Comment from ioana.u

Excellent

Nice piece! Sweet and funny and so true! Indeed, the deer is beautiful and graceful, but nothing compares to the personality and attitude of a cat :)

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016

Thank you. The deer are beautiful, but I do love my cats above all animals.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This story is wonderful. Well written, clear, humorous, and entertaining. Deer are indeed beautiful and cats (I have one) are indeed magnificent and "bratty." Marilyn

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016

Thank you . Bratty is a perfect word to describe Blackie. He had no reason to scare the deer away, he just felt like it.

reply by BeasPeas on 13-Aug-2016

I love all animals, but cats--well, they are a real hoot and make life so interesting. Mine keeps me on my toes. The world revolves around her. :)

Comment from Alex Rosel

Excellent

In the early morning hours we often see deer in our yard or down by the pond behind our house. - This is a lovely first sentence. The reader immediately knows this is the telling of a firsthand experience. That is evocative and well crafted.

Your second paragraph moves the tale on from the fun and joy with which you closed the previous paragraph. This is a good technique; your writing is given pace.

Their tails were half raised as if ready to flee... - I didn't know this particular aspect of deer body language. As a writer, you've managed to entertain and inform me. Excellent!

And, being a cat owner myself, I know your words have managed to capture the feline personality perfectly. Another thumbs up from me.

You concluding sentence brings action, and a touch of humour, to the piece. You've covered so many bases in so few words. Economy of word use is a craft well worth possessing.

I enjoyed reading this. Good luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016

Thank you for your great review. I'm so glad you took the time to read and REALLY comment on the story. It is reviewers like you who encourage us new writers. Thank you again.

reply by Alex Rosel on 13-Aug-2016

My pleasure, I enjoyed reading your piece.

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Nice write on the story of the deer and your cat. I think deer are some of the easiest animals to fright. good entry on the prompt, good luck and have a great day.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016

Thank you. Yes, deer are very easy to scare. Blackie was just being a brat and had nothing personal against the deer.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

You managed to turn this into a nice anecdotal piece rather than a staid simple description. Good for you. good subject matter too - the deer not the cat! LOL

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016

Thank you. A good review from you means a lot to me. You are a good honest reviewer.

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

I have to laugh at this. We had a 'guard' cat that guarded her front steps. Huge, neighborhood dogs knew to cross the street rather than pass in front of HER house.
She was black, too.

You write with such fine description that I could imagine the entire scene. I laughed when Blackie sprang up yowling and the deer fled--probably to the next county. haha
I didn't see anything to correct or change.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016

Thank you. Blackie is a brat of a cat. He loves to pick and tease. The other cats get fed up with him at times.

reply by barkingdog on 13-Aug-2016

It sounds like he's the boss. He started with his cat friends and has moved on to deer.
lol

Comment from damommy

Excellent

This is so funny! I love the fact that Blackie was fooling them.

I used to live wayyyy out in the woods, and I had a Great Dane. The deer would come through at stare at him for the longest. One doe could see herself in the French door glass. She'd look at her reflection and then back at the Dane. I don't think she ever figured out he was a dog. LOL.

Love the story. Well written. 8-)

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016

Thank you. I love your little story too. Deer are very curious and it gets them in trouble sometimes.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

We have a lot of deer up at our cabin and I love to watch them. I enjoyed reading your essay /story. I feel like I need to go up and get close to nature

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016

Thank you. We don't have to go anywhere to see deer. We live on a quiet dirt road with no close neighbors and corn fields all around us. Deer paradise.

Comment from light

Excellent

This is a very entertaining story. I could picture the deer with the cat chasing the. That must have been a sight. Great entry for the Beautiful Creatures contest.
Elaine

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016

Thank you. I just had to share this on FanStory. This contest came up and I thought it was the perfect time.

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

Oh, what a wonderful story! You painted the picture so clearly
I could completely envision it! Both the beauty and playfulness
of the deer was captivating. . .and when you brought Blackie
into the picture, I could not help but grin. I especially liked
Blackie yawned to express his contempt for the silly creature.
and . . .then sat down to contemplate his own magnificence!
How true a note that struck :-)

Geat entry in the contest!

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016

Thank you. Yes, Blackie is an arrogant cat and very stuck on himself. He thinks the whole world exists for only him.