Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

We don't know why and how could you, Lord? So when the day seems dark, go outside. Yes, dance in the rain takes away the pain. Why turns into rejoicing. Trust in Father as you dance. I really like this poem and good use of words. flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

Thank you so much. My best friend died last November . The seven days on life support were excruciating. This actually happened on the night she died. We were the type of friends who sang in the rain.

reply by flylikeaneagle on 29-Aug-2016

My friend lost her son on Good Friday years ago. He chose to close doors on people that wanted to help him. Instead, he drank and drank and drank. The devil spoke to him, kill yourself. He did.

My friend still grieves her son, Shawn. I told her to write about Shawn and books for others to overcome. Sometimes, we have to dance in the rain.

My heart goes out to you, too. God bless! nancy

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

This is a beautiful entry for this contest, using all the words, you've created a story of life. The last verse is the winner!!! Blessings....

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

Thank you so much. I watched my best friend be on life support for seven days. We were the kind of friends who danced in the rain.

reply by Irish Rain on 29-Aug-2016

You were so lucky to have each other!

Comment from William Ross

Exceptional

Excellent, very well done, great use of the words given on the prompt, great rhyming, meter is good reads really well. Think you did a wonderful job, Good luck on this and have a good day.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

Thank you so much. I lost my best friend last November. Watching someone on life support is awful. Try to avoid at all cost. We were the type of friends who ran and danced through the rain.

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

Sad and beautiful at the same time. Great use of imagery - lifeless tubes, heaven's tears. Love the artwork as well. Sensitive subject - death of a loved one. You handled it with well chosen words.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016

Thank you so much. Last November my best friend was on life support for seven long days. I miss her so much. We were the type of friends who would dance in the rain.

Comment from CALLAHANMR

Exceptional

How sad this poem begin with the loss of a loved one and then anger toward God for taking one so young is washed away by God's cleansing tears, a cooling rain and memory of his wife's last words:
"It sure is hot in Texas.
I don't mean to complain.
But surely God must know
I love singing in the rain."

Great format with good flow and a message from God.

Roger

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016

thank you so much. I actually lost my best friend last November . She was an amazing person. She was on life support for seven awful days and I was there when they took her off. It is a sad experience. We really did dance in the rain.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

Beautiful artwork and background color completes your poem very well. I think you have done very well completing the challenge for this contest. The words flow together sending the message of the poem to the reader.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016

thank you so much . I truly appreciate your review. I watched my best friend on life support for seven days. I never want that to be me. Lesson learned.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Great poem. Last year I had a heart attack. When I woke up I was surrounded by family and friends, I said, "Wow, I don't know what happened. But it must have been serious."

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 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016

Great story you just told me. You must have a wonderful sense of humor. I am so happy you lived through it. Are you okay now? Were you by yourself?

reply by Thomas Bowling on 28-Aug-2016

Actually I was diagnosed with Congestive Heart Failure. Every time my doctor sees me, he is surprised I'm still alive, but I keep plugging along.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Well, I didn't look for all the words, so I trust you on that. But this is an adorable poem and IMHO deserves a great chance at the prize. It's one of the best ever that I've read for this challenge! Good luck!

One tiny note, if I may?

1.) Her soul reached (out) to find me.

Good luck!

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 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016

thank you so much. It is based on real life. I watched my best friend die on life support last November. I miss her so much. We really were the type of friends who danced and sang in the rain. It helped me to write this. Thank you for the correction.

Comment from clsandau

Exceptional

Wow! you did a great job on this story in a poem - one of my favorite kinds as they make sense. Your words were very descriptive and actually gave me goosebumps at times. The poem read smoothly and rhyming was good almost all the way through. Wonderful story and change of pace towards the end. Also I totally enjoyed the God aspect to the end of the poem. Great Job! Carol

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016

thank you so much. This is a true story slightly exaggerated. I miss my best friend who died last November. Seeing someone die on life support is a truly scary experience. Thank you for supporting me.

reply by clsandau on 28-Aug-2016

Even if slightly exaggerated it was well written and a difficult time for you to go through. Blessings, Carol