Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

Hi Cynthia, A wistful Tanka reflecting your memories of past and the impact these had on you. A nice poem and image. Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016

Thank you so much for your kind words and good wishes.
Cynthia1

Comment from joannakruk

Excellent

Lovely, an expression of those moments in life we once cherished yet have fallen victim to the progression of time and tendency to forget. Sometimes it is a smell, a sound, a quick site that reacquaints us with a memory we thought to be lost. Well done on this nostalgic post.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016

Thank you so much, Joanna, for the kind and generous remarks.
Cynthia1

Comment from Gladys2013

Excellent

I really like this! I like how you put that these images and old antiques "circle back" . That is very much what a memory is...an impression on our souls that circle back to the forefront of out conscience. Well written. Good luck!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you so much, Gladys.

Comment from oliver818

Excellent

Nice poem, with a good flow and gentle easy to follow rhythm. I particularly enjoyed the last lines, very beautiful. Well done, thanks for sharing and have a great day!

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016

Thank you, Oliver, for your positive comments.
Cynthia1

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Beautiful image and good presentation.
-Format is good.
-Very effective imagery, such as
"windswept vestiges"
-A very nice look at the past and a certain nostalgia for it:
"leaving imprints on my soul"
-A strong entry for the contest; good luck.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016

Thank you so much for your very positive review. I also appreciate your good wishes.
Cynthia1

reply by Pam (respa) on 03-Sep-2016

You are quite welcome for both!

reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016

:))

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is a very good entry for the tanka contest
with exact syllables at 5-7-5-7-7
excellent images of the relics of the past
and their continuing influence of the present
Excellent photograph of the old bridge to match the poem
Well done
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016

Thank you for your positive comments and good wishes. I appreciate your thoughts.
Cynthia2

Comment from Caperton Tissot

Exceptional

A wonderful choice of words to express how relics can take us back in time. The rhythm is lovely, the words evocative. I like "yesterday's footprints falling, leaving imprints on my soul." You make the reader feel the emotion without describing the scene in detail. That is skill.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016

Thank you again for these lovely words and for your encouragement. Bless you!
Cynthia1

Comment from John Parkin

Excellent

Excellent Tanka and the tranquil picture of relics both past present and the future with the waterfall and old bridge bring your poem to life. A poem that makes one think of the nice times in ones life. I know as I walk or hike on one of natures path, I often stop and escape to thoughts of days gone by. I admire one that can write in syllables on different lines and have them make sense.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016

Thank you, John. That was such a lovely review and I so appreciate your thoughtful words.
Cynthia1

Comment from ahtnamas

Average

I would like to have more concrete images to be able to identify with the speaker. The poem is more tell than show. I do like the use of "imprints" and "footprints"...the sounds here are good. Keep writing'

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 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016

Thanks for stopping by to read;
Cynthia1

Comment from Nika2016

Excellent

Haunting...and yet the old house holds memories for someone...good or bad...
someone did not care enough to hold it close..in memory...
This life I hold in holy appreciation...mine has been beautiful...

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016

Nika,
Thank you for the comments. Yes, life is a precious treasure. I can tell from your poetry that you appreciate its beauty. Thank you for reading the poem.
Cynthia1