To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 " Mothered Life"Poems by Michael
23 total reviews
Comment from Ronni
Hi again, Michael,
The subdued and infused mystery and intrigue of this poem has fathomless
elements of tender love's sentiments and sensuality, somewhat dismayed,
yet so provocatively serious, with no pretense. Unequivocally indomitable
love and anticipation perhaps yet to be explored and sequel into a mutually
fortuned or predestined amorous completion. As always your videos and
presentation converge so many facets of your talent and evocative expression
and affectation. A most stunning read indeed. Always enlightening.
Keep on staying true to your heart and your love...often accomplishes
the impossible. Hope this one turns out to be so for you.
luv/always, Ronni
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2016
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Hi again, Michael,
The subdued and infused mystery and intrigue of this poem has fathomless
elements of tender love's sentiments and sensuality, somewhat dismayed,
yet so provocatively serious, with no pretense. Unequivocally indomitable
love and anticipation perhaps yet to be explored and sequel into a mutually
fortuned or predestined amorous completion. As always your videos and
presentation converge so many facets of your talent and evocative expression
and affectation. A most stunning read indeed. Always enlightening.
Keep on staying true to your heart and your love...often accomplishes
the impossible. Hope this one turns out to be so for you.
luv/always, Ronni
Comment Written 26-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2016
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aha...you spoil me and I'm in love....-smile-
thank you.....I will try. but I've never been more frightened in my life....-smile- will see. thank you...for making me happy. hope you had a wonderful trip. always love. Michael
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Frightened...always comes before
happiness or bliss...so this is a good
sign...go for it..and heartiest and best
wishes to you always! Happy for making you happy! Had a fabulous time, and memorable trip! Thanks for
your good wishes!
luv/always/ Ronni
Comment from DonandVicki
your poetry always expands my imagination, which is what all good poetry should do. I enjoyed your artwork and multimedia whic enhanced your work.
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your poetry always expands my imagination, which is what all good poetry should do. I enjoyed your artwork and multimedia whic enhanced your work.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
Comment from RoostyNester
We cannot give life, only God can. God is the mother of all mankind. He created and he takes back. I liked your poem, expressing the power of God and the weakness of mankind. Very well done in word and style.
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We cannot give life, only God can. God is the mother of all mankind. He created and he takes back. I liked your poem, expressing the power of God and the weakness of mankind. Very well done in word and style.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
Comment from Slythytove2
I found the picture graphic distracting but the poem itself rewarding and with just a touch of what I like to think of as memory, but perhaps is more. I particularly like the "holy" line. Of course everyone is going to like that so that's not really in depth criticism is it?The "would forgiveness be..." I was ready to say- enough- but "sin" caught me unawares. At least I was thinking.
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I found the picture graphic distracting but the poem itself rewarding and with just a touch of what I like to think of as memory, but perhaps is more. I particularly like the "holy" line. Of course everyone is going to like that so that's not really in depth criticism is it?The "would forgiveness be..." I was ready to say- enough- but "sin" caught me unawares. At least I was thinking.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Mothered Life, like many, if not all of your work, is an emotion that glows in the window with no shape.
If that sounds cryptic, I am trying to explain how I get a good sense of what you are saying without reading conforming sentences. I always feel like I was engaged in the work I read, and that the purpose was clear.
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This poem, Mothered Life, like many, if not all of your work, is an emotion that glows in the window with no shape.
If that sounds cryptic, I am trying to explain how I get a good sense of what you are saying without reading conforming sentences. I always feel like I was engaged in the work I read, and that the purpose was clear.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
"if I painted your portrait, would I see perfect" is a simple stunning line and one of my favorites in this well penned piece. You have such a gift for turning perplexing questions into lyrical art. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
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"if I painted your portrait, would I see perfect" is a simple stunning line and one of my favorites in this well penned piece. You have such a gift for turning perplexing questions into lyrical art. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
Comment from c_lucas
Sincerity and a pure heart are necessary for the seed of love to grow. Most fail at one or the other. This has very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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Sincerity and a pure heart are necessary for the seed of love to grow. Most fail at one or the other. This has very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
Comment from Wabigoon
reconciled--
Same problem with the three line format which, to me, seems...contrived? plus I think that your obscurity here is intentional -- to veil whatever are the real issues. All the heavy religiosity meant to do that. Like:
Christ's witness crucified
if I died trying
would forgiveness be sin...
Perhaps this means something to someone steeped in these things -- not much to me.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2016
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reconciled--
Same problem with the three line format which, to me, seems...contrived? plus I think that your obscurity here is intentional -- to veil whatever are the real issues. All the heavy religiosity meant to do that. Like:
Christ's witness crucified
if I died trying
would forgiveness be sin...
