Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Judy, I have only followed this story very loosely, but I think I will have to pay it more attention. It was a well written chapter. So there's forbidden attraction there. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016

Definitely, Margarite was only fifteen and in Mexico when she became a nun. She is truly a good soul. However she never dated before I think this leaves her vulnerable to the attractive man she is having to work with. Plus they have to look at those awful tapes so its the first time she has to question the goodness of the church.

Comment from oliver818

Excellent

Ok so I admit I haven't read the earlier chapters and just jumped in here to take a look, But I enjoyed that. Interesting characters, good plot, I think I'll be looking out for more. Thanks for
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 Comment Written 07-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2016

thank you so much. I hope you will read. It is a fast read if you get the chance . I so appreciate your comments.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Be careful what you ask for With understanding comes responsibility. "To whom much is given, much is required." Patience comes from suffering. "Remember the patience of Job."

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2016

job did have a lot of patience. Thank you

Comment from EBC62

Excellent

You are a master of dialog Jusylee72. I loved the easy flow of conversation between your characters.
After the first read I was unclear on 1 point...I understood of course on second pass, where you spoke of "leaving them at 15..." Initially I thought you meant the church, so the rest seemed a little confusing...maybe just a tweak in that passage to firm up the fact you meant leaving your family not the church.....
Good read!
~EBC~

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016

Yes that is a very good Idea. Maybe I could put. I joined the nunnery at the age of 15. Would that be clearer? I so appreciate your opinion.

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

An interesting story about a nun and a man she is, apparently, helping to find out about a priest who was molesting children. She finds herself attracted to him, and now wonders if she should be. Good look inside a woman's heart.

Rhonda

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016

Yes, It is so hard to pick up on a chapter in the middle of a book . i forgot to put a summary in the notes. Thank you for reading.

reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 05-Sep-2016

That is true!

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, judy. Another well-written chapter. Great setting and imagery, like this:

"This time Margarite reached across the table for his hand. She didn't want to let go. They held hands for twenty minutes before reality intervened."

Superb dialogue, too.


Suggestions: " Both of my parents are devote Catholics." If you mean devoted...add a "d" If you mean devout that is spelled differently, Judy.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Yes thank you Devout is the word I was searching for. Wow. I knew it was wrong. How are you? School started this week and my choirs have a competition on October first. I have been getting home every night around 7 p.m. I love my job just very demanding right now. I will go change to devout right now.

Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Judy, you've done a good job showing the conflict that these two
characters are going through in their lives. One small typo...
there [were] seven of us all together. This book is coming along
very well.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

thank you so much Jude, Yes they are developing with all the help of my friends like you.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

Your words are well written and you managed to bring the inner conflict of Margarite to life very realistically. I think you did another very good gob on this part of the story.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you, She is a complicated character. She truly believes in serving others, but what about her needs? And why do people become priests and nuns. Why do they want to restrict their lives?

Comment from johngie

Excellent

Hi Judy,

The story just keeps getting better and better. As a catholic, I am enjoying the story very much. Keep up the good work. I'm going to look for more now. :}

You are doing a great job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you Johngie, I am so afraid that I I am offending Catholics. I don't know if you read the prelude to this story. If you can would you please read, " I don't hate the Catholic Church" However, my Mother was excommunicated for Marrying my Father.

If my mom had chosen the Catholic church over my father, I would not exist. It scares me that religion can tell people what and how to live, with no concept of the pain they leave behind.

Please read the Prolouge of my story . Then you will understand.

As a last statement, thank you for supporting me in my writings. It means the world to me.

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Tightly written with good characterizations.

Seems they were both searching for their lost selves and not sure where they belonged.

Ending tends to lead to additional storyline could follow.

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 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Yes, it is the fourteenth chapter in a book called Buttons. I need to put a synopsis with these chapters. Thank you so much for your comments.