Hora haiku (Horror haiku)
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "horror haiku ( cavernous castle )"A co-authored book of dark haiku poetry
52 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
I continue to be impressed with how much you are able to convey with so few words. I especially like, torrid winter. How could she possibly resist him...I know I could not. Off to read another chapter.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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I continue to be impressed with how much you are able to convey with so few words. I especially like, torrid winter. How could she possibly resist him...I know I could not. Off to read another chapter.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Thank you, sweetie pie, :)
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Thank you for the notes as this one had me confused.
I knew he was aware she was there by knowing her, I cant wait to the first meeting as there is more than we know
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016
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Thank you for the notes as this one had me confused.
I knew he was aware she was there by knowing her, I cant wait to the first meeting as there is more than we know
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016
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Thank you for reading two in a row :)
gypsy
Comment from michaelcahill
I recalled some mixed opinion on the music used with this, so I thought I'd offer my two cents for two cents. LOL
My credentials are fifty years as a musician both composing and performing. I read and write music. As a writer, I make a pretty good musician. HA!
This piece is NOT a haiku. It's more than that. The artwork, music, words and presentation are all integral to the piece. The music IS well chosen and perfect for the mode your setting.
This is a book and a book like no other. You're covering new territory.
If this was just a stand alone haiku about a daisy then yeah, maybe it doesn't need the extras. HAHAHA! But it's considerably more than that.
Anyway, I like to talk. :)) Great project and great addition here to the project. mikey
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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I recalled some mixed opinion on the music used with this, so I thought I'd offer my two cents for two cents. LOL
My credentials are fifty years as a musician both composing and performing. I read and write music. As a writer, I make a pretty good musician. HA!
This piece is NOT a haiku. It's more than that. The artwork, music, words and presentation are all integral to the piece. The music IS well chosen and perfect for the mode your setting.
This is a book and a book like no other. You're covering new territory.
If this was just a stand alone haiku about a daisy then yeah, maybe it doesn't need the extras. HAHAHA! But it's considerably more than that.
Anyway, I like to talk. :)) Great project and great addition here to the project. mikey
Comment Written 02-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2016
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Hello, sweetie pie, it's good to have you back. I feel like we haven't seen each other in a million years. It makes me sad when you are not around. My Review and comment boxes are not the same without you.
Are you a musician? On top of everything else? Wow, you never cease to amaze me. :) How talented can one Michael Cahill be? LoL
You don't know how much your opinion means to me, especially now that I know you are a musician. Someone made some hurtful comments about this haiku but deep inside I knew my haiku is fine the way it is. One bad review out of ... a lot of reviews it's not bad. Right? Most people in Fanstory are grown-ups who love to write and encourage each other to be the best writers we can be. Thank God!
I love you, brother Mike.
Comment from davidray
Wow, so few words that conjure up such an image, such chemistry. Love it and, yes, it was hot. Smoking. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. :)
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Wow, so few words that conjure up such an image, such chemistry. Love it and, yes, it was hot. Smoking. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. :)
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thank you, David, I appreciate your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from dragonpoet
An old dark castle would be a scary place ot have a tryst. A tryst woud keep you warm in a cold breezy castle.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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An old dark castle would be a scary place ot have a tryst. A tryst woud keep you warm in a cold breezy castle.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thank you, Dragon, I appreciate your review and kind words.
Gypsy
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Any time. It is what we are here to do.
dragon
Comment from seaglass
This is the first I've read of you combined team writing. It will be interesting to watch it develop. Without your author notes I wouldn't have known the meaning or how the story moves so those will be important as so little content can be given in such short poem.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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This is the first I've read of you combined team writing. It will be interesting to watch it develop. Without your author notes I wouldn't have known the meaning or how the story moves so those will be important as so little content can be given in such short poem.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thank you, Seaglass, I appreciate your review and kind words. I will continue to provide author notes. :) Thank you for reading our story.
Gypsy
Comment from susan18
Love the words "torrid winter"! Makes you stop and think, and them imagine .
Nice choice of words.
Says a lot in a small piece of poetry.
Could n't stop thinking of what might be going on in that castle!
Good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Love the words "torrid winter"! Makes you stop and think, and them imagine .
Nice choice of words.
Says a lot in a small piece of poetry.
Could n't stop thinking of what might be going on in that castle!
Good luck!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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LoL, me too! What are those to up to?
Thank you very much for the review and kind words sweetie pie,
Gypsy
Comment from c_lucas
Horror has never been my forte, but good writing has. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Horror has never been my forte, but good writing has. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. making for a very good read.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent art to compliment your haiku Gypsy. I just got started reading your collaborations with Dean in his last haiku.
You both do a great deal with so few words. Each revealing another layer of the story.
Loved the "torrid winter" line.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Excellent art to compliment your haiku Gypsy. I just got started reading your collaborations with Dean in his last haiku.
You both do a great deal with so few words. Each revealing another layer of the story.
Loved the "torrid winter" line.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from TPAC
Loved the items selected for this presentation, words defining holding their own detailed views within a story complimenting the overall write. Excellent conveyances in my viewed opinion.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Loved the items selected for this presentation, words defining holding their own detailed views within a story complimenting the overall write. Excellent conveyances in my viewed opinion.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
