Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

This is beautiful, if we can only let go....we can go forward, we then 'receive' our wings!!!! Love your 5-7-5...good luck, and blessings...

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016

Thank you for the nice review, Irish

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Very well done 5-7-5 and so true.
We are totally changed from the form that we begin with and praise the Lord, that is the best.
Good luck and very well thought out

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016

Thank you for the nice review, Barb.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Pat

= This is a neat entry for the 5.7.5 contest.
= Your artwork you chose goes very well with it, too.
= The black formatting with green font is really pops. Nice job.
= Good luck in the contest.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings ... Jax
<> Published as ... Jacqueline M Franklin

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016

Thank you Jackie, for the nice review.

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is truly a beautiful and inspiring entry for this contest. Perfect syllable count and lovely illustration-I assume you are the artist. I sincerely wish you all the best in this contest too.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016

Thank you for the nice review, Sasha. I did some of the art to an image I got on Google.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Is that a ceramic chrysalis? Regardless, it's a lovely picture with the butterflies, and your "cocoon" metaphor is quite compelling. A great use of the 5-7-5 form as social commentary--best wishes in the contest! -Joan

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 Comment Written 18-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016

Thank you for the nice review, Joan.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Patricia,
This is a well written poem with an awesome message--contest or not.

Your artwork is super. Good job with the syllable count.

I enjoyed reading it.

Best wishes in the contest. Jan

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 Comment Written 18-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016

Thank you Jan, for the nice review.