BeeBo
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Cojones"BeeBo The Clown terrorizes Portland, Oregon
29 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
Some of the greatest criminal minds have been created by irrelative acts in youth. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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Some of the greatest criminal minds have been created by irrelative acts in youth. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Stay tuned. Much more to come.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Quite an adventure for your protagonist/antagonist. He's got quite a few tricks up his proverbial sleeves. Let's see if he's going to be able to pull them off. He sure knows how to hold a grudge, doesn't he?
Good job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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Quite an adventure for your protagonist/antagonist. He's got quite a few tricks up his proverbial sleeves. Let's see if he's going to be able to pull them off. He sure knows how to hold a grudge, doesn't he?
Good job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 05-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come so stay tuned.
Comment from Marvin Calloway
Easy to read. Interesting premise. Good plot. Well defined characters. Old fashioned page turner. Flows nicely.
All the standard clichés, but apropos for this effort.
No sense inventing new ones when these fit well with this supreme work.
Marv
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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Easy to read. Interesting premise. Good plot. Well defined characters. Old fashioned page turner. Flows nicely.
All the standard clichés, but apropos for this effort.
No sense inventing new ones when these fit well with this supreme work.
Marv
Comment Written 05-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Stay tuned much more to come. Appreciate the 6 Stars.
Comment from Jacmac1
Good job Brett...smooth writing that delivered the necessary information to inform and interest the reader. Didn't see anything negative as you moved the story from who the character is and why he does what he does.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Good job Brett...smooth writing that delivered the necessary information to inform and interest the reader. Didn't see anything negative as you moved the story from who the character is and why he does what he does.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Stay tuned. Much more to come.
Comment from Craigitar
Well written and engaging. Well developed character in Mark Bannister. One note, and this could just be me: separate the scenes of the two characters with something like this; ********************. I was confused when there was no obvious transition from one character to the next. Otherwise, this was some good writin'
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Well written and engaging. Well developed character in Mark Bannister. One note, and this could just be me: separate the scenes of the two characters with something like this; ********************. I was confused when there was no obvious transition from one character to the next. Otherwise, this was some good writin'
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Stay tuned. Much more to come.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Revenge, simmering away year after year for this guy and sounds like he's coming back with a vengeance. Mr Creepy could apply to him to. I'll be looking for the next chapter in this drama. Enjoyed Brett,
cheers
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Revenge, simmering away year after year for this guy and sounds like he's coming back with a vengeance. Mr Creepy could apply to him to. I'll be looking for the next chapter in this drama. Enjoyed Brett,
cheers
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Stay tuned. Much more to come.
Comment from rockinm76233
Well, I love mysteries and crime and detectives and inspectors. So I shall await your next chapter in the on going saga of two friends now turned enemies. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Well, I love mysteries and crime and detectives and inspectors. So I shall await your next chapter in the on going saga of two friends now turned enemies. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Stay tuned much more to come.
Comment from gene roush
I like the old-school feel to this. It reminds me of the Hardy Boy books that I read as a child.
I felt like the opening was a little slow, and you nearly lost me there. I'm glad I stayed with it.
It has a nice closing hook that will bring readers back.
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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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I like the old-school feel to this. It reminds me of the Hardy Boy books that I read as a child.
I felt like the opening was a little slow, and you nearly lost me there. I'm glad I stayed with it.
It has a nice closing hook that will bring readers back.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from Nika2016
Creepy is right ...story and pic ...I freakin hate that clown!
The story draws the reader in...as revenge is planned...
Will the detective figure
it out in time? Stay tuned?
nice.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Creepy is right ...story and pic ...I freakin hate that clown!
The story draws the reader in...as revenge is planned...
Will the detective figure
it out in time? Stay tuned?
nice.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Stay tuned. Much more come.
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Brett, you got my attention right from the title! I knew that this would great, but it turns out to exceptional. I remember reading your Brock Daniels travails with this guy. So here we go again.
Great storyline with a lot of internal dialogue! Bannister's obsession with Holt and what happened when they were friends in high school. This guy is really cruel and sick, willing to kill innocent people to make Wyatt's life miserable until Bannister either kills his nemesis or he gets killed himself!
Sorry about my rambling review, but I was very excited to see your name pop up in my message box. When I lived in Lincoln City Oregon, I had been to Portland many times and loved it there!
An exceptionally written story, Brett!
My best
Jim lorson
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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Brett, you got my attention right from the title! I knew that this would great, but it turns out to exceptional. I remember reading your Brock Daniels travails with this guy. So here we go again.
Great storyline with a lot of internal dialogue! Bannister's obsession with Holt and what happened when they were friends in high school. This guy is really cruel and sick, willing to kill innocent people to make Wyatt's life miserable until Bannister either kills his nemesis or he gets killed himself!
Sorry about my rambling review, but I was very excited to see your name pop up in my message box. When I lived in Lincoln City Oregon, I had been to Portland many times and loved it there!
An exceptionally written story, Brett!
My best
Jim lorson
Comment Written 03-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
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This is BeeBo's beginning in Portland.
Several FanStorians asked me to tell that part of the story.
So I am.
Appreciate the 6 Stars.
I set the story in Portland because I have always liked that little town.
