Comment from TheWriteTeach

Excellent

This is an excellent piece. I can't believe I missed it when it was out for review. I totally agree with you about cell phone use. It was a better world before they came about. I will never understand how a six year old child must have their own cell phone. What has this world come to? Good luck in the contest. You have my vote!
Suzanne

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016

Thanks so much for the read and the comment. Cell phones are hell.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

This is a well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of this contest well. I enjoyed your story and I think you wrote a very realistic Christmas song!

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016

Thanks, Winnona.

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Very cleverly done.This parody on "White Christmas"is also quite true wishful thinking. I long for low technology good old days. I really enjoyed reading the poem and sang right along with it. Thanks for the chuckle!

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016

You are welcome. Thanks for the read and the comment.

Comment from jlsavell

Excellent

Harry T,
I love this! And it is so very true. Cell phones have taken over our etiquette and our socializing and nurturing relationships. It isn't just cell phones, it is the whole tech world, where children as young as 1 are give a tab to keep them quiet and entertained instead of allowing them to socialize and to learn through trained behavior to act properly.We take very little time to do so anymore. well done... jlsavell

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016

Thank you for the read and your comment. Cell phones drive me crazy, especially in restaurants.

Comment from oliver818

Excellent

Great song, I totally agree, phones make meals in general so impersonal and this its much worse at Christmas! So I wish you good luck in fulfilling your wish. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016

Thanks for the read and the comment.

Comment from Caperton Tissot

Good

A really fun poem set to White Christmas. I think many of us can strongly relate to your desire to get rid of the cell phones and you have expressed it in a very humorous way. I would give more stars except I find the rhythm does not read smoothly in places, something I think you can easily fix. Otherwise, hats off to you.

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016

Thanks for the read, I will check the rhythm and see if I can improve it.