a dog lover and owner I can relate totally. I don't consider that being taken for walks by my pooch is the privilege of the senior generation, my dog decides the route and the speed no matter who is on the end of the leash!
Great phrasing and fun subject. I really enjoyed it, good luck : )
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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I love this!
As a dog lover and owner I can relate totally. I don't consider that being taken for walks by my pooch is the privilege of the senior generation, my dog decides the route and the speed no matter who is on the end of the leash!
Great phrasing and fun subject. I really enjoyed it, good luck : )
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Yes, Kazzawin, I am thrilled that many dog lovers and owners related totally to my poem enough for it to win second in the contest. Thank you for your review.
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Brilliant!
Comment from Domino 2
A fun 'role reversal' as you say, and your words create imagery of the old fella being dragged along behind.
I'm not sure I would feel grateful, though I know I SHOULD. ;-)
Cheers, Ray.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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A fun 'role reversal' as you say, and your words create imagery of the old fella being dragged along behind.
I'm not sure I would feel grateful, though I know I SHOULD. ;-)
Cheers, Ray.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Thank you, Ray, for your generous review of my senryu about role reversal. I am grateful for the companionship, the exercise, and for the second place win in the contest. Thanks again.
