Comment from val fitchie

Excellent

the first half is Totally IMPRESSIVE with the rhyming of multisyllabics and is worthy of attention...then comes the 2nd half that is SOOOO F'N FANTASTIC (again, multisyllables) I MEAN it, friend. I'm not sure if a talented person is UNaware of the fact cause they're too close to the forest, but YOU are amongst the best there ever were and it's a Sacrelige POETRY is the most neglected of the ARTS, cause YOU should be a household word instead of these useless sports figures and souless singers

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017

Thanks val and sorry to clog up your email with repetition as the system keeps reloading your reviews. Vance

Comment from clsandau

Excellent

A delightful poem, that is sadly a sign of our times. Things have changed way too much, way too fast. We've lost touch with so many values in life that were once so important.
My favorite line:
The human touch was once the precious glue that held us all together
Has turned to plastic, wire, video, terrorism, ugly news and nasty weather
These things are all so true as are all the other thoughts in your poem. Thanks for sharing these words so many of us agree with. Blessings, Carol

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2016

Thank you Carol for your very kind and uplifting review! It's a pleasure to hear from you and I hope to see you often. Blessings! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance

reply by clsandau on 20-Aug-2016

You are welcome. Have a great Sunday!
Carol

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I liked your reminder to not take things for granted and your focus on love. I was intrigued by how your theme shifted to the reality of the impact of technology on our lives. Your rhymed couplets form was very effective. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2016

Thanks so much Joan, for such an uplifting review and I'm delighted to know this work was meaningful for you! Blessings always! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Love your FanStory name. My hair turned gray fifteen years ago. I carry it around in a box to remind me.

"The human touch was once the precious glue that held us all together"

Trump went to Louisiana today. Obama and crooked Hillary went to fund raisers.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016

Hi Thomas: great to meet you and thanks for the fine review. I look forward to reading your works and hope to see you often as well. My Grayness handle intended to suggest that I was an open minded guy that would ponder deeply the many critical areas of philosophy,,politics, religion, etc. but since OBummer, its all turned white! So now I just hammer him in every possible way. I hope our nation sees the damage and the threats of Crooked HIllary. Stay in touch and thanks again! Vance

reply by Thomas Bowling on 19-Aug-2016

I just hope we can survive until November.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Metrically free, this is a great feast of rhyme, masculine and feminine. Your philosophical position unwinds gradually here as the poem polysyllabically unfolds with clever use of words.

Once including the weather in the way you have done here would have been considered a gross forcing of rhyme. Not any more, unhappilly this line is as apposite as any other in this rant against modern technology.

Typo here,
"We notice(s) values would not stand

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016

Thank you Pantygynt, and so glad to meet you. I appreciated your kind review and stars and hope to see you often. I shall also make sure to come around and visit you works often! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance

reply by Pantygynt on 19-Aug-2016

Thank you. Look forward to seeing you.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Exceptional

I don't even know where to start, nor can I highlight any one specific section of this epic, inspirational write, Vance.
I loved all of it, every last single word primarily because what it says is so very true.
But, even more than that, it is the time, effort, rhyming, and the passion that you've obviously poured into this which makes it so.
Bravo, poet.
This one's a keeper!

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016

Hi Deano! and thanks so very much for these wonderful stars and great review! You are my favorite and most respected author on this site so your reviews really mean a lot! Have a great day......you've made mine already! Vance

reply by Dean Kuch on 19-Aug-2016

You're far too kind, Vance, and you earned all six of those stars fair and square, my friend.
You are entirely welcome.
~Dean :}

Comment from liz burgoyne

Excellent

I was moved by your poem. I believe in love. It pains me to see people ignore who they are actually with and focus their attention on phones. At the same time, technology gives me the opportunity to tell my grown children, everyday, that I love them. I appreciate that.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016

Thank you liz for your kind review and I'm delighted to meet you. I shall come around and visit your works and hope to see you often. Kindest regards and thanks! Vance

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. Yes, we and the world changed drastically over the past twenty plus years and not all is for the better.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016

Thanks so much Sandra, for your kind review and I hope to see you often and will visit your works as well! Vance

Comment from tbacha58

Exceptional

Along the way we've taken love as expectations
For our families passed it down through generations

How much i have missed your profound philosophy of the real old days of our lives. What a unique poem Vance, if i could give you all the stars I have, you would even deserve more. Such a strong poem, you are so so right, its terrible what is happening, our kids and grandchildren don't even know us anymore. Bravo Vance. I missed your beautiful poetry. Love Terry xoxo

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016

Oh, my dear friend, how wonderful it is to hear from you and thank you so much for your lovely review and gracious six stars! I have been rather inconsistent in my works on FS but hoping to be able to be more regular and see more of your works also. Stay well and stay in touch! Love, Hugs, and Blessings! Vance

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

As a 'BABY BOOMER' a 'Late Bloomer, I hated change and worked hard to find...
"The Alternaternative."
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"Unfortunatly, for those like me...
"We got left and lost in the past...
Ricky 1024.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016

Thanks Ricky, for your kind review and I'm sure there are sadly, so very many such as you who have been lost in the darkness of technology and social decline brought on by the rampage of techno-love replacing human love, but on the good side, it has given you a passion and skill for writing and emotional expression that surely has helped many others along the way! Keep up the good works and thanks for the fine review! Vance