Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Judy, very good and strong chapter this. I haven't read much of this story which is a shame. I would like to follow it, and I will catch up. Great dialogue. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016

thank you, In this part of the story Mary is standing up for herself more and more everyday. It has been fun watching her character grow.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

like it. There is lots of dialog. Some writers don't recognize the importance of dialog. They would never go to a silent movie, but they write silent stories.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016

I am learning. Trust me I got enough criticism about telling the story instead of showing the story until I finally listened. So appreciate your review.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

This is another well written very realistic chapter .Very Well done. You put just enough detail in the story and characters to let the readers imagination kick in and bring them to life in their minds.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you Winnona, I am excited about these characters. Mary is finally standing up for herself, just like I had to learn one day many years ago when I let the world beat me up. I will be looking up your writing very soon.

Comment from johngie

Excellent

Intriguing characters you are developing. Your protagonist is gaining a strong sense of self. I will look to read more of "Buttons". You have a good chapter here.

Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

thank you so much. I am learning so much every day from the people on this site.

Comment from A.A.A.EXHILARATING RIDE

Excellent

Oh! I love the woman coming into the new age ending, and empowering or enforcing some new growth and consideration. And, the story worked well for me as a stand alone.

Just tow typos I think:
Delaney, I - remember - you from the meeting. Why are you out here? Do you suspect some one here killed Mac Murphy?"

I have the number from - out - meeting."

Thank you for sharing, Maureen*&*

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you so much for the great comments. As always I truly appreciate the corrections. I will go fix them now.

reply by A.A.A.EXHILARATING RIDE on 04-Sep-2016

Blessings, yes, lovely to be able to correct those escapees! Happy writing, Maureen*&*

Comment from KyColonel Randal

Excellent

Thank you for sharing. It would be pretty interesting if described Delaney's body language throughout Mary's one-sided conversation. Perhaps even include a little more concrete description throughout this selection. Here are a couple of proofreading observations for you:

"out meeting." > our meeting.

"Call me, I will try" > me; I will try

I'll be looking for the next installment. Keep writing!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

thank you . What a great suggestion about the body language. thank you for the corrections too.
You are so encouraging. I truly love that.

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

Wow, Mary really stood up for herself, didn't she? It's not always easy to say what's on your mind, especially if you are used to being held back. Mary seemed to have found her voice and wanted to show her independence.

Great job,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Yes, I love this scene. It is hard to find our voice when we have been taught to be subservient. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. .

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

I have enjoyed reading your piece, is it part of a novel?
I like the dialogues and also Mary. You've made her very attractive.
Well done!

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016

Yes it is called buttons this is the thirteenth chapter. Thank you for reading this. She is developing into someone who is not afraid to speak up for herself.

You make me want to keep writing thank you so much .