From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 57 "What Makes you-you"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
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Comment from seaglass
This is a sad time. Our society have become admirers of success even when it was achieved with lies, cheating, and abuse to others. The way I was raised to be respectful and the way i raised my children is obsolete as could remarks, name calling, and insults draw crowds. I'm so embarrassed with leadership these days
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016
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This is a sad time. Our society have become admirers of success even when it was achieved with lies, cheating, and abuse to others. The way I was raised to be respectful and the way i raised my children is obsolete as could remarks, name calling, and insults draw crowds. I'm so embarrassed with leadership these days
Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016
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Thanks seaglass, for this very kind and insightful review. I too am DEEPY embarrassed and saddened by the lack of simple moral turpitude and decency presented by our political leaders and social leaders mostly anywhere outside of the church and including SOME churches to remain nameless and hopefully as far OFFSHORE as possible. All the best and thanks again! Vance
Comment from Shysea
I really like the message of your poem.I like the way you constructed it.
Everyday changes happen.As the child grows old ,he becomes independent and becomes responsible for his own action.As the days passed bye,our life becomes more challenging.Some task that are supposed to be done by human is being replaced by modern equipments and. gadgets.Politicians that is supposed to provide service to their constituents become self centered aiming to become famous , rich and powerful.The next generation will be the one who will suffer the consequences of those changes.Parents are the primary responsible of what and how a child will become .Love needs to be incalcated in their mind and heart.They should teach them skills to become responsible and productive adults.Modern technology should not be used most of the time to replace parents' love,care touched and attention.Children need quality time from parents.Last but the most important thing that we should never forget is " relationship with God.How parents raised us will answer the question:what makes you- you ?and makes me-me?
Sorry if im not just making a feedback to your work but im already sharing my opinion .I can't think of any negative comment .For me your poem is excellent!!I don't have a formal education when it comes to creative writing since I am a nurse by profession.I am not a good poet, i'm just a trying hard poet. Writing poem is just my hobby to relieve my homesickness .Hope to receive a feed back from you regarding my poems.I really want to learn a lot from other writers to improve my work.Have a great day!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016
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I really like the message of your poem.I like the way you constructed it.
Everyday changes happen.As the child grows old ,he becomes independent and becomes responsible for his own action.As the days passed bye,our life becomes more challenging.Some task that are supposed to be done by human is being replaced by modern equipments and. gadgets.Politicians that is supposed to provide service to their constituents become self centered aiming to become famous , rich and powerful.The next generation will be the one who will suffer the consequences of those changes.Parents are the primary responsible of what and how a child will become .Love needs to be incalcated in their mind and heart.They should teach them skills to become responsible and productive adults.Modern technology should not be used most of the time to replace parents' love,care touched and attention.Children need quality time from parents.Last but the most important thing that we should never forget is " relationship with God.How parents raised us will answer the question:what makes you- you ?and makes me-me?
Sorry if im not just making a feedback to your work but im already sharing my opinion .I can't think of any negative comment .For me your poem is excellent!!I don't have a formal education when it comes to creative writing since I am a nurse by profession.I am not a good poet, i'm just a trying hard poet. Writing poem is just my hobby to relieve my homesickness .Hope to receive a feed back from you regarding my poems.I really want to learn a lot from other writers to improve my work.Have a great day!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016
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Thank you Jennifer, so deeply AND Sincerely for your wonderful review and delightful message. It is a pleasure to meet you and I promise to come around and visit your works (starting today) and will offer any suggestions or help in any way to make you feel GRAND about your poetic works. That's why we are here on FS. Can't wait to know you better! Blessings: Vance
Comment from royowen
I think modern technology is robbing us of healthy interaction that was once the hallmark of society, it started with the radio, then th TV, and progressed to the modern iphones and iPads. I viewed two parents at our local park with their little boy, both were gazing at their phones while the little played. Seemingly not interested in this childlike miracle. Well done, Vance, an eloquent presentation, and a grave warning of declining social interaction, well done, bro, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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I think modern technology is robbing us of healthy interaction that was once the hallmark of society, it started with the radio, then th TV, and progressed to the modern iphones and iPads. I viewed two parents at our local park with their little boy, both were gazing at their phones while the little played. Seemingly not interested in this childlike miracle. Well done, Vance, an eloquent presentation, and a grave warning of declining social interaction, well done, bro, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thank you Roy, and always a delight to hear from you. Yes indeed, our social mores are certainly in disruption and the news media and politicians just continue their intentions to keep it that way for their own selfish benefits, which, in-fact are their own forms of self destruction as well. All the best dear friend! Vance
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You're very wise Vance
Comment from Nika2016
Six stars for truth!
We interact with strangers, not friends..strangers who could be someones whim..a socket puppet.. We glue ourselves to screens trying to be our true selves,yet creating fantasy..
We are spied on, commercialized...Who are we?
Great poem..
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Six stars for truth!
We interact with strangers, not friends..strangers who could be someones whim..a socket puppet.. We glue ourselves to screens trying to be our true selves,yet creating fantasy..
We are spied on, commercialized...Who are we?
Great poem..
Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Really brilliant and creative review! Many thanks...and much appreciated six stars!!!sincerely! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a super write, Vance. Excellent content and rhyming. Your poem focuses on personal communication as it used to be (a good thing). Nowadays it's become impersonal with the use of technology.
These lines are sad, but true. It seems none of them are honorable anymore:
"Our politicians who once loved our life and lands and precious freedoms
Now only search for fame and glory, and dark monies as their reasons"
Suggest fixing the typo here: "We notices (noticed?) values would not stand as we expected things"
Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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This is a super write, Vance. Excellent content and rhyming. Your poem focuses on personal communication as it used to be (a good thing). Nowadays it's become impersonal with the use of technology.
These lines are sad, but true. It seems none of them are honorable anymore:
"Our politicians who once loved our life and lands and precious freedoms
Now only search for fame and glory, and dark monies as their reasons"
Suggest fixing the typo here: "We notices (noticed?) values would not stand as we expected things"
Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much Marilyn, it's always an honor and pleasure to hear from you! Blessings, Vance
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. The world is so very different than it was when I grew up in the fifties. I think some of the old values, such as marriage, got lost along the way. It was a disgrace for a couple to live together outside of wedlock in those days. Now it is just as common as marriage and nobody cares. Good work
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Excellent. The world is so very different than it was when I grew up in the fifties. I think some of the old values, such as marriage, got lost along the way. It was a disgrace for a couple to live together outside of wedlock in those days. Now it is just as common as marriage and nobody cares. Good work
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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THANKS SO MUCH PRETTYBLUE BIRDS: YOU HAVE MADE MY DAY AND I HOPE YOUR'S IS VERY DELIGHTFUL! HIS GRAYNES
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Comment from rockinm76233
I couldn't agree with you more. How clever you are to use your words to describe today's times and events in such a unique way. Yes, the nightly new I hardly watch too much sadness to much starch. See there it's catching. Enjoyed the read.
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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I couldn't agree with you more. How clever you are to use your words to describe today's times and events in such a unique way. Yes, the nightly new I hardly watch too much sadness to much starch. See there it's catching. Enjoyed the read.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for your kind review, and glad to meet you! Hope you wont be a stranger! Blessings: Vance
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Your welcome.
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THANK SO MUCH and always a delight to hear from you ... all the best and keepumrockin
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