Comment from RodG

Excellent

I am impressed with your "take" on this lovely picture. You have definitely captured the essence of the experience of witnessing the sun slowly set.
Some really nice imagery: e.g.--"a hush occurs as all the birds/tuck heads beneath their wings." I also like the internal rhyme in your last line.
One word does not quite fit however: the sky is SCORCHED with splendid shades. You are setting the mood and "scorched" seems too hot for the beauty you are sketching. Otherwise, Sandra, nice job.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

Thank you so very much for your lovely review, Rod, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I will see what other word I can use, I didn't think of it that way, but you're right. Thank you! :) Sandra. xxx

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

Absolutely stunning and seductive crafting! You brought the
sensory effects of sunset to life in this imagery laden poem.

Very nicely done Sandra :-)

My one small quibble is with the then in S1L7. . .
it seems to create an incomplete thought:
A hush occurs as all the birds tuck heads beneath their wings
then soothed to sleep by gentle serenades the evening brings.
You might want to consider adding a semi-colon after wings and
changing then to are, i.e.
A hush occurs as all the birds tuck heads beneath their wings;
are soothed to sleep by gentle serenades the evening brings.

Just a thought to consider :-)

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

Well, I did consider it, for about 2 seconds, then dashed in and changed to what you suggested. Sooooo much better, thank you so very much, my friend!! I am always happy to listen to good constructive criticism, and that was! I'm also delighted that you liked my take on the picture. Thank you! :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

You have a special way of taking all pictures to a different level through your beautiful seeing eyes. Thanks for sharing another of your fine poems. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016

What a lovely thing to say, Ric, but then again, you always have said nice things about my work. You are so encouraging. Bless your heart. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Very nice poem to go with a sunset photo. I love this part:

A hush occurs as all the birds
tuck heads beneath their wings
then soothed to sleep by gentle serenades the evening brings.

I love to hear the birds singing in the morning, but at night, it's so quiet outside. Except for the hot days of summer with crickets. :)

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016

I used to love the sounds of the crickets and the night owls. It was restful time of the day. Where I live now, the only 'music' I hear are the cars going by. :( Thanks, Phyllis, for your lovely review. I'm so pleased you liked it. :) Sandra. xx

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Sandra, this is a wonderful poem with wonderful imagery throughout. Your piece reads smoothly and each line is descriptive. Good rhyming, too. Very nice. Marilyn

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Marilyn, for your lovely review. These challenges are good fun, aren't they. :) Sandra

reply by BeasPeas on 29-Aug-2016

Yes, I'm definitely having fun with the group. It's sort of like a curve ball being thrown and then we try to get a home run. (I know nothing about sports--ha,ha!) :)

Comment from Loren (7)

Excellent

First rate on your choice of background and font colors, Sandra. This is one of my favorite lines: "the sun slips further to bequeath a subtle golden sheen" What a lovely and perfect way to describe the dying sun and what it leaves behind for the rest of us. This sounds like this might be a contest entry, if so, best of luck - you've done a great job. Loren

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Loren, I'm really pleased you liked it. It is all part of a Picture This challenge, the picture I've used is what the whole group use. We have to give it our interpretation of what we see. It's fun, but not a contest. If you want to join the group, get in touch with Jax Franklin. Thanks again for your lovely review, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Nicely done, Sandra. I like the imagery projected here...not just for an instant, but throughout the whole write. By your word one could even feel and taste the colour of the moment.

Good job.
Best wishes,
RGstar

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

Thank you so very much, RG, for your lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xx

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

A very lovely poem about a beautiful sunset. You always have a special way to describe the beauty you see, Well done my friend.
And by the time this orb has set,
and gone till dawn is due,
they all will rest, and be refreshed
when day starts out anew.
Just a suggestion. xsx Nancy

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Nancy, for your lovely review! I will check your suggestion out, my friend. You always give good advice. Thank you! Big hugs. Sandra xxx

Comment from Abby Wilson-hand

Excellent

Oh my gosh this is one of the best poems i have ever had the pleasure to read i wish i had a six for you but i'm out but thats ok because i would have given you a ten this really touched me and the picture was an excellent choice god bless you for your gift toi write.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

Thank you so much for this amazing review, my friend. It is worth the ten stars, LOL, just reading your lovely comments. Thank you! xsx Sandra.

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

Sandra: I like the colors you paint with aztec gold and bronze. The birds tuck their heads in their wings. The dogs go for their final walk - me time. The sun slips and we can rest for the night. All is calm and God is on the night watch. Yes, beautiful painting, Sandra.

I'll be in the night lights with LifeLight this Labor Day weekend. Music fest of three days, noon to midnight, in a cornfield. Check their site. I'll be watching and helping the groups. Yes, we can watch the sunsets in the land. God bless! flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

I'm so pleased you enjoyed this take on the picture, my friend. I love these challenges. Have a lovely time at the LifeLight festival, how wonderful it sounds. Living in England, it's a bit far for me to come, but I really would have liked to, Enjoy it, and come back a write a piece on how it was. I would love to read it. :) Sandra xxx