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Poo Hoo

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Comment from johngie
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Mystery Author,

Very cute little poem.

Syllable count is right.

The picture is adorable and goes with the poem.

Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
    Hi johngie. Thank for taking the time to read and review my contest wntry for humour I hope it gave you a giggle and yes I loved the image. Cheers for your best of luck message
Comment from William Ross
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Winnie the dead shit, haha, got a little chuckle on this. Does fit the prompt well. poor Winnie, good luck on this and best of luck on this have a wonderful day.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
    Hi William . I am glad you had a xhuckle excuse my warped sense of humour but I am pleased for your review . you also have a wonderful day Cheers
Comment from The Death
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This certainly made me laugh! I've always been a big Winnie fan, so I found this very interesting. Nice word play on Poo! It qualifies as good PJ LOL. There are issues related to punctuation.

"Hey! What did they call
Winnie the Poo when he died?"
"Winnie the dead shit."

Since you want to present in a dialogue form(that too without any characters), I'd suggest italicizing the third line to differentiate between the speakers. I enjoyed reading it.

Good luck!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
    Hi The Death, Thanks for your suggestion, I have bolded the last line to make it stand out. Much appreciatin for your review and feedback Cheers
Comment from djsaxon
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Awful LOL, but very funny. A 5-7-5 riddle? Love it. There is one typo in here (last line). "Winn(i)e the dead shit!" Good luck in the contest. cheers - DJ

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
    Hi DJ . Thanks so much for your time to read my poem, couldn't resist this one LOL hope it give people a laugh LOL Cheers for you good luck wish
Comment from Jackarrie
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Very good, winnie the dead shit. This is what I call a funny haiku even the image is a funny one, I wish you the best of luck in the contest, Mary

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
    Hi Mary Thanks for sharing you thoughts with me it is a bit funny hey LOL Cheers for you good luck message
Comment from joannakruk
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Hehe well a belly laugh this did inspire. I can actually visualize a poo in a casket... Clearly I have some issues that need to be addressed lol. Well done on adding humor into the forum.

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 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
    Hi Joanna. That was the plan a belly laugh and forgive my wierd sense of humour all in good fun LOL Cheers for your review
Comment from rjuselius
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hmmm.. this is rather funny yet my mind doesn't really want to register winnie the pooh as dead shit. this might be a problem. however it is never predictable what the larger audience wants.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x

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 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
    Hi rebekka, Now don't laugh, just a giggle will do LOL . Thanks for your review and good luck message Cheers