BeeBo
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Face That Runs The Place"BeeBo The Clown terrorizes Portland, Oregon
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Comment from Heidi M
This is creepy, which makes for a great crime/murder mystery. I will NOT read this one at night! You have pulled us right in from the get-go by having us see inside the murder's thought process. We know he is about to practice his 'trade'. That is how to create suspense! You have chosen a clever title, too.
One small note: A stack of manila folders were scattered...'Were scattered' refers to 'a stack' so I think it should read 'A stack of manila folders was scattered' even though that sounds a little awkward.
Great job in leaving us wondering what the missing link is that Holt has discovered.
You are doing a wonderful job with this story and I look forward to reading more of it....with the lights on, of course!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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This is creepy, which makes for a great crime/murder mystery. I will NOT read this one at night! You have pulled us right in from the get-go by having us see inside the murder's thought process. We know he is about to practice his 'trade'. That is how to create suspense! You have chosen a clever title, too.
One small note: A stack of manila folders were scattered...'Were scattered' refers to 'a stack' so I think it should read 'A stack of manila folders was scattered' even though that sounds a little awkward.
Great job in leaving us wondering what the missing link is that Holt has discovered.
You are doing a wonderful job with this story and I look forward to reading more of it....with the lights on, of course!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this little story. Much more to come so stay tuned.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is going to be good!! I like a good murder mystery. I hate clowns, they scare the living daylights out of me, I hate the way they hide their faces. And they're ugly! So, has he found the missing link? I look forward to the next part. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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This is going to be good!! I like a good murder mystery. I hate clowns, they scare the living daylights out of me, I hate the way they hide their faces. And they're ugly! So, has he found the missing link? I look forward to the next part. :) Sandra
Comment Written 29-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come so stay tuned.
Comment from Joan E.
Yes, the creepy picture is a good match to your story. Your opening lines certainly grabbed our attention! I like the way you slowly revealed the cross-country circus connection. The detective being "stalked" by the "monster" was intriguing. I admired your use of detail to add to the realism and your leaving us in total suspense. To be continued... -Joan
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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Yes, the creepy picture is a good match to your story. Your opening lines certainly grabbed our attention! I like the way you slowly revealed the cross-country circus connection. The detective being "stalked" by the "monster" was intriguing. I admired your use of detail to add to the realism and your leaving us in total suspense. To be continued... -Joan
Comment Written 29-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come so stay tuned.
Comment from William Ross
This is great Brett, the start of what i'm sure will be an intriguing story as Holts investigation keeps on. written very well right from the first sentence. Nicely done, have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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This is great Brett, the start of what i'm sure will be an intriguing story as Holts investigation keeps on. written very well right from the first sentence. Nicely done, have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come so stay tuned.
Comment from DonandVicki
A very dark and gruesome short story. You have a way of pulling the reader into the story quickly and easily with your way of writing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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A very dark and gruesome short story. You have a way of pulling the reader into the story quickly and easily with your way of writing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this story. There will be more of it to come so stay tuned.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Cody's Corner,
You have written a very interesting poem that I enjoyed reading. So please be sure to post a lot more of them. I'm always ready to read a good story even if
they are kind of scary. LOL
Kat
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Hi Cody's Corner,
You have written a very interesting poem that I enjoyed reading. So please be sure to post a lot more of them. I'm always ready to read a good story even if
they are kind of scary. LOL
Kat
Comment Written 28-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. Much more to follow so stay tuned.
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I will be near to stay tuned. Thanks. Kat
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Okay, who told you I'm afraid of clowns. Nice one I'll be awake all night. The story is moving along nicely. Hope Cody's okay.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Okay, who told you I'm afraid of clowns. Nice one I'll be awake all night. The story is moving along nicely. Hope Cody's okay.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Cody is not part of this story.
This is the introduction to everyone's favorite clown, BeeBo and his rich history.
Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Again excellently written and no problems noted.
Again you left us hanging, waiting for the next part to take us over the edge again.
Very good and I am so glad to be part of this wonderful task
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Again excellently written and no problems noted.
Again you left us hanging, waiting for the next part to take us over the edge again.
Very good and I am so glad to be part of this wonderful task
Comment Written 28-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of BeeBo' The Clown's story. It might even get graphic!
Comment from misscookie
Forgive me after reading this chapter it made me sick I don't think I will be able to read any more..
I'ill wait until you write something I can handle. Okay.
Keep up the good work I know others are enjoying this story.
Cookie
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Forgive me after reading this chapter it made me sick I don't think I will be able to read any more..
I'ill wait until you write something I can handle. Okay.
Keep up the good work I know others are enjoying this story.
Cookie
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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I can handle that misscookie. This is the story of BeeBo The Clown from Astatula, The Cody Schroder stories. I will try to alert you when I post one of these.
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You just keep writing what comes in to my mind and heart. Who know maybe the next chapter I can handle it if not I will not response to it okay.
Cookie
Comment from jlsavell
Brett, now really? Is this fair to just leave us like this? Actually a very smart move, if I must say, but I wanted more. Although this is not an original subject on a storyline, it is a given that it will come with a twist which has not come before. I am sure of this.. well done.. jimi
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Brett, now really? Is this fair to just leave us like this? Actually a very smart move, if I must say, but I wanted more. Although this is not an original subject on a storyline, it is a given that it will come with a twist which has not come before. I am sure of this.. well done.. jimi
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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It is part of a rather original storyline actually. It is the story of BeeBo the Clown from Astatula, The Cody Schroder stories. Will warn you I do plan to go graphic with this tale! So enjoy!
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Oh yes,now I know. Sorry. I knew the villain sounded familiar.
