nose sniffing autumn (senryu)
Who's walking whom?98 total reviews
Comment from jlsavell
Sis Cat, I was never notified of this post!!! I love it and I adore how you turned the tide or the leash around!!! You know I think they do control us... A dog named Mina.. wowo.. I am a big fan a Braum Stoker. take care sweet friend.. please start posting more.. jimi
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Sis Cat, I was never notified of this post!!! I love it and I adore how you turned the tide or the leash around!!! You know I think they do control us... A dog named Mina.. wowo.. I am a big fan a Braum Stoker. take care sweet friend.. please start posting more.. jimi
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Yes, Jimi, I need to start posting more. This is my, gulp, sixth poem posted on FanStory this year. Given that it was a contest entry, fans such as you were not notified. I am thrilled my poem about controlling dogs placed second. Thanks for your review.
Comment from rjuselius
Haha. This is an entertaining piece of poetry dear sis cat! I like the idea of a person following a dog as some actually don't seem to have a master over the family member.
Thank you for sharing!
Congrats!
Blessings!.
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Haha. This is an entertaining piece of poetry dear sis cat! I like the idea of a person following a dog as some actually don't seem to have a master over the family member.
Thank you for sharing!
Congrats!
Blessings!.
Rebekka x
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Thank you, Rebekka, for your review. I am glad my poem entertained you. I just learned that it placed second in the contest, so I am thrilled. Thanks again.
Comment from Gladys2013
Very nice. I love how your wrote what alot of dog owners feel like sometimes. I always tell my friends who own dogs that they need to understand its the other way around...you are the dog's puppy and its taking care of you lol great poem and good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Very nice. I love how your wrote what alot of dog owners feel like sometimes. I always tell my friends who own dogs that they need to understand its the other way around...you are the dog's puppy and its taking care of you lol great poem and good luck!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Oh, thank you, Gladys, for your review. yes, we need to understand that we "are the dog's puppy and its taking care of" us. I just received word that my poem placed second in the contest! Thanks again.
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Wow congratulations!
Comment from MissMerri
There is no way I can see to improve this delightful Senryu that you and Mina wrote. It is vividly expressive, the imagery is great and the wording is perfect. The final line is brilliant. I loved everything about it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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There is no way I can see to improve this delightful Senryu that you and Mina wrote. It is vividly expressive, the imagery is great and the wording is perfect. The final line is brilliant. I loved everything about it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Oh, thank you, MissMerri, for your review of "this delightful Senryu" and for wishing Mina and me success in the contest with our poem!
Comment from RodG
You might be describing me and my 16-year-old dog when we walk )or should I say "toddle") around the block. Good image of the dog whose nose is always active any season, but especially in autumn.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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You might be describing me and my 16-year-old dog when we walk )or should I say "toddle") around the block. Good image of the dog whose nose is always active any season, but especially in autumn.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Oh, yes, RodG, a dog's "nose is always active any season, but especially in autumn." Thank you for your review for a fellow toddler.
Comment from Ogden
Although I don't know about "nose sniffing," I like the other fourteen syllables a lot! That's a pretty good score. ;) Good luck in the voting!
Don
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Although I don't know about "nose sniffing," I like the other fourteen syllables a lot! That's a pretty good score. ;) Good luck in the voting!
Don
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Thank you, Don, for your review and for sniffing out luck for my poem in the voting!
Comment from robyn corum
I totally get this. My daughter had a boxer for several years - she was HUGE. We'd go for 'walks', but if she got it in her mind to go another way -- or to chase a bird, for example, it was over. She was dragging me through the grass. I knew immediately who was actually in charge! hahahahahaha
Good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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I totally get this. My daughter had a boxer for several years - she was HUGE. We'd go for 'walks', but if she got it in her mind to go another way -- or to chase a bird, for example, it was over. She was dragging me through the grass. I knew immediately who was actually in charge! hahahahahaha
Good luck!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Yes, Robyn, I laughed when I read your review about the HUGE boxer who dragged your daughter everywhere. Thanks for the laugh.
Comment from frogbook
I so know what you mean and that is one of the reasons I like the poem. Once my ex and myself were walking his new little puppy and we got to laughing so hard because we said that people were saying, "Look at that little puppy walking those 2 chubby people." LOL great job.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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I so know what you mean and that is one of the reasons I like the poem. Once my ex and myself were walking his new little puppy and we got to laughing so hard because we said that people were saying, "Look at that little puppy walking those 2 chubby people." LOL great job.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Oh, frogbook, I had a big laugh when reading about your "that little puppy walking those 2 chubby people." I am thrilled and tickled that my poem has touched many people. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Gloria ....
Oh my land, this is terrific. You got a good laugh from me with the role reversal. Having never had a dog I have seen a few walks that seemed to have this exact flavour to them.
I should say you have magnificently risen to the challenge of writing a satirical senryu.
This is a fine job and I wish you all the best in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Oh my land, this is terrific. You got a good laugh from me with the role reversal. Having never had a dog I have seen a few walks that seemed to have this exact flavour to them.
I should say you have magnificently risen to the challenge of writing a satirical senryu.
This is a fine job and I wish you all the best in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
Oh, thank you, Gloria, for your review of my poem and your praise that I "have magnificently risen to the challenge of writing a satirical senryu." Your review means a lot to me because another reviewer argued that my poem was not a satire. I am glad you understood the "exact flavor" of my satirical senryu. Thank you for your review and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Okay, this got my funny bone! LOL I have a couple of dags and I admit that the beagle walks me when we go out. I can actually feel this one and relate to it. Great poem. Bruce.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Okay, this got my funny bone! LOL I have a couple of dags and I admit that the beagle walks me when we go out. I can actually feel this one and relate to it. Great poem. Bruce.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Yes, Bruce, reading your review got my funny bone, too. I am thrilled that people, especially dog owners, understood my poem. Yes, even a beagle can walk you when you go out. Thank you for your review and for your smile and laugh.