Perhaps this means something to someone steeped in these things -- not much to me.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 23-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2016
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Wabigoon...
same problem...apparently you aint paying attention... again...its called "established poetic form"...-wink-...put that in your pocket Jeff...your gonna need it. "contrived"....well, if you were a loyal fan...you'd know by now...I try to stay away from that stuff....I'm a natural high man myself...-smile-...Wabigoon...yer getting on my nerves. I have explained this poem as much as I intend to. it is self explanatory to most planetariuns ....and if you have any more questions, I'd appreciate it if you'd ask anyone of them. Good evening Jeff. love Michael
Comment from jlsavell
Reconciled,
I read this yesterday. I was quite surprised I could, but it was on front page and I clicked on it with eyes closed. I, with great intrepidation,do not know if I should even be reviewing
I am not going to even pretend I know what it means, but it is quite beautiful.
If it's about your Mother, I can understand wholeheartedly. Though I suported my Mother the last 10 years of her life, we were never truly Mother and Daughter. When she passed, I grieved, but not for the loss of that special bond, but for the loss of never was and what will never ever be, unless divine intervention, which I believe does exist, but unless divine intervention brings us together in another time and place and awakens her God given gift to nurture and connect and to love her daughter with her whole soul and whole heart. I know in my life, my daughters have always felt the unbreakable and unbridled connection with me and in this season of our lives, we are the best of friends.
On the other hand, it is possibly about the love of your life. She is not far from you. At least I think. I am sure if you went to Chau today and had a heart to heart talk, she would open up. Don't know her, but I do know women, though you may beg to differ.
I never know if I am ever on the right track with your work, though I have not read any on months for many reasons. Your work is not so much cryptic as it is ambiguous, obscure, illicit.
Not simplistic in any way. But then that is your nomenclature.
And just perhaps, as I have learned in the past it's just your rendition of the accompanying music and has not one thing to do with anything, but it ismy experience that most poets, or at least good poets which are few and far between, are inspired by life in all its province and thus a season word driver helps the reader
experience life in a different lane and different destination.
Now before I get an insidious remark for writing a book, I will close.
May God bless you in all your endeavors.
Do take care..
jlsavell
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2016
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Reconciled,
I read this yesterday. I was quite surprised I could, but it was on front page and I clicked on it with eyes closed. I, with great intrepidation,do not know if I should even be reviewing
I am not going to even pretend I know what it means, but it is quite beautiful.
If it's about your Mother, I can understand wholeheartedly. Though I suported my Mother the last 10 years of her life, we were never truly Mother and Daughter. When she passed, I grieved, but not for the loss of that special bond, but for the loss of never was and what will never ever be, unless divine intervention, which I believe does exist, but unless divine intervention brings us together in another time and place and awakens her God given gift to nurture and connect and to love her daughter with her whole soul and whole heart. I know in my life, my daughters have always felt the unbreakable and unbridled connection with me and in this season of our lives, we are the best of friends.
On the other hand, it is possibly about the love of your life. She is not far from you. At least I think. I am sure if you went to Chau today and had a heart to heart talk, she would open up. Don't know her, but I do know women, though you may beg to differ.
I never know if I am ever on the right track with your work, though I have not read any on months for many reasons. Your work is not so much cryptic as it is ambiguous, obscure, illicit.
Not simplistic in any way. But then that is your nomenclature.
And just perhaps, as I have learned in the past it's just your rendition of the accompanying music and has not one thing to do with anything, but it ismy experience that most poets, or at least good poets which are few and far between, are inspired by life in all its province and thus a season word driver helps the reader
experience life in a different lane and different destination.
Now before I get an insidious remark for writing a book, I will close.
May God bless you in all your endeavors.
Do take care..
jlsavell
Comment Written 23-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2016
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-smile-...an olive branch with insult...? how sweet.
-headshake-....I'm not going to even pretend to understand where you see my Mother in this. but I'll chalk it up to sting.
Lienko...is very intelligent woman. Read her review...she got it. yes its written for Chau...but it also identifies with the "need" of the Poet to create what before did not breathe. I know where she is...and will... soon. honestly I'm afraid to see what I may not in her eyes. soon I will look anyway....I have too. make sure my hands, body and mind have exhausted all effort to resurrect the life God ordained. If I did not I would wonder forever...what if I had. and I will stand before God having honored my sworn pledge, even if it be it dishonors me.
