Comment from sage17611

Excellent

I like the rhythm in your poem, the rhyming is smooth and very well written. The theme of the poem is nice and imaginative, almost as if the melodies can be heard. The words are very relaxing with a nice flow. Very well done. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016

What a lovely thing to say, thank you so much, Sage, for your lovely review! :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Aussie

Exceptional

Wow! What a wonderful poem...you sure have found your place amongst great poets my friend. I loved the photo, your poem rocked along slowly, just like waltzing to music. Well done sunshine.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016

Bless your lovely heart, my dear Australian friend! I'm sending you the biggest hug and a sloppy kiss for the 6 golden stars!! :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Sandra

= Nice, soothing take on the man and his music.
= I like the way your said to listen to hear the sound through whispers in the breeze.
= Makes one feel the down home country. Nice work, my friend.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016

I'm so pleased you liked this, Jackie, I was a bit late in writing it. I've downloaded the next picture and must start looking for one myself to send you. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Sandra,
I enjoyed your interpretation of the picture for the challenge.

You did a great job with the rhyme & flow. Your message is awesome. He seems to get great pleasure playing his music for all & knows his talent is God given. He wants to share it--and does. Yes, music is the international language.

Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Jan! I'm so pleased you liked my take. There have been some lovely ones written this time, I'm gradually getting to read them all. Thanks again, and a big hug, my friend! :) Sandra xxx

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

You're right, Sandra. There have been many different interpretations of this captivating photo.
I enjoyed your view of this man who plays his music to please God.
Lovely rhyme and even tempo.
:) e

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Ellen, I'm so pleased you liked mine. I am slowly getting to read them all, there have been some really lovely ones written for this picture. Big hug,. Sandra xx

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

With his guitar and violin both always close at hand,
this man will play sweet melodies, for all throughout the land.

I'd trim off that comma before FOR, though it is not 'wrong' if you prefer to keep it. (Just for flow).


Love this stanza in particular. Superb thematic depth and fine alliteration of F as well as F and also internal rhyme:

For there's an air about him when he picks up his guitar,
an aura of divinity, you'll feel it from afar.
Some say that he was born with music deep within his soul,
and he has sworn to share his gift; to please God is his goal.

Superb response to the picture. Just lovely! I felt the presence of this man's music through your words. The closing made my hairs stand up!

NOTES

Lovely voicing (note two spag suggestions):

So(,) if you listen carefully,(no ,) to whispers in the breeze,
you might just hear the sound of music rustling through the leaves.

I would use ON not IN for whispers on the breeze (like riding currents of air) but IN is also fine.

Your closing line is an OUTSTANDING AHA! Note one spag issue with the cap:

for when he strums his old guitar or strokes his violin,
T(t)he breeze comes by and plucks it high to carry it within.


Enjoyed this, dear.

Hugs, rd

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016

Goodness me, Rama! That was a wonderful review to wake up to. :) I have made the corrections, for which I thank you sincerely for pointing out, and changed the IN to ON. Yes, that is how it should be. Bless you, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

reply by rama devi on 17-Aug-2016

AW, thanks, dear. Love your enthusiastic response. Bless you too! Hugs, rd

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

This is very good, Sandra. i think this is my favorite so far for this challenge. I really like your closing lines - mystical, enchanting. Well done, my friend

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2016

~Thank you so much, my friend. That's such a nice thing to say, bless you! :) Sandra xx

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Where I'm from about everyone plays an instrument, and of course the old man in the picture looks very familiar. No, I don't know him, but plenty with the love of music who greatly resemble him. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2016

Thank you, Ric. I always wanted to learn to play the piano, but my parents couldn't afford to pay for lessons. Perhaps I'll add it to my bucket list! lol. What do you play? xx Sandra

reply by Ric Myworld on 17-Aug-2016

I don't play much of anything, anymore. Injuries, and years of not having or taking time to play has diminished my skills greatly. I use to play nine different instruments. Now, I might pick up a guitar every few years when someone remembers me and asks, or sit down at the old piano at home. I often miss playing, but I just can't do the things I use to. Therefore, it just ends up frustrating me, then I refuse to try again for a few more years. :-)

reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016

That is the trouble with not playing regularly, we can lose the skills. Nine instruments! How wonderful. I can understand your frustration, when you find it hard to do something you love doing so much. xxx

Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Sandra, a great job on your poem for the picture this challenge. I really like the part about it was his gift and to please God his goal

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Judy. I have always thought people have been blessed to be able to play beautiful music. I'm glad you liked it. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

Well, I've read a couple of these, and I have to say, you get my vote. I love this. And I'm sitting here on a windy day, listening to the wind blowing through my maple trees out back.

Sweet poem, Sandra. Made me smile!

Av

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2016

Thank you, my friend! We've had a lovely hot day, and this evening is still warm`, not even a breeze! Living right on the coast helps, I think. I live just outside Southampton. I'm really pleased you liked this poem. Thanks again, Av. xxx Sandra