Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Debbie,
I enjoyed your tanka suite. You did a great job with all of the tankas. Each is a stand alone, but as 1 poem, they make an amazing read. Your theme is great & well expressed with nice spring things. Good job on the format.

Thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest Jan

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, Debbie,

Nice tanka suite. It's a new form for me. I wrote a couple. You did a good job with the tanka format. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016

Thank you, my friend. Tanka are my favorite form, but I am getting more comfortable with haiku~Debbie

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

very good, nicely done on the tanka suite. all the flowers out on this sunny day, birds singing butterflies float. great job on this, Good luck on this and enjoy your day,

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Very well-written tanka suite as usual. Covering 5 aspects of Spring that is synonym with Spring and what we nornally enjoy about Spring.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016

Thank you, my friend. Glad you enjoyed it~Debbie

Comment from KyColonel Randal

Excellent

Thank you for sharing. I did not know the tanka form did not require the 5-7-5-7-7 syllable pattern. Your poem is very vivid in its imagery. I do like the traditional nature theme you have used here. I believe your poem does meet the liberal criteria of this tanka contest. Good luck with your entry!

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 Comment Written 31-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016

Thank you. 5-7-5-7-7 is an archaic rule although Fanstory seemed reluctant to give it up for many years. Tanka written in Japanese are much shorter due to the nature of their language~Debbie

Comment from fluffnstuff

Excellent

very nice poem...sort of makes one sway like in a warm breeze...smooth and very colorful in your words. great write fluff

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 Comment Written 31-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016

ZThank you, my friend~Debbie