I have no indication my desire will taste its fruition. in fact, all indication votes against me. But I'm me Jimi...aint nobody like me. I want to apologize for not being a whole love I guess. you did some very bad things because I couldn't.I didn't know then...I was going through it...I couldn't know. I tried to pretend...like it didn't matter...but it does. Anyway....I hear youre doing well....I am happy to hear that. genuinely. love Michael
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Reconciled, I have no qualms with you. You keep saying I did bad things. No, I did not. I tried desoerately to help you because of the way I felt. You never saw that nor wanted to see that in me. Ivwas never a bad person as you made me out to be. No olive branch. I was referring to someone insulting me because I gave you detailed reviews. Did you not get that. I am offering no olive branch, there isn't one in my heart to offer. You speak of me doinv bad things, what did I do which caused you to turn on me at your home. I cared for you. But that is neither here nor there for I realize your hate for me will never leave but I honestly had no udea why you did what you did. Look, it doesn't matter anymore. I am very well and a much better place in my life. Prospering without the hurt and betrayal. I have no animosity toward you, even after all said and done. I lost some very valuable keepsakes but it is what it is.
I told you this was about Chau. Only a fool qould not see that. I don't read your reviews. Do not care too. I just thought this was beautiful and heartbreaking that you still carry a torch for acwoman who really did betray you. But I ubdefstand. It's up to you Reconciled, to step out and go get her. You can sit on your ass and pinecaway, bring some other poor lady who you will toy with and hurt badly, or you can be honest with yourself and stop playing with other's lives, and do your best to get her back. You may not like what I say, but I am not being mean, I am being real. You llayed with my life and my feelings. Truth is truth. Do you know what damage that does Reconciled? Have you any idea the hurt and disapoointment you reaped on .
It does not matter anymore. You taught me a valuable lesson.
So no to olive branch. I have no reason too.
Yes, I am very happy and doing well as I have hoped you are. Get up and go get her and stop playing with others lives.
So I was not insulting you. The title was had Mother in it. I told you your work was
not simplistic.
I just wanted you to know it was beautiful.
I do hope you realize what you did one day.
I am still trying to figure out what I did our last months together that you deemed bad? Doesn't matter. Really. We are not in each others life anymore. I deserved more explanation than vitriolic hatred.
Please do have a good one reconciled.
P.S. There are few of us women who aren't intelligent.
You take care to..
jlsavell
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-headshake-...sigh...
still at it huh...?
okay Attila....you can get away with that behind my back with ya buddies...but never to my face. youre a grown women well over 21. I met you and went on one date. during which you behaved...different lets say. within a week you were on here publicly
trying to shame me. then you convinced me you were acting that way because you didn't feel worthy or some crap...Jimi....-headshake-...do you really want me to list the "bad" things you did...? I never took advantage of you...and lets face it if I had and you could prove it i'd be in prison. What you've done to me on here...and coheresed others to do....was, is very "bad" jimi..."bad"....and though my natural inclination is to accept an olives branch invitation...I'm afraid I will have to decline this time....and until you decided to be truthful with yourself first....and then the rest of us. until then farewell-
Comment from Leineco
if I created thus
with all the holy I've ever hoped to touch
could it be enough...
to plait loose threads
of earthbound words
ethereal;
... bind soul to ache of urgency
... that howls inside against restraint
... of welded cage
and would the holy still remain
to nurture more. . .
quench desperate thirst
or with the birth
of one perfect song
would mercy reign forevermore
starvation's pangs
sweetly assuaged.
While one could read this as a treatise on love, for me it was
all about an artist's drive for true creation. . .for birthing.
It was my great pleasure to wallow in this poem for quite some
time this morning.
I could chastise you for the music attachment (I happen to be
the proverbial "momma bear" when it comes to protecting the
purity of iconic work), but because you, at least indirectly,
credited Cohen as an inspirational factor for this work I will let it
slide. LOL
Seriously tho Michael - wonderful write - thoroughly captivating!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2016
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if I created thus
with all the holy I've ever hoped to touch
could it be enough...
to plait loose threads
of earthbound words
ethereal;
... bind soul to ache of urgency
... that howls inside against restraint
... of welded cage
and would the holy still remain
to nurture more. . .
quench desperate thirst
or with the birth
of one perfect song
would mercy reign forevermore
starvation's pangs
sweetly assuaged.
While one could read this as a treatise on love, for me it was
all about an artist's drive for true creation. . .for birthing.
It was my great pleasure to wallow in this poem for quite some
time this morning.
I could chastise you for the music attachment (I happen to be
the proverbial "momma bear" when it comes to protecting the
purity of iconic work), but because you, at least indirectly,
credited Cohen as an inspirational factor for this work I will let it
slide. LOL
Seriously tho Michael - wonderful write - thoroughly captivating!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2016
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wow...talk about beautiful...-smile-
Hello Lienko...-eyebating-
man thats good girl...the kind that teaches.
your right...its both...-smile-
oh Lienko...youre gonna have to the music...I'm in your life now...-eyebatting-...ahaha...you make me happy Lady...love ya Michael
